Act of Endurance
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Comment from lavendermoon14
The structure of this poem is very interesting, and it works well. The descriptions are playful but also work great with this particular style. Excellent job!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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The structure of this poem is very interesting, and it works well. The descriptions are playful but also work great with this particular style. Excellent job!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Though dreamy, chocolate, adventurous, likeable for children, good imagery, flow of thoughts, balanced and appealing; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Though dreamy, chocolate, adventurous, likeable for children, good imagery, flow of thoughts, balanced and appealing; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
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Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, All Aboard, finds the yummy candy locomotive working on down the licorice lined tracks which pass by the fruity gumdrop orchard.........................................................................
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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This poem, All Aboard, finds the yummy candy locomotive working on down the licorice lined tracks which pass by the fruity gumdrop orchard.........................................................................
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
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Comment from country ranch writer
Using ines imagination the candy is on the raikes tea belong to the end of the line with all thoseveats aboard some ones going to get a tummy ache irva tooth ache.
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Using ines imagination the candy is on the raikes tea belong to the end of the line with all thoseveats aboard some ones going to get a tummy ache irva tooth ache.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
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Comment from country ranch writer
Using ines imagination the candy is on the raikes tea belong to the end of the line with all thoseveats aboard some ones going to get a tummy ache irva tooth ache.
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Using ines imagination the candy is on the raikes tea belong to the end of the line with all thoseveats aboard some ones going to get a tummy ache irva tooth ache.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
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Comment from amahra
Loved the poem and adored the artwork. Great for children.
"River dark chocolate it's not muddy, ..." [This line reminds me of the chocolate river in the Willie Wonka story.]
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Loved the poem and adored the artwork. Great for children.
"River dark chocolate it's not muddy, ..." [This line reminds me of the chocolate river in the Willie Wonka story.]
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
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Comment from Boogienights
An interesting poem with great imagery. Anything that involves candy is ok with me. It almost seems like something that came out of a dream. Thanks for sharing.:)
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An interesting poem with great imagery. Anything that involves candy is ok with me. It almost seems like something that came out of a dream. Thanks for sharing.:)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
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Comment from Michaela Moore
I love the magical imagery that appeals to the inner child within me. Such a list of all things exciting and lovely, like a rainstorm of blessings coming at me from the page.
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I love the magical imagery that appeals to the inner child within me. Such a list of all things exciting and lovely, like a rainstorm of blessings coming at me from the page.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
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Comment from Tom Horonzy
Gee, I haven't a clue what to say. I understand so little of what is written. I popped up another piece you wrote, and though better still left me on the side of the road, and that is not to say this isn't good, only that "I" had a hard time understanding it, but then you're from that East Orange of NJ? If so, that explains it somewhat. Just kidding. I was a Trentonian. Good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Gee, I haven't a clue what to say. I understand so little of what is written. I popped up another piece you wrote, and though better still left me on the side of the road, and that is not to say this isn't good, only that "I" had a hard time understanding it, but then you're from that East Orange of NJ? If so, that explains it somewhat. Just kidding. I was a Trentonian. Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
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Comment from Sanku
Magical and fantasy journey like that of Hansel and Gretel who saw a cottage made of chocolate! all those treats would make one dreamy .lovely train ride..
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Magical and fantasy journey like that of Hansel and Gretel who saw a cottage made of chocolate! all those treats would make one dreamy .lovely train ride..
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
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