In The Midnight Hours
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Comment from Day Z Chayn
I enjoyed the second stanza most because perhaps when true love is initially found, perhaps it can never truly or otherwise absolutely lost.
~Shane~
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I enjoyed the second stanza most because perhaps when true love is initially found, perhaps it can never truly or otherwise absolutely lost.
~Shane~
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
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Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a lovely poem indeed - appearing written as a tribute to love and the one you love - beautiful in its simple and emotional free verse. My only suggestion would be to change the word "held" to "hold" in the last line...
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In my opinion, a lovely poem indeed - appearing written as a tribute to love and the one you love - beautiful in its simple and emotional free verse. My only suggestion would be to change the word "held" to "hold" in the last line...
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written love poem. Moments with a loved one will always be precious memories we keep safely locked in our minds. We like to.think about them all the time and they slip into our dreams.
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A very well-written love poem. Moments with a loved one will always be precious memories we keep safely locked in our minds. We like to.think about them all the time and they slip into our dreams.
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Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written love poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work and your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very nice and well written love poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work and your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Comment from kiwigirl2821
hello Fastdigits. Oh my but love is in the air. I enjoyed this beautifully written piece of poetic art.
I have to say that I believe one of your "nights" could and possibly should be replaced with something more like: twilight. Maybe the second one:
"playing out in the darkened [twilight] ..."
It just felt like reading more than two nights when in fact there is only two of them. I'm not sure it's possible if you are keeping a syllable count, however to this reader, it made the piece stronger and flowed smoother. Just a thought at any rate.
Good luck in the contest. xoxo Kiwi
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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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hello Fastdigits. Oh my but love is in the air. I enjoyed this beautifully written piece of poetic art.
I have to say that I believe one of your "nights" could and possibly should be replaced with something more like: twilight. Maybe the second one:
"playing out in the darkened [twilight] ..."
It just felt like reading more than two nights when in fact there is only two of them. I'm not sure it's possible if you are keeping a syllable count, however to this reader, it made the piece stronger and flowed smoother. Just a thought at any rate.
Good luck in the contest. xoxo Kiwi
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
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Thank you for stopping by and for your suggestion which I agree totally with and have altered the wording. Stop by again