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21 total reviews
Comment from Artasylum
Hey Chrissy,
Your words capture that beautiful crescent moon perfectly and the whimsy it brings to mind. This is a fun read. I'm looking outside tonight and am disappointed to see a half moon. good job. yours, diana
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hey Chrissy,
Your words capture that beautiful crescent moon perfectly and the whimsy it brings to mind. This is a fun read. I'm looking outside tonight and am disappointed to see a half moon. good job. yours, diana
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hi Diana Thank you for reading my poem and it is interesting to see the differnt shapes as it moves through the cycles. My moon was a 1/4 one when I wrote this quite a lovely one though Cheers Christine
Comment from lyenochka
I like the sense of child-like wonder in the poem looking at the moon. I remember the Alice in Wonderland cartoon where the Cheshire cat disappears and leaves just his smile and that's what the first line brought to mind.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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I like the sense of child-like wonder in the poem looking at the moon. I remember the Alice in Wonderland cartoon where the Cheshire cat disappears and leaves just his smile and that's what the first line brought to mind.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hi lyenochka, Thank you for your review and yes I think we all have child memories especially trying to see the man in the moon LOL Cheers and may your moon be bright tonight Christine
Comment from Gloria ....
Such a wonderfully reflective poem, Christine. Your imagery is vivid with the black sky and smiling moon which of course does mean crescent shaped, and oh how it moves away from sight with a little wistfulness in the viewer.
Title Th (The) Crescent Moon
Another beautiful addition to your NaPo project. I like it. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Such a wonderfully reflective poem, Christine. Your imagery is vivid with the black sky and smiling moon which of course does mean crescent shaped, and oh how it moves away from sight with a little wistfulness in the viewer.
Title Th (The) Crescent Moon
Another beautiful addition to your NaPo project. I like it. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hi Gloria, Thank you and have fixed the Th didnt notice that one so Thanks . I remeber my Dad telling me many years ago that depending on the way the crescent moon appears is how much rain we will get soon and if it is like a smile it means it is full of water and it will rain I always look at it to see this and will say to my family oh not much rain or look our it will be a wet few days. Dad was a farmer so maybe that is why he told me this and the crescent moon reminds me of his words .Cheers Christine
Comment from Susan B. Lamphier
As usual, Christine, excellent work. You do touch onto detail. You are a really talented poet. I'm not sure I could have done half as well with such a topic. Graphc was fine, but I understand what you mean that is was the closest one you could get. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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As usual, Christine, excellent work. You do touch onto detail. You are a really talented poet. I'm not sure I could have done half as well with such a topic. Graphc was fine, but I understand what you mean that is was the closest one you could get. Nicely done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hi Susan, Thank you very much I love writing and putting words together and this moon was so lovely to capture and it looked like a smile just hanging there Cheers Christine
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the moon that is a great source of inspiration, the moon, when it is full and bright we dream of romance in the moonlight, a crescent moon brings a smile to mind.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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A very well-written poem about the moon that is a great source of inspiration, the moon, when it is full and bright we dream of romance in the moonlight, a crescent moon brings a smile to mind.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Hi Sandra, Thanks for your read and review and yes the crescent mon had many shapes and my Dad would say if it looks like a smile it is heavy with water he was a dairy farmer so ai guess he use the moon as a weather predicter Cheers Christine
Comment from royowen
At least you're not writing about "he done me wrong". In fact this is great Christine, an excellent work here, Christine, it's deftly and skilfully written in a lovely lyrical like narrative, in ababccdd octains stanza, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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At least you're not writing about "he done me wrong". In fact this is great Christine, an excellent work here, Christine, it's deftly and skilfully written in a lovely lyrical like narrative, in ababccdd octains stanza, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Hi Roy, Thank you Roy and I love it when you explain how I have written something I just write and unsure of the style or meter I kinda know but it is too taxing to think about Ha Ha Cheers Christine
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Well dine Christine
Comment from Joy Graham
I enjoyed this poem today :) I love gazing at the moon when the weather is warm. I love your presentation. The font you used is pretty and easy enough for me to read. some of them are difficult to decipher letters.
- "...(moons) sits high" - should that be moon? Singular and not plural?
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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I enjoyed this poem today :) I love gazing at the moon when the weather is warm. I love your presentation. The font you used is pretty and easy enough for me to read. some of them are difficult to decipher letters.
- "...(moons) sits high" - should that be moon? Singular and not plural?
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Hi Joy,Thank you for you review and yes the moon is interesting and chamges frequently and hes it should ai will correct that one Cheers Christine xx
Comment from aryr
This was a wonderful poem Christine. Being that I am an avid moon gazer, I just love anything written about it. It was clear and concise and had a great rhyme pattern. The picture was great. Thanks for sharing, well done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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This was a wonderful poem Christine. Being that I am an avid moon gazer, I just love anything written about it. It was clear and concise and had a great rhyme pattern. The picture was great. Thanks for sharing, well done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Hi Ary, Thank you and yes the moon is fascinating at times and this one night it was so lovely bit dissapeared quicky under some clouds no doubt. Cheers Christine
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You are most welcome Christine.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is such a lovely poem. I like the fact that you've drawn your inspiration from something so insignificant and so great at the same time.
The world is full of wonders like this one, but sometimes we are too preoccupied to notice them.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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This is such a lovely poem. I like the fact that you've drawn your inspiration from something so insignificant and so great at the same time.
The world is full of wonders like this one, but sometimes we are too preoccupied to notice them.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Hi Maria, Thank you for your reviewxand beautiful six stars that will go with my moon very nicely . Yes we only have to open our eyes to the wonders on offer Many Cheers my friend Christine
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Comment from Old Soldier
The first two lines are wonderful. Line four I think you mean "Bear" It's a tricky one.
"She is demanding, the moon, the tide rises and flows at her command. Her smile lights the night, just beware of her dark side." Thanks.
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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The first two lines are wonderful. Line four I think you mean "Bear" It's a tricky one.
"She is demanding, the moon, the tide rises and flows at her command. Her smile lights the night, just beware of her dark side." Thanks.
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Hi Old Soldier, Lovey to meet you and Thank you for your review and yes I did mean bear and have now changed it to the right meaning so your eyes are sharp .My Dad was a farmer and he would always say if the crescent moon sits like a smile she is filled with water and expect rain. That was when I was a little girl ( many moons ago) and I always think of him when ai see the smiling moon Cheers Christine
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If you haven't could you give me a read? I would appreciate it. Thanks