This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Joe is Cornered"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from LIJ Red
And I shall walk into the middle of a story and yell "Duh?" Yet the details that make the action realistic supply a lot of answers. England in the day of land barons, with girl ghost partnered to a sturdy yeoman on a quest...excellent writing.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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And I shall walk into the middle of a story and yell "Duh?" Yet the details that make the action realistic supply a lot of answers. England in the day of land barons, with girl ghost partnered to a sturdy yeoman on a quest...excellent writing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much, LIJ, that is so encouraging. That you found the action realistic, is a wonderful compliment. Thank you! :) Sandra xx
Comment from Ric Myworld
Looks like the bad guys are everywhere, but I'm betting on Veronica to come up with a plan to get everyone back to safety. It's nothing a little ammonium nitrate and a match won't heal rather quickly. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Looks like the bad guys are everywhere, but I'm betting on Veronica to come up with a plan to get everyone back to safety. It's nothing a little ammonium nitrate and a match won't heal rather quickly. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for another lovely review, my friend. Veronica is finding it harder this time, but I'm counting on her to come up trumps in the end!! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, I just love this. What a wonderful chapter. I love the scene where Victoria throws stones at the assailants, and they can't see her. Brilliant. Just a minor thing:
then turned and made my way down the lane the in direction the two men had come from. = in the direction the two men had come from. Can't wait to reading on. Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Hi Sandra, I just love this. What a wonderful chapter. I love the scene where Victoria throws stones at the assailants, and they can't see her. Brilliant. Just a minor thing:
then turned and made my way down the lane the in direction the two men had come from. = in the direction the two men had come from. Can't wait to reading on. Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thanks for catching that error, I've been editing so much, it probably came out the wrong way in one of the edits. The brain gives up after a while. LOL. Thanks for the lovely 6 stars, my friend, and the helpful and wonderful review. :) Sandra xx
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I know exactly how it is.You stare yourself blind and just don't see it. xxx
Comment from Douglas Paul
Another great chapter. The story flows seamlessly as usual and I see no errors. I read this yesterday, but waited until today to review so I could give you a 6. Well done, my friend
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Another great chapter. The story flows seamlessly as usual and I see no errors. I read this yesterday, but waited until today to review so I could give you a 6. Well done, my friend
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Aw, that is so nice of you, Douglas, thank you so very much! The six are shinier than ever now I know that. Thank you! I'm really pleased you enjoyed it. Bug hugs, dear friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from wordsfromsue
Sandra, this chapter is AWESOME!
You had me glued to my seat straight through to the end. :-)
A nice, menacing end to the chapter, guaranteed to keep readers turning the page.
Bravo!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Sandra, this chapter is AWESOME!
You had me glued to my seat straight through to the end. :-)
A nice, menacing end to the chapter, guaranteed to keep readers turning the page.
Bravo!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Bless your lovely heart, dear Sue, for all those stars and the lovely words. Aww got to give you an extra hug!! :) Sandra xxxxx
Comment from apky
I thoroughly enjoyed yet another fabulous chapter from the book, Sandra.
And of course you once again had to tease me with that ending, hey?
Brilliant and a definite six star!
When Veronica started throwing her stones, I'd hoped that the attackers would take to their heels, scared of whatever ghosts were assisting Joe. But of course that was wistful thinking.
The furniture was sparse, but Gladys had made the most of what she had to make the whole setting cosy and warm. ~ if you can find another word for the first "made" in the sentence, it would make the sentence better and eliminate your using the word "make" in one and the same sentence, Sndra.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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I thoroughly enjoyed yet another fabulous chapter from the book, Sandra.
And of course you once again had to tease me with that ending, hey?
Brilliant and a definite six star!
When Veronica started throwing her stones, I'd hoped that the attackers would take to their heels, scared of whatever ghosts were assisting Joe. But of course that was wistful thinking.
The furniture was sparse, but Gladys had made the most of what she had to make the whole setting cosy and warm. ~ if you can find another word for the first "made" in the sentence, it would make the sentence better and eliminate your using the word "make" in one and the same sentence, Sndra.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Oh, I need you to sit on my shoulder to make me delve deeper into my creative juices, Aki. lol. What do you think of it now....
The furniture was sparse, but Gladys had arranged the little she had to turn it into a cosy, warm room.
Thank you so much for the lovely review and the six stars, my friend. Biggest hugs for the help!! xxx Sandra
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Perfect, Sandra!
Comment from Aussie
Apologies for not keeping up with your story! From what I have just read, you have improved outa' sight since you started writing this book? What century did this take place? I thought the descriptions of the attack were great and keep on writing my friend. Have spoken to poor Dean!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Apologies for not keeping up with your story! From what I have just read, you have improved outa' sight since you started writing this book? What century did this take place? I thought the descriptions of the attack were great and keep on writing my friend. Have spoken to poor Dean!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for the 6 stars, dear Kay, and the complimenting review!! :)) That's what I love about Fanstory, people are so keen to help you improve. I've really learnt a lot. This story is set in the mid 1800s, so Veronica is having a hard time researching some of the things that have happened. Take a look at the synopsis, the link is at the bottom of is part. Thanks again, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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Well, looks like we will be staying on FS!
Poor Dean, has to have surgery as well as a court appearance. :-0
Comment from l.raven
HI Sandra, I wanted to wait for the sixes to come out....this is an awesome chapter...I wanted to get my gun out and help him...not so happy he is being taken to Sir Creeps manor...but Veronica has to find the kids...but that isn't looking to good either...oh me...oh my...now find the kids and get back to Joe...do you know anyone who might know where they are???...hmmmmm....LOL...well done sweet angel...love your story told...and would love to meet Joe at that house in the picture...just to help him find everyone...smiling...so very well written...love you sooooooo much ...Linda xxoo Hi to Ian...and hope he is ok...
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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HI Sandra, I wanted to wait for the sixes to come out....this is an awesome chapter...I wanted to get my gun out and help him...not so happy he is being taken to Sir Creeps manor...but Veronica has to find the kids...but that isn't looking to good either...oh me...oh my...now find the kids and get back to Joe...do you know anyone who might know where they are???...hmmmmm....LOL...well done sweet angel...love your story told...and would love to meet Joe at that house in the picture...just to help him find everyone...smiling...so very well written...love you sooooooo much ...Linda xxoo Hi to Ian...and hope he is ok...
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Sir Creeps!! LOL,LOL,LOL!!! You are so funny, Linda! Thank you so much for waiting to give it a 6, that means more to me than if I'd posted this part today. But, you always make my sides hurt laughing so much at what you put! LOL, my friend, you really are a gem! Thank you, my lovely friend, you always think of something nice, even though you are in so much pain. Love you lot's, too. Big hugs to you and another for your mother. xxxxx Sandra xx
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your soooooooooo sooooooooooo welcome sweet angel...you make me laugh as well...I needed a couple new bras...either that or a new wheel barrel...kidding...but I did need a couple new bras...and while I was there they still had a lot of Christmas cards on sale...they 90% off...so the box was $5.99...now 59 cents...so I got about 6 or 8 boxes...my mom lost a lot of her Christmas stuff when Irma went through...it will make her happy...she loves glitter cards...and they had some beautiful religious ones...there is always someone with her...but I know she is still so lonely...I had a dream about my father last night...I know it won't come true...he was a live...you have a wonderful day ....love up to the sky...used to tell the grandkids that...LOL...Hi Ian...Love Linda xxoo
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We have bargains like that after Christmas, it's the best time to buy anything, the only trouble is, I've never got any spare cash left after I've bought all the pressies. :( I'm thinking of making my own cards next year and putting my own verse inside. It will be a personal touch. I'll cover yours in chocolate!! lol. Your father, Linda, he is alive. All the time you let him come close in your dreams he is telling you he is still there for you. Love never dies, it stays with you all the time. I felt my husband with me all the time until he knew I was alright. But, he'll wait for me as do all the people we've loved. Hey, I'll get to see you as well!! Go and buy your bras, LOL!! And make sure you get the right size. My mother, bless her heart, heard on the television a young girl calling her boobies rose buds, from that moment on, Mum called hers hanging baskets, LOL, I do so miss her. Big hugs dear friend. xxx
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LOL...LOL...that's funny...hanging baskets...I think I got some good bras...I hope...
ok...just have Joe deliver the chocolate...LOL...or card...
I think it will be wonderful to make your own cards...it truly is a personal touch...my husband gave me cards like that
and I loved it...
I know Pop is with me...I can just feel him here...I do miss him soooo much...still have trouble looking at his picture...breaks my heart...sigh...I just think of how much my mother misses him...
well it's almost dinner...catch ya later my sweet angel...lots of love you...Linda xxoo
Comment from c_lucas
A spirit doesn't have to worry about a physical body. They can go through anything that stands in their way. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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A spirit doesn't have to worry about a physical body. They can go through anything that stands in their way. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much, Charles, sometimes I wish I could do that! lol. I'm pleased you enjoyed it, my friend. xx Sandra x
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is very well written, my friend. The stones were a great idea. I have been gone so much that I'm lost as to what has happened recently, but enjoyed reading anyway. Take care, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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This is very well written, my friend. The stones were a great idea. I have been gone so much that I'm lost as to what has happened recently, but enjoyed reading anyway. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much, Debbie, for this lovely review. I've put a full synopsis on if you want to know what happened to lead up to this point. It's the post before this one. And a link is in my author's notes in this part. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part, thank you. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxxxx