Besieged by Ermine White
A Nonet56 total reviews
Comment from dmt1967
This poem paints a picture with its words as well. I can see the wintery scene by listening to your words but the picture added to the vizual scene. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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This poem paints a picture with its words as well. I can see the wintery scene by listening to your words but the picture added to the vizual scene. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Hello dmt!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Diana. This is a beautifully composed poem and I like the comparison to ermine with the leaves visible through the snow. Yes your poem is centered perfectly, but I'm using my laptop. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Hi Diana. This is a beautifully composed poem and I like the comparison to ermine with the leaves visible through the snow. Yes your poem is centered perfectly, but I'm using my laptop. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Hello Marilyn!
So pleased you enjoyed my Nonet!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Brett Matthew West
If one suggestion could be offered it would be eliminate the white space between the first two lines of the nonet. Captures its theme spot on and paints a clear image.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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If one suggestion could be offered it would be eliminate the white space between the first two lines of the nonet. Captures its theme spot on and paints a clear image.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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Hello Brett,
Thank you for stopping by and your suggestion; however, there is no "white space between the first two lines of the nonet." Perhaps you were reading my offering on an iPhone? Would love to know...
Take Care!
diane
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Actually an iPad, and it shows a skipped line between the last word of the first line and the first word of the second line. I will double check on a computer to make sure the iPad is reading wrong and let you know what is discovered. Liked this contest entry a lot.
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Thank you, Brett!
On my iPhone, there is a space between "snowstorm" and "bright." How weird!
Thank you for bringing this to my attention; I am going to add a note on the Author's Notes to alert readers... Ah! Technology! :)
Thank you!
diane
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I just now gave you a shout out in my Author's Notes... :)
No one else mentioned the "wonkiness," but one can never be sure!
diane
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Thank you very much.
Comment from karenina
Lovely Nonet! Your choice of words makes a rather simple form (one of my favorites) quite sophisticated and elegant! Certainly seasonally right on time for me as we've only just had our first snow fall! Your poetic painting is even clearer than your choice of photo!--Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Lovely Nonet! Your choice of words makes a rather simple form (one of my favorites) quite sophisticated and elegant! Certainly seasonally right on time for me as we've only just had our first snow fall! Your poetic painting is even clearer than your choice of photo!--Karenina
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Hello Karenina!
So behind in my replies!
I thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Thank you!
diane
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No problem. I've not been on for several weeks myself. Busy time of year!--Karenina
Comment from Dancemom
Very well written poem about the changing of season from autumn to winter. This a great poem for the nonet contest. Thanks for sharing. Great job and good luck.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Very well written poem about the changing of season from autumn to winter. This a great poem for the nonet contest. Thanks for sharing. Great job and good luck.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Hello Heather!
So pleased you enjoyed!
thank you!
diane
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yeah, that's the thing about a Canadian winter. I'm looking out the window at ten cm of new snow too. I spent yesterday shoveling it. It's doing a lot of damage to any trees that still have leaves. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Yeah, that's the thing about a Canadian winter. I'm looking out the window at ten cm of new snow too. I spent yesterday shoveling it. It's doing a lot of damage to any trees that still have leaves. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Hello Cindy!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Alchera
The crimson autumnal leaves, falling from their petioles, become dead corpses and fertilizers as they are transformed into fertile soil and humus for future green crops...but this perfectly structural nonet describes throughout its beautiful flowing narrative storylined content, the slowly or violent falling movement of the colourfully leaves as they reach to the ground. Many times I, myself, have watched them spellbound behind my window sill. Great work and greetings from Italy
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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The crimson autumnal leaves, falling from their petioles, become dead corpses and fertilizers as they are transformed into fertile soil and humus for future green crops...but this perfectly structural nonet describes throughout its beautiful flowing narrative storylined content, the slowly or violent falling movement of the colourfully leaves as they reach to the ground. Many times I, myself, have watched them spellbound behind my window sill. Great work and greetings from Italy
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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Hello Alchera!
Greetings from northern Michigan!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
I wrote this piece as I was sitting by the windows in our family room yesterday. We have experienced two major winter storms already, and another one - forecast to bring 9" - 12" this evening! Goodness! We never even had the chance to rake leaves before the cold weather hit!
So very pleased my words resonated with you!
Take Care!
diane
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YOU ARE ALWAYS WELCOMED DIANE AND HOPE TO BECOME GOOD SINCERE CULTURAL FANSTORIAN FRIENDS. BLESSINGS
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Blessings Diane
Comment from donette1914
wow this is so good nonet poetry and how fast the seasons do come.
creative and touches a heart
it draws ones in
very well chosen words
and it was a pleasure to read your work
thank you for sharing
hope for the best in the contest
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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wow this is so good nonet poetry and how fast the seasons do come.
creative and touches a heart
it draws ones in
very well chosen words
and it was a pleasure to read your work
thank you for sharing
hope for the best in the contest
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Hello donette!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Ms. Snyder
I enjoyed the vocabulary used, Mrs. KT.
I guess sometimes we can associate something animal-like to weather and it will make sense huh?
Your poem - free verse really caught my attention with the use of the word mottled - not a word you will hear everyday. A great word in fact!
I really enjoyed the winter scene you serve to me.
I also would have envisioned something quite similar without your artwork or pictures added but those were great too! A nice accompaniment. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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I enjoyed the vocabulary used, Mrs. KT.
I guess sometimes we can associate something animal-like to weather and it will make sense huh?
Your poem - free verse really caught my attention with the use of the word mottled - not a word you will hear everyday. A great word in fact!
I really enjoyed the winter scene you serve to me.
I also would have envisioned something quite similar without your artwork or pictures added but those were great too! A nice accompaniment. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Hello Fonda!
So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed my offering! We are inundated with snow at the moment = two ft in the past two days!
Gotta love northern Michigan!
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from Jesse James Doty
The photo is breathtaking. It suits the nonet to a tee. This is well written and describes the poor autumn leaves, heaving, and moaning until, they lie buried, under ermine snow. Sounds sad and yet, it is part of nature, making its course through the seasons. I like the dramatic way you describe this event. The leaves take on human emotions as they brave and are burdened by, the sudden snowstorm. This was enjoyable to read and experience along with the fragile leaves.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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The photo is breathtaking. It suits the nonet to a tee. This is well written and describes the poor autumn leaves, heaving, and moaning until, they lie buried, under ermine snow. Sounds sad and yet, it is part of nature, making its course through the seasons. I like the dramatic way you describe this event. The leaves take on human emotions as they brave and are burdened by, the sudden snowstorm. This was enjoyable to read and experience along with the fragile leaves.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Argghh, Jesse!
I am so far behind in replying to my review!
Please accept my apologies.
I thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
So pleased my words resonated with you!
diane
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Hello Diane.
No worries as far as being behind on your reviews by me. I loved the emotions you gave the beleaguered leaves. You are so welcome for the review. Have a nice weekend.
Take care, Jesse
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Thank you, Jesse!
I was honored by my offering placing first in the contest. I love attempting prescriptive poetic formats.
Happy Thanksgiving!
diane
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Hi Diane.
That is quite a honor. Congratulations. Happy Thanksgiving to you, too.
Jesse
