Knock, Knock, Who's There?
An old lady in trouble.50 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, well Ric, I don't know how this little gem snuck past me without a review. ;-) Anyway I can see you haven't lost your touch. Your voicing is always authentic and with a good dollop of humour.
Congrats on your win. You earned it. Great to see you posting again. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Ha, well Ric, I don't know how this little gem snuck past me without a review. ;-) Anyway I can see you haven't lost your touch. Your voicing is always authentic and with a good dollop of humour.
Congrats on your win. You earned it. Great to see you posting again. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Oh, my, what a pleasant surprise! Just when I've started pouting and feeling sorry for myself, thinking that my friends and usual readers have moved on to bigger, better, and more entertaining posts, I receive your review. YEAH! My friend, Gloria, shows up to save my blahs and put a smile on my face. I wrote this in a few hours before heading off to Atlanta for the week. I knew it needing some serious editing and polishing, but I planned to do it on my iPad before the contest started. So much for that idea, every time I tried to make a correction the story box would freeze up and flip back to the beginning of the story. Damn it! I could delete it or let it fly, but making changes before the contest wasn't happening. I guess, all's well that ends well. Thank you so much for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and extra-special six-star review have me grinning like a possum eating leftover Almas Beluga caviar. :-)
Comment from Linda Hughes
I'm truly glad that I read this most entertaining story this afternoon. It made me laugh from beginning to end. It's well constructed and achieves the element of surprise. Congratulations on the win. Most enjoyable.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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I'm truly glad that I read this most entertaining story this afternoon. It made me laugh from beginning to end. It's well constructed and achieves the element of surprise. Congratulations on the win. Most enjoyable.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Linda Hughes, for taking time to read my story. I typed this on my desktop at home with intentions to edit and polish it on my iPad while in Atlanta for the week. However, it didn't work out that way, since every time I tried to make a change, the story box would lock up and send me back to the beginning. Now, of course, I'm kind of glad I couldn't make changes. Your kind words and extra-special six-star review are greatly appreciated. You have made my week! Heck, who am I kidding, maybe my month! :-)
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Oh, my God, Has Ric finally posted something? Now I know why you don't post much. When you write this well, you don't have too. You seem tho be very familiar with the booking process. A little too familiar.
Your story has a great twist ending. I laughed so loud I scared the cat when I read it. I'm going to read this over and over again. Just in case you make me wait another year and a half before you write again.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Oh, my God, Has Ric finally posted something? Now I know why you don't post much. When you write this well, you don't have too. You seem tho be very familiar with the booking process. A little too familiar.
Your story has a great twist ending. I laughed so loud I scared the cat when I read it. I'm going to read this over and over again. Just in case you make me wait another year and a half before you write again.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Thomas, my friend, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I wrote this story on my desktop at home, with intentions of editing out the mistakes and soft spots on my iPad when I got to Atlanta. However, once i sat down to make corrections, every time I tried to do anything the story box locked up and flipped back up to the beginning. I almost didn't post it, and then I figured what the heck I'll do some polishing when I get home. Now, I'm good for another year. LOL! Glad you liked it. :-)
Comment from pbomar1115
I followed the smoothly, well written story. To find out the old lady murders when she goes to church is hilarious. Although she admitted something in the beginning intuitively to the us readers, she conceals it; meanwhile, you grabbed us/the readers and hold us to the end. Great writing.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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I followed the smoothly, well written story. To find out the old lady murders when she goes to church is hilarious. Although she admitted something in the beginning intuitively to the us readers, she conceals it; meanwhile, you grabbed us/the readers and hold us to the end. Great writing.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Pbomar1115, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. You've made my day. :-)
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You're Welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
I like your humorous analogies and the way Delia took the long route to the wild and crazy end. You kept me in suspense. The granny seemed to get tougher and tougher. good job.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend
I like your humorous analogies and the way Delia took the long route to the wild and crazy end. You kept me in suspense. The granny seemed to get tougher and tougher. good job.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Gypsy, dear, for taking time to read my story. I wrote this at home on my desktop, with intentions of editing and polishing on my iPad when I got to Atlanta. But every time I tried to make a correction, the story box would lock up and skip back to the very beginning. Oh, well, I let her go with the mistakes, fragments, spag and all. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from JennaG
Oh my gosh! The little old lady was guilty all along! I thought she seemed a little rough around the edges, but I had no clue she actually did it. That ending totally caught me by surprise! What a fun story! I was scanning through the list of contest winners today and just came across this. I was thrilled to see that you'd won! I was just thinking the other day that I hadn't read anything from you in a long time and missed your stories. So glad I stumbled upon this one. It was a great read! Keep 'em coming! Congratulations on your win! :)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Oh my gosh! The little old lady was guilty all along! I thought she seemed a little rough around the edges, but I had no clue she actually did it. That ending totally caught me by surprise! What a fun story! I was scanning through the list of contest winners today and just came across this. I was thrilled to see that you'd won! I was just thinking the other day that I hadn't read anything from you in a long time and missed your stories. So glad I stumbled upon this one. It was a great read! Keep 'em coming! Congratulations on your win! :)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Jenna G, for taking time to read my story. This is my first post this year. With the hand surgery and having to hunt and peck using my off hand, I barely can keep up on reviewing. But hope to get back to posting soon. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from humpwhistle
Congratulations on your win, Ric. And sorry about your editing problems.
A complicated story.
I made a few notes as I read.
Peace, Lee
metal jam. -- jamb.
Startled, I push the bowl of pancake batter toward -- The requisite starts the story in the past tense. You switch to the present.
grab the handle and turn the knob just as someone --what 'handle' is this?
Well . . . that is it--I've had enough--and so I go to kicking and screaming, yelling at the top of my lungs. I'm blasting him with every curse word in my vocabulary, and some that aren't. Including a few, I've heard the men say; when they didn't know us women folk were listening.
--This is internalizing. I'd expect this to be in the light grey type, too.
I start twisting and spitting--why 'start'?
Isn't it more active to say I twist and spit for all I'm worth?
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Congratulations on your win, Ric. And sorry about your editing problems.
A complicated story.
I made a few notes as I read.
Peace, Lee
metal jam. -- jamb.
Startled, I push the bowl of pancake batter toward -- The requisite starts the story in the past tense. You switch to the present.
grab the handle and turn the knob just as someone --what 'handle' is this?
Well . . . that is it--I've had enough--and so I go to kicking and screaming, yelling at the top of my lungs. I'm blasting him with every curse word in my vocabulary, and some that aren't. Including a few, I've heard the men say; when they didn't know us women folk were listening.
--This is internalizing. I'd expect this to be in the light grey type, too.
I start twisting and spitting--why 'start'?
Isn't it more active to say I twist and spit for all I'm worth?
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Lee, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words, suggestions, and generous review are greatly appreciated. I intended to make a couple of your suggested changed before posting, and you've even offered one I missed, and another couple I never even thought of. I appreciate you! :-)
Comment from Ulla
Hi Ric, this is a wonderful story with a lovely twist. Congratulations on your win. It is so well deserved. I didn't even notice how long it was. I just read on and then suddenly I was there at the end and with a chuckle as well. Well done. Here's my last six of the week. I'm glad I had it. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Hi Ric, this is a wonderful story with a lovely twist. Congratulations on your win. It is so well deserved. I didn't even notice how long it was. I just read on and then suddenly I was there at the end and with a chuckle as well. Well done. Here's my last six of the week. I'm glad I had it. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Aw, you're so sweet! Thank you so much, Ulla, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous, extra-special, six-star review are greatly appreciated! :-)
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It so so deserves it. :))
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written mystery fiction. No one can belief an old lady can kill someone. There must have been someone who steal her documents to put the blame on her. That is what the police believe now anyway.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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A very well-written mystery fiction. No one can belief an old lady can kill someone. There must have been someone who steal her documents to put the blame on her. That is what the police believe now anyway.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Yes, it's hard for any of us to think a church-going old lady could possibly be a cold-blooded killer. But in today's world, anything can happen. Thank you so much, Sandra du Plessis, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from William Ross
hahaha, sounds like something that could of really happened. i thought it was well written and moves at a good pace. Thanks for the share, a good read. have a great day
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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hahaha, sounds like something that could of really happened. i thought it was well written and moves at a good pace. Thanks for the share, a good read. have a great day
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, William Ross, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)