The Fall
a time for caution35 total reviews
Comment from donette1914
very nice story and this dear one had a good reason to fear the consequences of a sharp fall.
I hope for the best in the contest
it was a honor to read your work
thank you for sharing
donette1914 Aug 2, 2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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very nice story and this dear one had a good reason to fear the consequences of a sharp fall.
I hope for the best in the contest
it was a honor to read your work
thank you for sharing
donette1914 Aug 2, 2018
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Donette. Glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate the good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from giraffmang
hi there,
Great job with this piece, bringing it all together in that final line which raises a smile on the reader's face. nicely put together.
best of luck in the contest.
G
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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hi there,
Great job with this piece, bringing it all together in that final line which raises a smile on the reader's face. nicely put together.
best of luck in the contest.
G
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Thanks, G. Appreciated. Tony
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent. Loved the content and the pace of the story. I can relate to this. I some times walk with a cane and have the exact same fear. The last stanza is such a gem. Fear of falling and of the season change. Hugh
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Excellent. Loved the content and the pace of the story. I can relate to this. I some times walk with a cane and have the exact same fear. The last stanza is such a gem. Fear of falling and of the season change. Hugh
Comment Written 01-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Hugh. Old bones are brittle! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mastery
What a wonderful short story this is, Tony. In 75 words you manage to capture the essence of the old man in his walk, but at the end you capture his thoughts so eloquently. Bravo! Good luck in the contest. :) Bob
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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What a wonderful short story this is, Tony. In 75 words you manage to capture the essence of the old man in his walk, but at the end you capture his thoughts so eloquently. Bravo! Good luck in the contest. :) Bob
Comment Written 01-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Thanks for your encouragement and kind review, Bob. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Aussie
Best wishes for your contest entry; we are all growing old, especially when the liver spots appear. In 75 words you have described the aged man so well. I can relate. unsteady on our feet, watching for a fall on the fallen leaves. We all do it, especially me. I have only one leg. Thanks for sharing my friend.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Best wishes for your contest entry; we are all growing old, especially when the liver spots appear. In 75 words you have described the aged man so well. I can relate. unsteady on our feet, watching for a fall on the fallen leaves. We all do it, especially me. I have only one leg. Thanks for sharing my friend.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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I have enough difficulty on two at times. Managing on one must be quite a challenge. Take it easy! Best wishes, Tony.
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Tony, I have been walking on a prosthesis for 37 years. I am blessed to be still upright. At age 73, I am getting a little dodgy on my so-called tootsies!
Love, Kay.
Comment from CD Richards
Lovely play on words there, Tony. Just a day or two ago, I tripped over something that was where it shouldn't have been in the yard, and my Fall was rather heavy. I landed on the concrete path on my hands, giving my wrists quite a jar. My immediate thought was, "Thank God I didn't land on my face". Later, I thought, "It won't be too long before a fall like that will probably see me end up in hospital." One of the sad things about getting old is how fragile we become. Your poem relays this very well. It's beautifully paced, and tells a lot in a very few words. Great job. Craig
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Lovely play on words there, Tony. Just a day or two ago, I tripped over something that was where it shouldn't have been in the yard, and my Fall was rather heavy. I landed on the concrete path on my hands, giving my wrists quite a jar. My immediate thought was, "Thank God I didn't land on my face". Later, I thought, "It won't be too long before a fall like that will probably see me end up in hospital." One of the sad things about getting old is how fragile we become. Your poem relays this very well. It's beautifully paced, and tells a lot in a very few words. Great job. Craig
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Craig. Glad to hear that not too much damage was done. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction. When we getting older we have to.
take extra precaution.not to fall, it can be devastating and takes a long time to heal when something gets broken.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction. When we getting older we have to.
take extra precaution.not to fall, it can be devastating and takes a long time to heal when something gets broken.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your review and comments, Sandra. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from estory
I enjoyed the O Henry twist at the end of this, as you turn this piece from admiring the season of fall, to an old man trying to avoid a fall. Clever use of a tight space. estory
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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I enjoyed the O Henry twist at the end of this, as you turn this piece from admiring the season of fall, to an old man trying to avoid a fall. Clever use of a tight space. estory
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your review, estory. I?ve always enjoyed O Henry and am duly flattered by the comparison. Best wishes. Tony.
Comment from damommy
Great imagery. In this short piece, you told us all about the man. He's old, has liver-spotted skin, and is afraid of falling. Me, too. I've had more concussions than I have teeth. Explains a lot, doesn't it? lol
This is a great example of short fiction doing its job.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Great imagery. In this short piece, you told us all about the man. He's old, has liver-spotted skin, and is afraid of falling. Me, too. I've had more concussions than I have teeth. Explains a lot, doesn't it? lol
This is a great example of short fiction doing its job.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Yvonne. Me, too - but then I don?t have many teeth!
Comment from country ranch writer
It is the sudden fall that gets us we must always be aware of where we put our feet when we get old. Having to pay attention to where we put our feet keeps us from enjoying other things like trees and leaves and etc.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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It is the sudden fall that gets us we must always be aware of where we put our feet when we get old. Having to pay attention to where we put our feet keeps us from enjoying other things like trees and leaves and etc.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thanks, CRW, both for the review and accurate summary. Best wishes, Tony
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