Embracing the Pain
How much pain do we carry with us? 1,220 words23 total reviews
Comment from Scarbrems
This was a lovely, heartfelt story, told using a realistic voice and a scenario probably played out across many homes. Your philosophies about pain and how it can be dealt with are ones I'm totally in agreeance with. Well done. And yes, great way to get noodles into a story.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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This was a lovely, heartfelt story, told using a realistic voice and a scenario probably played out across many homes. Your philosophies about pain and how it can be dealt with are ones I'm totally in agreeance with. Well done. And yes, great way to get noodles into a story.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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What a blessing this story has been. All of the glory goes to Him! Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review.
Have a great day, and Go bless.
mike
Comment from juliaSjames
I enjoyed reading your story. Grace comes to us in many ways, a vision of Jesus as in your write, the still small voice of the Holy Spirit, a chance meeting with a human angel. Thank you for sharing hope.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I enjoyed reading your story. Grace comes to us in many ways, a vision of Jesus as in your write, the still small voice of the Holy Spirit, a chance meeting with a human angel. Thank you for sharing hope.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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What a blessing this story has been. All the glory goes to Him! Many thanks for your kind words and those shiny 6 stars. They are deeply appreciated.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, Yes, I agree hate is a fruitless sentiment if its all consuming. Sometimes, though, it can be difficult not to harbour that feeling if somebody like this father has hurt you so. I liked your story. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Hi there, Yes, I agree hate is a fruitless sentiment if its all consuming. Sometimes, though, it can be difficult not to harbour that feeling if somebody like this father has hurt you so. I liked your story. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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What a blessing this story has been. All of the glory foes to Him! Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review.
Have a great a day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Papa: clever use of scripture and adding Jesus. I like how
Jesus puts his arms around Taylor. Sweet story for the world.
We need more stories for our community. Smart to add in
the scriptures. Keep sharing jesus. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Papa: clever use of scripture and adding Jesus. I like how
Jesus puts his arms around Taylor. Sweet story for the world.
We need more stories for our community. Smart to add in
the scriptures. Keep sharing jesus. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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What a blessing this story has been. All the glory goes to Him! Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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What a blessing this story has been. All of the glory goes to Him! Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Papa55Mike. I really like the story. You spelled out clearly the plan of salvation. It's an excellent story of redemption and forgiveness. It demonstrates how we can be redeemed by our Savior. Robert
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Hey Papa55Mike. I really like the story. You spelled out clearly the plan of salvation. It's an excellent story of redemption and forgiveness. It demonstrates how we can be redeemed by our Savior. Robert
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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What a blessing this story has been! All the glory goes to Him. Many thanks for your encouraging words and terrific review.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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You're welcome!
Comment from Michele Harber
What a beautiful, reverent and uplifting story. The beginning sets out a sad and interesting scenario, giving the reader no idea of the turn it's going to take. You told your story with the emotion appropriate to each scene, with the right amount of detail, and believable characters. You did a brilliant job with the metaphors of pain as an evil taskmaster, and bitterness as a deadly vine.
I have just a few proofing comments to slightly improve your story:
- When you say, "My beef noodles got cold sitting here alone in the kitchen thinking about ...," it implies that the noodles were the ones sitting and thinking. You can correct that easily by saying, "My beef noodles got cold as I sat here alone in the kitchen thinking about ...."
- When you talk about "alcoholism and bitterness," as they're separate things, you need to use plural pronouns and the "they" verb conjugation.
- "You are crucial to the Father, and I," should say "... and me." If you were to break the sentence apart, you wouldn't say, "You are crucial to I."
- You don't need a comma between "Heavenly" and "Father."
- "She pulls into her arms" left out the word "me."
These are just some minor changes to an otherwise very well done story. I hope you find them useful.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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What a beautiful, reverent and uplifting story. The beginning sets out a sad and interesting scenario, giving the reader no idea of the turn it's going to take. You told your story with the emotion appropriate to each scene, with the right amount of detail, and believable characters. You did a brilliant job with the metaphors of pain as an evil taskmaster, and bitterness as a deadly vine.
I have just a few proofing comments to slightly improve your story:
- When you say, "My beef noodles got cold sitting here alone in the kitchen thinking about ...," it implies that the noodles were the ones sitting and thinking. You can correct that easily by saying, "My beef noodles got cold as I sat here alone in the kitchen thinking about ...."
- When you talk about "alcoholism and bitterness," as they're separate things, you need to use plural pronouns and the "they" verb conjugation.
- "You are crucial to the Father, and I," should say "... and me." If you were to break the sentence apart, you wouldn't say, "You are crucial to I."
- You don't need a comma between "Heavenly" and "Father."
- "She pulls into her arms" left out the word "me."
These are just some minor changes to an otherwise very well done story. I hope you find them useful.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Many thanks for your encouraging words and help with this story. I'll get those fixed. Thanks again!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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You're very welcome, on all counts. Have a lovely evening.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a lovely and inspiring story, my friend. Jesus comes to so many every day and when they are ready - they see and hear Him clearly. I am so happy that this family found the abundant peace of Christ's love and forgiveness. You have a small typo:
"She pulls into her arms" - should be 'she pulls me'.
Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This is a lovely and inspiring story, my friend. Jesus comes to so many every day and when they are ready - they see and hear Him clearly. I am so happy that this family found the abundant peace of Christ's love and forgiveness. You have a small typo:
"She pulls into her arms" - should be 'she pulls me'.
Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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I've already fixed it. Many thanks for your encouraging words and terrific review.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Teri7
Mike, This is a very lovely and great story you have penned about releasing our pain to the Lord. You used very good words and very good scriptures. This touched me today. Please check this one thing out:
She pulls into her arms, and we both begin to weep.
She pulls (me) into her arms.....
Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Mike, This is a very lovely and great story you have penned about releasing our pain to the Lord. You used very good words and very good scriptures. This touched me today. Please check this one thing out:
She pulls into her arms, and we both begin to weep.
She pulls (me) into her arms.....
Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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I've already fixed it. You need to be my agent! I had been reading for a Hammie story, so I threw all of my money onto this one story. It's now the number 5 story on the welcome page and just earned a Well Received award. I can't thank you enough for your faith in my writing for the Lord. He deserves all of the glory!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent story with a powerful message of forgiveness and hope that is expressed in a very realistic way. I would give you six stars if I had it. I enjoyed reading your story that has a powerful spiritual and emotional connection. Keep on writing. God bless!
Bill
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Excellent story with a powerful message of forgiveness and hope that is expressed in a very realistic way. I would give you six stars if I had it. I enjoyed reading your story that has a powerful spiritual and emotional connection. Keep on writing. God bless!
Bill
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Many thanks for your encouraging words and terrific review. The thought of a six means everything.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from country ranch writer
Alcohol has been the downfall for many a man they don't realize life isn't about just that it's family. They have a jacket hide personality. Some never see the light.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Alcohol has been the downfall for many a man they don't realize life isn't about just that it's family. They have a jacket hide personality. Some never see the light.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Many years ago, I watched a friend drink himself to death. He would not listen to anybody until it was too late. Many thanks for your encouraging words and terrific review.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
