For the Love of Olive Thomas
The most beautiful ghost in New York45 total reviews
Comment from Donya Quijote
I can offer no suggestions as how to improve your rhyme. I can't rhyme myself out of a paper bag. Not even if my life depended on it. But, I did enjoy this interesting ghost tale. I love ghost stories of all kinds, and Hollywood has many ghosts in its closet. I did not know of this story before reading. Thanks for sharing and an enjoyable rhyming read...
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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I can offer no suggestions as how to improve your rhyme. I can't rhyme myself out of a paper bag. Not even if my life depended on it. But, I did enjoy this interesting ghost tale. I love ghost stories of all kinds, and Hollywood has many ghosts in its closet. I did not know of this story before reading. Thanks for sharing and an enjoyable rhyming read...
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for you very kind review, much appreciated,meia x
Comment from WalkerMan
It is amazing how many entertainment celebrities led dreadful lives full of pain and anguish, generally (but not always) hidden from the public until they were gone. In the videos you listed, plus others posted on the same page, Olive Thomas does indeed look sad in most of her pictures. Given the facts of her life that you reveal in the notes, that makes sense. Your romantic fantasy poem has a plausibility about it, all things considered. I can well imagine how that still relatively young man (even according to the lower life expectancy of that time) might find the thought of being Olive's ghostly companion forever more attractive than his real life prospects for happiness. Your ability to write from a character's point of view (whether that character is historical or not, and even when the person is unsavory, insane, downright evil, or some combination of those) is a rare talent that you have honed to mastery. Well done, and aptly illustrated.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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It is amazing how many entertainment celebrities led dreadful lives full of pain and anguish, generally (but not always) hidden from the public until they were gone. In the videos you listed, plus others posted on the same page, Olive Thomas does indeed look sad in most of her pictures. Given the facts of her life that you reveal in the notes, that makes sense. Your romantic fantasy poem has a plausibility about it, all things considered. I can well imagine how that still relatively young man (even according to the lower life expectancy of that time) might find the thought of being Olive's ghostly companion forever more attractive than his real life prospects for happiness. Your ability to write from a character's point of view (whether that character is historical or not, and even when the person is unsavory, insane, downright evil, or some combination of those) is a rare talent that you have honed to mastery. Well done, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for you very kind review, much appreciated,meia x
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You are welcome, Meia. Your posts are always interesting. -- Mike
Comment from closetpoetjester
Well with a body like that, no wonder he wanted to be with her as it seems did many a man.
A wonderful story of the history of Olive Thomas and it was a most interesting and informative read.
Rhymed impeccably through out, meter bang on except maybe in two spots LOL and my only critique is this rhyming pair was a bit off in my opinion:
We fly through the skies on the waves of the mists
For together we are always at our strongest.
Overall an excellent piece and your notes also were very helpful to complete the story.
Well done
Cheers P
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Well with a body like that, no wonder he wanted to be with her as it seems did many a man.
A wonderful story of the history of Olive Thomas and it was a most interesting and informative read.
Rhymed impeccably through out, meter bang on except maybe in two spots LOL and my only critique is this rhyming pair was a bit off in my opinion:
We fly through the skies on the waves of the mists
For together we are always at our strongest.
Overall an excellent piece and your notes also were very helpful to complete the story.
Well done
Cheers P
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for you very kind review, much appreciated,meia x
Comment from JPilcher
Damn (sorry?!) but I knew this had me "at hello" by the title alone. The picture was a huge plus, but the best part was I was SO NOT disappointed!!! LOVED!!!
Ps: I kept thinking to myself "I bet she's dead.. She has to be dead!!" LOL!!!!! :) <3
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Damn (sorry?!) but I knew this had me "at hello" by the title alone. The picture was a huge plus, but the best part was I was SO NOT disappointed!!! LOVED!!!
Ps: I kept thinking to myself "I bet she's dead.. She has to be dead!!" LOL!!!!! :) <3
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for you very kind review, much appreciated,meia x ps:thankyou so much for the 6, that is truly awesome.your comment made me smile.thanks!
Comment from Lu Saluna
A truly amazing poem, a genuine tribute to Olive Thomas. I admit I did not know the woman's name but I did recognize her face. I also did not know of how horribly she was treated. You have written a beautiful love poem and one can hope she found the love and peace she deserved when she left this life.
Well done
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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A truly amazing poem, a genuine tribute to Olive Thomas. I admit I did not know the woman's name but I did recognize her face. I also did not know of how horribly she was treated. You have written a beautiful love poem and one can hope she found the love and peace she deserved when she left this life.
Well done
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for you very kind review, much appreciated,meia x
Comment from RGstar
Some good detailed work within this write, both from the poem's point of view, as well the authors note. I know of the heroine, as well the follies. It was time of happiness on stage, but much unhappiness off it.
I only have 5 stars left, Meia, but know I think this well done.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Some good detailed work within this write, both from the poem's point of view, as well the authors note. I know of the heroine, as well the follies. It was time of happiness on stage, but much unhappiness off it.
I only have 5 stars left, Meia, but know I think this well done.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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I am really glad you knew some of the history, as that really helps! Thanks so much for your continuing support of my work, it is so very appreciated. kindest regards, Meia :)
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Best wishes, Meia
Comment from F. Wehr3
What a glorious poem and such a tragic real life story. I enjoyed both parts equally. Good rhyme scheme and excellent flow of words.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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What a glorious poem and such a tragic real life story. I enjoyed both parts equally. Good rhyme scheme and excellent flow of words.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Tahnkyou so much for your amazing review!you are so kind , meia :)
Comment from nancyrabbrose
A very interesting poem about an interesting woman. Sad, yet beautiful. Well done. As I have told you in the past, you have a gift to write poetically about history, often about someone that some churchgoers might denigrate or judge. I like the way you find the spirituality in the people and help them "live on" so we can celebrate them and perhaps find a bit of ourselves in them.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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A very interesting poem about an interesting woman. Sad, yet beautiful. Well done. As I have told you in the past, you have a gift to write poetically about history, often about someone that some churchgoers might denigrate or judge. I like the way you find the spirituality in the people and help them "live on" so we can celebrate them and perhaps find a bit of ourselves in them.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much Nancy, I would like to think I can do that, that is the nicest compliment of all :) So very grateful for your review best wishes Meia x
Comment from Kingsrookviii
I love your ability to bring such characters to life for those of us who never heard of such people that you choose to write about. You've done it several times to perfection. This poem is tremendous and haunting. You've painted a gorgeous poem
about a sad historical figure. She was out first movie sex symbol and I thought it was May Pickford, her sister in-law! Wow, just wow girl; can you ever write! I stand amazed, again. Have a good day. Bruce.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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I love your ability to bring such characters to life for those of us who never heard of such people that you choose to write about. You've done it several times to perfection. This poem is tremendous and haunting. You've painted a gorgeous poem
about a sad historical figure. She was out first movie sex symbol and I thought it was May Pickford, her sister in-law! Wow, just wow girl; can you ever write! I stand amazed, again. Have a good day. Bruce.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much Bruce, your comment really cheered me up :) That is what I set out to do but no, wait, a sex symbol BEFORE her was Theda Bara........of which more soon. It is very quiet on here but might post today. Again thankyou so much for your amazing comments, I like to find interesting stories and hopefully make them human and bring them to life. Kindest regards, Meia :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was such an amazing poem, Meia. You tell brilliant stories with your poetry, and all are so well written. I enjoyed the rhyme and rhythm, it was superb. But, what a sad life she led, started by her brothers. I'd never heard of her before, and I think you are right, she should have books written about her. Well done, my friend, another wonderful poem. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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That was such an amazing poem, Meia. You tell brilliant stories with your poetry, and all are so well written. I enjoyed the rhyme and rhythm, it was superb. But, what a sad life she led, started by her brothers. I'd never heard of her before, and I think you are right, she should have books written about her. Well done, my friend, another wonderful poem. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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I am thinking of writing one, there are two and neither are entirely accurate. I have also written poems about Clara Bow and Jean Harlow who were very fragile early stars, Theda Bara the first sex symbol of the screens, and Mae West one of my heroines. I will release them in due course. Thanks so much for your fantastic review much appreciated xxx
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If you can get all the facts and write a true account of her life, I think you should. If your poetry is anything to go by, you would do a good job with her biography. I would be really interested in reading it.
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I have written a fair bit of prose Sandra, the trouble is I am nervous about posting it here. I tend to write about very 'niche' characters, and I have also noticed how harsh the reviews can be on prose....with regards to grammar, the past tense and the present, I sometimes drift in and out, unless I write in the first person. So that is what I tend to do and it can be misjudged. Thankyou so much for your support xmeiax
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When I first started writing my story, I was rubbish. As it progressed it improved because of all those 'harsh' reviews. My book started winning more and more book of the month awards, and I have to tell you, it was through the people on here. I now feel confident enough to get it ready for sending out to agents. The critics on here are not half as harsh as the ones off site. And if you really want to write this book, you will need a thick skin and take as much advice as you can. There are some excellent authors on here, who would help you do this if you really want to do it. They might be 'harsh', LOL, but only through kindness. xxx