A Tangle of Wildflowers
...could hope be?36 total reviews
Comment from Mary Wakeford
A lovely and heartfelt rendering of thoughts that could quietly surface and bob among any one of us on any given day. The image reinforces the freshness of hope coming soon in the form of something beautiful. No offers for improvement. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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A lovely and heartfelt rendering of thoughts that could quietly surface and bob among any one of us on any given day. The image reinforces the freshness of hope coming soon in the form of something beautiful. No offers for improvement. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you Mary, I truly appreciate your thoughts and generous review. I loved your words. They were a poem in themselves.
Have a great weekend:)
Senyai
Comment from Liberty Justice
"Hope is a song my heart dares to sing." This is a lovely poem about hope and faith. One should continue thriving for improvement and never give up hope that life will indeed improve. Poet's heart continues to sing and pray for hope. liberty justice
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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"Hope is a song my heart dares to sing." This is a lovely poem about hope and faith. One should continue thriving for improvement and never give up hope that life will indeed improve. Poet's heart continues to sing and pray for hope. liberty justice
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you Liberty J, I truly appreciate your thoughts and generous review. You have made my day.
Have a great weekend:)
Senyai
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Senyai
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Comment from P1
this is a really lovely piece of writing with
a great message. no matter how bad things
get we should always have hope. pleasure
to read and review your words and good luck
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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this is a really lovely piece of writing with
a great message. no matter how bad things
get we should always have hope. pleasure
to read and review your words and good luck
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you Paige, I truly appreciate your thoughts and generous review. You are very kind.
Have a great weekend:)
Senyai
Comment from Pantygynt
A pleasant discourse on the definition of hope. I particularly liked the last two stanzas that actually attempt to define the true nature of hope. The first part of the poem explains what you are looking for and builds towards the actual definition.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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A pleasant discourse on the definition of hope. I particularly liked the last two stanzas that actually attempt to define the true nature of hope. The first part of the poem explains what you are looking for and builds towards the actual definition.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt, I truly appreciate your thoughts and generous review. Very astute critique. Thanks again.
Have a great weekend:)
Senyai
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Beautifully written! Wonderful sentiment! The rhymes, the meter, the flow, and the message are all top notch. I need all the things you mentioned in your poem. I think most of us do. Well chosen words to describe what you want out of life. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and hopes with me. Good luck with the contest!
Peace, Jesse
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Beautifully written! Wonderful sentiment! The rhymes, the meter, the flow, and the message are all top notch. I need all the things you mentioned in your poem. I think most of us do. Well chosen words to describe what you want out of life. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and hopes with me. Good luck with the contest!
Peace, Jesse
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you Jesse, I truly appreciate your thoughts and generous review. You have made my day. Thanks again.
Have a great weekend:)
Senyai
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Hi Senyai,
I'm glad I made your day. Have a great weekend, yourself!
Jesse
Comment from LIJ Red
Message and rhymes call for meter, in my opinion, but the prompt only says rhyme is demanded. Since rhymes are solid, length is proper, and hope is addressed, excellent.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Message and rhymes call for meter, in my opinion, but the prompt only says rhyme is demanded. Since rhymes are solid, length is proper, and hope is addressed, excellent.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you, LIJRed for your kind words and review.
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
Comment from DR DIP
WhaT A BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN VERSE INDEED! Written in ABAB rhyme format your verses are wonderfully descriptive.Good luck in the writing prompt
dip
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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WhaT A BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN VERSE INDEED! Written in ABAB rhyme format your verses are wonderfully descriptive.Good luck in the writing prompt
dip
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Why, thank you DR DIP, for your kind words and thoughts.... and the good luck :)
Senyai
Comment from jaho58
This is a beautifully written, natural-flowing piece. Good cadence and true rhymes.
Lines I truly felt expressive:
I need the glint of better tomorrows
a crisp answer to uncertainty
hope is air beneath tattered wings (LOVE this one!)
One minor suggestion, change 'Could hope both be a vase....' to
'Could hope be both a vase ....'
Quite lovely and real.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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This is a beautifully written, natural-flowing piece. Good cadence and true rhymes.
Lines I truly felt expressive:
I need the glint of better tomorrows
a crisp answer to uncertainty
hope is air beneath tattered wings (LOVE this one!)
One minor suggestion, change 'Could hope both be a vase....' to
'Could hope be both a vase ....'
Quite lovely and real.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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I wondered about that line, 'Could hope be both a vase ...' Thanks greatly for the tip and kind words, jaho58.
Senyai
Comment from Lannell912
lovely poem makes you wonder ?Hope is a wish with no action words are but tangled strings with everyone pull a different way making them mean what they want but pray comes with a word prayer is a wish that already has a built in action .
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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lovely poem makes you wonder ?Hope is a wish with no action words are but tangled strings with everyone pull a different way making them mean what they want but pray comes with a word prayer is a wish that already has a built in action .
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Hope is a strange thing and even harder to describe. I appreciate your thoughts and kind words :)
Have a great weekend.
Senyai
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Absolutely right.
"Hope is song my heart still dares to sing"
This is the reason I did not enter the contest...this is the best line I have heard and is a winner to me.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Absolutely right.
"Hope is song my heart still dares to sing"
This is the reason I did not enter the contest...this is the best line I have heard and is a winner to me.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Hi Barb. You should enter! There's a few days left and it would be fun. Thank you so much for your thoughts and kind review.
Have a great weekend.
Senyai