my Son
My best friend.34 total reviews
Comment from doggymad1
A fitting tribute to your cherished son. The reason for the four is that I struggled to find much rhyme. Also you used the word together twice in this work which is too short, only my opinion, to allow this to happen
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Freda
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reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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A fitting tribute to your cherished son. The reason for the four is that I struggled to find much rhyme. Also you used the word together twice in this work which is too short, only my opinion, to allow this to happen
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Freda
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Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thanks for your review of "My Son". Your honesty is appreciated. The word "forever" is used in different stanzas. Some poems use the same word in every stanza. the rhyme pattern is the second and fourth line in each stanza. Son/fun, tall/all, above/love, men/friend.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned for the rhyming prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from your words. It is nice to have a son that is your best friend. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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This is a very well written poem you have penned for the rhyming prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from your words. It is nice to have a son that is your best friend. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Thanks Teri, he is a great son. Thanks for your review and five stars.
Comment from karenina
Clear to see why this is a winner! God bless you for being such a loving Dad...to daughters and to your son. I've seen it myself--a father's bond with his son is sacred. May you and he enjoy this closeness forever!--Karenina
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Clear to see why this is a winner! God bless you for being such a loving Dad...to daughters and to your son. I've seen it myself--a father's bond with his son is sacred. May you and he enjoy this closeness forever!--Karenina
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Thank you. No worry he's my man.
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So great!--Karenina
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I love this free verse poem, and I can understand why it won. It's a shame it has been released in the prose section because I think you would have got so many more reviews in the poem section. I hope your daughters don't feel too inferiour. LOL All the best. Ulla :))
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Hi there, I love this free verse poem, and I can understand why it won. It's a shame it has been released in the prose section because I think you would have got so many more reviews in the poem section. I hope your daughters don't feel too inferiour. LOL All the best. Ulla :))
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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I have an extremely close relationship with my daughters also. Tank you for your kind review.
Comment from Michele Harber
What a beautiful poem, and congratulations on your win. My daughter, in her early teens, is only now beginning to realize that I'm her best friend. I aspire to the type of relationship shared by you and your son.
Your poem is simple and direct, and oozes love and pride. Your rhymes all work well. If I had to suggest anything, it would just be to leave space between stanzas, for the visual effect.
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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What a beautiful poem, and congratulations on your win. My daughter, in her early teens, is only now beginning to realize that I'm her best friend. I aspire to the type of relationship shared by you and your son.
Your poem is simple and direct, and oozes love and pride. Your rhymes all work well. If I had to suggest anything, it would just be to leave space between stanzas, for the visual effect.
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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I have an extremely close relationship with all four of my children.
Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome.
You're a lucky man. I have a close relationship with my daughter but, at this age, she doesn't want to admit it. However, it shows every time she needs comfort, or to share exciting news.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Willie P. Smith,
It's a nice piece of poetry having lucid and perfectly matching the theme phraseology, spontaneous and enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and transparently depicting its theme.
That's why the right place - Contest Winner!
CONGRATULATIONS!!
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Hello Willie P. Smith,
It's a nice piece of poetry having lucid and perfectly matching the theme phraseology, spontaneous and enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and transparently depicting its theme.
That's why the right place - Contest Winner!
CONGRATULATIONS!!
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Thank you for your kind words.
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Most Welcome!
~ RP
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Thank you for your very kind words.
Comment from victor 66
Yes, I well understand your affection for your son. I have two sons that are in someways similar and in other ways, not so much. But I love them both equally and I would never want to be put in a position where I would have to choose between the two, because I could not. This is a very sincere and endearing poem and you deserved this win. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Yes, I well understand your affection for your son. I have two sons that are in someways similar and in other ways, not so much. But I love them both equally and I would never want to be put in a position where I would have to choose between the two, because I could not. This is a very sincere and endearing poem and you deserved this win. Best wishes.
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you, much appreciated.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is good and really beautiful. I love the message of this and the awesome relationship shared with father and son. I enjoyed reading this well written offering. Congratulations on your win! Well done!
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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This is good and really beautiful. I love the message of this and the awesome relationship shared with father and son. I enjoyed reading this well written offering. Congratulations on your win! Well done!
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thanks much, I appreciate your remarks.
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a lovely themed poem. Upon reflection, I realised it was actually more about the father's character than that of his son. It's a nice literary construction :)
Congratulations of you contest win.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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This is a lovely themed poem. Upon reflection, I realised it was actually more about the father's character than that of his son. It's a nice literary construction :)
Congratulations of you contest win.
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the congrats and five stars.
Comment from LIJ Red
Contest winner, and justly so, but yet it is posted as a family script, rather than a poem...seems the judges would have noticed...Fanstory do beat all...
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Contest winner, and justly so, but yet it is posted as a family script, rather than a poem...seems the judges would have noticed...Fanstory do beat all...
Comment Written 18-May-2019
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Thank you, I am a very blessed man,