When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 71 "Barbara's New Plans "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Sasha
This is a very emotional chapter and you have done a superb job with it. My relationship with my sisters is so bad that if one of them dies, I doubt they will even tell me. I am so pleased you were able to spend some good time with your sister. It makes all the difference in the world. Nice work with this one.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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This is a very emotional chapter and you have done a superb job with it. My relationship with my sisters is so bad that if one of them dies, I doubt they will even tell me. I am so pleased you were able to spend some good time with your sister. It makes all the difference in the world. Nice work with this one.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Val. In Chapter 73, Barb really redeems herself.
Comment from Louise Michelle
I'm using the new version now and it's difficult adjusting. I wanted to point out a spag and now it's hidden by this box.
He('s) has a support
What a pain this is. I had to collapse the box to see your text.
Oh, now I see. When I click back on the posting, the box moves over. Sorry, Shari, this is an adjustment.
Oh, don't be so harsh on Barb. It is a good thing to be able to plan for one's death.
It's wonderful how the two of you were able to reminisce ...sigh, that must have been so bitter/sweet. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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I'm using the new version now and it's difficult adjusting. I wanted to point out a spag and now it's hidden by this box.
He('s) has a support
What a pain this is. I had to collapse the box to see your text.
Oh, now I see. When I click back on the posting, the box moves over. Sorry, Shari, this is an adjustment.
Oh, don't be so harsh on Barb. It is a good thing to be able to plan for one's death.
It's wonderful how the two of you were able to reminisce ...sigh, that must have been so bitter/sweet. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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I fixed the spag. I didn't thing of it as harsh to call her a perfectionist who wanted control. But I see where it's faintly damming too.
Comment from Curly Girly
This was a lovely reunion with your dying sister. The leopard does not change its spots, so I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Suggestions:
"Me too,Shari."
"Me too, Shari."
"He's has a support group here."
"He has a support group here."
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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This was a lovely reunion with your dying sister. The leopard does not change its spots, so I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Suggestions:
"Me too,Shari."
"Me too, Shari."
"He's has a support group here."
"He has a support group here."
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Nicole. I fixed the spags noted. Working on the next chapter now. Remember though, Barby was a kitten before she hit rough times. That's what Dad called her.
Comment from mermaids
I am glad you and Barb were able to makes amends with each other and finally she complimented you. She seems so composed even with a terminal diagnosis, but you said she is always in control of things. Excellent memoire writing that draws the reader into your story.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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I am glad you and Barb were able to makes amends with each other and finally she complimented you. She seems so composed even with a terminal diagnosis, but you said she is always in control of things. Excellent memoire writing that draws the reader into your story.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Elaine. She really complimented Frank, but will compliment my writing before it's all over.
Comment from Eigle Rull
"He's (He) has a support group here."
This chapter was great, my friend. I love it when people get along. And what better way than to remember times together while young. My opinion of your sister is changing. She seems to have a tough shell holding in her real self. This chapter I enjoyed very much. It made me think of things I did as a kid. Boy, I was a little hellion.
Best wishes to you, my good friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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"He's (He) has a support group here."
This chapter was great, my friend. I love it when people get along. And what better way than to remember times together while young. My opinion of your sister is changing. She seems to have a tough shell holding in her real self. This chapter I enjoyed very much. It made me think of things I did as a kid. Boy, I was a little hellion.
Best wishes to you, my good friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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I bet you were. It was nice to see the sister I remembered shed her protective gear. Even better changes are in store.
Comment from Leen1
What an emotional time for memories and forgiveness written in such a way it continues to draw the reader in. It truly captures the depth of a families worries and concerns at a time of inevitable loss of a loved one. I won't comment on the last sentence, because you know you got me once again with that one.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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What an emotional time for memories and forgiveness written in such a way it continues to draw the reader in. It truly captures the depth of a families worries and concerns at a time of inevitable loss of a loved one. I won't comment on the last sentence, because you know you got me once again with that one.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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So glad to hear the emotion came through. To this day, I still can't believe she's gone. Sixty-five years old. Exercised and ate health foods. Go figure.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I truly enjoy your style of writing as it comes across so natural making every read enjoyable and engaging. I giggled lots over the "pee thing" as it brought to mind a whole list of silliness we attribute to sex when we are young and innocent - well back when we were young as I doubt there is much innocence these days LOL. You have a small typo to look at: "maybe I'll buy try it" - I don't think you mean both here. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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I truly enjoy your style of writing as it comes across so natural making every read enjoyable and engaging. I giggled lots over the "pee thing" as it brought to mind a whole list of silliness we attribute to sex when we are young and innocent - well back when we were young as I doubt there is much innocence these days LOL. You have a small typo to look at: "maybe I'll buy try it" - I don't think you mean both here. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thanks for catching the typo. So glad you enjoy my style. Today's children probably figure sex out from watching TV!
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LOL ... if not TV the movies are pretty explicit. It is a far cry from the Ricardo's sleeping in separate beds THAT'S for sure.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent scene between you and Barb in this. You seem to come to an understanding, and each of you have regrets about past behavior. It was great of Barb to admit she was wrong about Frank not having a college degree, and she realizes that college experience isn't the measure of a man. Funny reminiscences of when you and Barb were girls--both interested in the same boy. Pre-planning is terrible to think about, but Barb's observation that she knew she was dying and had time to prepare is a good one to keep in mind. Interesting that Barb talked about her father, but not her mother. Excellent work in this. It's such a vivid portrayal. judi
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Excellent scene between you and Barb in this. You seem to come to an understanding, and each of you have regrets about past behavior. It was great of Barb to admit she was wrong about Frank not having a college degree, and she realizes that college experience isn't the measure of a man. Funny reminiscences of when you and Barb were girls--both interested in the same boy. Pre-planning is terrible to think about, but Barb's observation that she knew she was dying and had time to prepare is a good one to keep in mind. Interesting that Barb talked about her father, but not her mother. Excellent work in this. It's such a vivid portrayal. judi
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much for the sixer, judi , and your detailed comments on the content. You'll find out in the chapter after the presents what Barbara's problem really is.
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You're very welcome. You certainly have strong recollections. judi
Comment from joann r romei
This almost made me cry, the love is there between the both of you. It is so strange, her son wasn't supposed to lived past 18 and he outlived her,
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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This almost made me cry, the love is there between the both of you. It is so strange, her son wasn't supposed to lived past 18 and he outlived her,
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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You're the first to mention the irony of her dying before him. Nothing compliments a writer more than to know his story elicits strong emotions. Thank you again for the exceptional rating.
Shari
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Comment from padumachitta
hi. I wish you and yours a good year to come. I am sorry to have been missing, and not in touch. I think of you often and wonder how the holiday season treated you, hopefully with not too much stress...
I must catch up on your story...you know I enjoy learning about you.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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hi. I wish you and yours a good year to come. I am sorry to have been missing, and not in touch. I think of you often and wonder how the holiday season treated you, hopefully with not too much stress...
I must catch up on your story...you know I enjoy learning about you.
padumachitta
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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I love hearing from you too, pad. How is the house renovation going? You picked a good chapter to play catch-up. A real eye-opener coming up in chapter 73.
I 'm not a Christmas person as far as trees and decorating and wrapping packages go. I make some fuss because of my grandchildren ten and twelve. I guess I probably liked all the Santa stuff when young. Thanksgiving is my favorite holiday. Easter follows.