What we are given
We do the best we can.18 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Lo. I don't believe I knew you were an artist too. This art work with the post is signed Lois. ?? That's you, right? LOL Good work. I like it.
Now as for the posting: The entire piece is like watching a train wreck. Yikes! Reading it, I no sooner digested one horrible incident in your life then you told us another. Wow! It reads like a soap opera.
I was surprised by the ending. You are a very strong woman. Bless you, my friend.
You definitely have the makings here for a complete novel were you to handle it right.
Good luck with the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Hi, Lo. I don't believe I knew you were an artist too. This art work with the post is signed Lois. ?? That's you, right? LOL Good work. I like it.
Now as for the posting: The entire piece is like watching a train wreck. Yikes! Reading it, I no sooner digested one horrible incident in your life then you told us another. Wow! It reads like a soap opera.
I was surprised by the ending. You are a very strong woman. Bless you, my friend.
You definitely have the makings here for a complete novel were you to handle it right.
Good luck with the contest. Bob
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Thank you, friend Bob. I appreciate your words so very much. My way of writing this was hard for some to understand. I appreciate that. Sometimes words will only form in their order that seems so mixed up. They are mixed up.
Blessings, Lo
Comment from LaFrance
What a very passionate story and descriptive. I think if you go back and slowly read it you will find ways to clean it up, perhaps adding more details in places and remove details in places. Your story is very strong and powerful well done.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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What a very passionate story and descriptive. I think if you go back and slowly read it you will find ways to clean it up, perhaps adding more details in places and remove details in places. Your story is very strong and powerful well done.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your comments.
I appreciate them.
Blessings, Lo
Comment from heart of Lou
This is about as heartbreaking as it gets. I'm sure it was therapeutic for you to tell your story, and I do hope it helps someone else to stop following this downward path before things get this bad. Peace to you.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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This is about as heartbreaking as it gets. I'm sure it was therapeutic for you to tell your story, and I do hope it helps someone else to stop following this downward path before things get this bad. Peace to you.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Blessings and thanks for your kind words,Lo
Comment from Merajul
I am giving you six for the content of it. It is truly very moving and requires enormous strength, both mental and physical, to handle it.
It is the most engaging story.
All the best.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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I am giving you six for the content of it. It is truly very moving and requires enormous strength, both mental and physical, to handle it.
It is the most engaging story.
All the best.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much. Your words meant a great deal. The stars were a gift I really appreciate. Blessings, Lo
Comment from Ann Marie Anglin
You did the best with what you were given. What an understatement! What a touching story. So much pain and hurt, for all of you. Mental illness is still stigmatized, often unrecognized or acknowledged. I hope someday that will change, so it makes it easier for people to get treatment, and for families to understand that there's no one to blame, it just is. How hurtful it must have been to be accused of abuse, when you'd been such a diligent and sacrificing caregiver. And then to have to watch as someone took advantage of her. I gave this 6 stars because this is a brave story, one of sadness, but also one of hope and forgiveness. All the best. Ann Marie
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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You did the best with what you were given. What an understatement! What a touching story. So much pain and hurt, for all of you. Mental illness is still stigmatized, often unrecognized or acknowledged. I hope someday that will change, so it makes it easier for people to get treatment, and for families to understand that there's no one to blame, it just is. How hurtful it must have been to be accused of abuse, when you'd been such a diligent and sacrificing caregiver. And then to have to watch as someone took advantage of her. I gave this 6 stars because this is a brave story, one of sadness, but also one of hope and forgiveness. All the best. Ann Marie
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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I am so grateful for your kindness, your understanding, the stars, and especially, your insight. Thank you again.
Blessings, Lo
Comment from kiwijenny
Oh Loanna I can't stop crying. Darling woman. I wish this review could hug you and her. Oh I'm praying. Godbless. I'm so glad you turned to God...the light the healer the greatest love ever known
I'm so proud of you
God bless and many hugs...I don't have a six wish I did ...
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Oh Loanna I can't stop crying. Darling woman. I wish this review could hug you and her. Oh I'm praying. Godbless. I'm so glad you turned to God...the light the healer the greatest love ever known
I'm so proud of you
God bless and many hugs...I don't have a six wish I did ...
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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You already know how much I love your words and you, Bless you, Lo
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Hugs dear Lo
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, gosh, you have been through the mill. I am so sorry that life's dished you out a really bad time of it. It makes no sense sometimes, life. It's random unfairness being one of its truly fair things, ironically.
You are an incredible mother to your children. Wonderful, I know you were writing about your lovely daughter and her sad journey, but what hit me between the eyes is your devotion to your family through it all, and I'm so glad you've persevered and have found yourself in a better place today, making peach pies, which is really lovely to read. And it gives this a beautiful redemptive ending for the reader, even though the overall tone of the work is very sad, you lend it dignity and write so sensitively. You have a very moving story here.
Blessings and the only thing I noticed for improvement is below, but it 's minor and if I had seven stars they'd be all yours Loannalois. Ana.
'...The charcoal that helped pump her stomach covered me...'
(I tell most people to cut down on their descriptions and excess words that make prose clunky, but in your case, I would suggest you explain the above sentence more, it's a curiosity that you could expand further on, and it would be interesting to the reader in the context of this narrative.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Hello, gosh, you have been through the mill. I am so sorry that life's dished you out a really bad time of it. It makes no sense sometimes, life. It's random unfairness being one of its truly fair things, ironically.
You are an incredible mother to your children. Wonderful, I know you were writing about your lovely daughter and her sad journey, but what hit me between the eyes is your devotion to your family through it all, and I'm so glad you've persevered and have found yourself in a better place today, making peach pies, which is really lovely to read. And it gives this a beautiful redemptive ending for the reader, even though the overall tone of the work is very sad, you lend it dignity and write so sensitively. You have a very moving story here.
Blessings and the only thing I noticed for improvement is below, but it 's minor and if I had seven stars they'd be all yours Loannalois. Ana.
'...The charcoal that helped pump her stomach covered me...'
(I tell most people to cut down on their descriptions and excess words that make prose clunky, but in your case, I would suggest you explain the above sentence more, it's a curiosity that you could expand further on, and it would be interesting to the reader in the context of this narrative.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your kind and helpful comments, and your willingness to show your insight . I appreciate you more than you know. Blessings, Lo
Comment from Miranda Langston
you are such a brave woman for baring your soul. thank you so much for sharing your story and your daughter's. this is such a sad but touching story and this is actually a strong contender to win the contest
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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you are such a brave woman for baring your soul. thank you so much for sharing your story and your daughter's. this is such a sad but touching story and this is actually a strong contender to win the contest
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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I thank you so much for your kindness, Miranda. Blessings, LoThank you again, Meia. Im so happy you