When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Wedding Preparations "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Shari,
Great description of the apartment - I can really see it.
If Jeff worked as a caregiver, he must have had some good attributes. Oh, I'm reading further and see that you agree. Yes, he's showing a very kind and considerate side at this time.
I'm loving their Halloween wedding theme, LOL.
Oh, dear, I guess all the lovin feelings were too good to last. This is another well written chapter. (But, then, I wouldn't expect less from you.)
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Hi Shari,
Great description of the apartment - I can really see it.
If Jeff worked as a caregiver, he must have had some good attributes. Oh, I'm reading further and see that you agree. Yes, he's showing a very kind and considerate side at this time.
I'm loving their Halloween wedding theme, LOL.
Oh, dear, I guess all the lovin feelings were too good to last. This is another well written chapter. (But, then, I wouldn't expect less from you.)
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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The wedding is one I'll never forget, all bad feelings aside. Unfortunately, hubby can't let go of past grievances.
Comment from alexisleech
Uh, oh indeed! And it was going so well. Good for you making the effort to like Jeff. We all want the best for our children, and it sounds like the guy fell short by quite a way. Your witty sarcasm is one of the things I love about this book, "If Nichole or I fall, we'll be dead!" Notice I didn't mention Jeff." being a classic example.
Your writing is, as always, impeccable, but I'm a bit confused by the time line. You refer to the engagement ring being "something that sparkled after a five-year relationship." but in the earlier paragraph explaining the dog in a 'pet-free rental, you write "She adored the couple and hated to see them move out after a stay of twelve years." Have I missed something?
Alexis x
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Uh, oh indeed! And it was going so well. Good for you making the effort to like Jeff. We all want the best for our children, and it sounds like the guy fell short by quite a way. Your witty sarcasm is one of the things I love about this book, "If Nichole or I fall, we'll be dead!" Notice I didn't mention Jeff." being a classic example.
Your writing is, as always, impeccable, but I'm a bit confused by the time line. You refer to the engagement ring being "something that sparkled after a five-year relationship." but in the earlier paragraph explaining the dog in a 'pet-free rental, you write "She adored the couple and hated to see them move out after a stay of twelve years." Have I missed something?
Alexis x
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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I went back in and reworded the time span to make it clearer. They continued to live in the apartment for several years after marriage. Finally, they had the money to buy a condo. More about that later. Thanks for noting my sarcasm.
Comment from MagKing
Be it biographic or not I love this piece.
I believed I recall reading something similar to this....About the loser boyfriend?
But still, if this be biographical, it's a sad story...And I really feel your hurt.
MagKing
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Be it biographic or not I love this piece.
I believed I recall reading something similar to this....About the loser boyfriend?
But still, if this be biographical, it's a sad story...And I really feel your hurt.
MagKing
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Yep, Jeff keeps showing up in this bio. Thanks for your sympathy.
Comment from walbc
This prose is fascinating. Though the story line is somewhat mundane, you have a knack of making it interesting simply by your unique style of writing. Once I start your stories, I have to finish them. That is the art of a true writer. I look forward to the wedding day. Warm regards, Wendy.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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This prose is fascinating. Though the story line is somewhat mundane, you have a knack of making it interesting simply by your unique style of writing. Once I start your stories, I have to finish them. That is the art of a true writer. I look forward to the wedding day. Warm regards, Wendy.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Mundane for sure. I tried to make this transition piece interesting. So glad I succeeded. More exciting material in the next chapter.
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I look forward to it. Wendy.
Comment from boxergirl
I think you are taking this wedding planning pretty well, Shari. And I can see how Jeff was kind of growing on you. I like your humorous asides. Not surprised things are going to turn south. I would be disappointed if you kept your mouth shut. Lol
reply by the author on 13-May-2015
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I think you are taking this wedding planning pretty well, Shari. And I can see how Jeff was kind of growing on you. I like your humorous asides. Not surprised things are going to turn south. I would be disappointed if you kept your mouth shut. Lol
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 13-May-2015
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I can't believe even now that I didn't let things slide. Frank was just as bad if not worse.
Comment from maggieadams
Oh, you have set the stage for an interesting chapter...did she marry him or did it unravel? It sounds like Jeff was/is a chameleon ...it is so hard to be a other-in-law if you see the big picture better than a daughter. Good job on this chapter.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Oh, you have set the stage for an interesting chapter...did she marry him or did it unravel? It sounds like Jeff was/is a chameleon ...it is so hard to be a other-in-law if you see the big picture better than a daughter. Good job on this chapter.
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thanks, Maggie. Good to see your name again. Are you doing any writing? I miss reading your terrific prose.
Comment from Jay Squires
What couldn't go wrong with the wedding scheduled for Halloween. That was my first thought.
Just as it looked like you and Jeff were hitting it off, with the comics and skulls and noir DVDs, he had to go and insult you. I gather you followed the insult with some action, because you said Nichole yelled at you. Time will tell if he rescores points with you. A good chapter with most of the dialogue being by your daughter with your narrative reaction to it. It gives a touch of distance between her thoughts and your reactions.
I must say, Nichole bears a resemblance to you, especially in the mouth.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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What couldn't go wrong with the wedding scheduled for Halloween. That was my first thought.
Just as it looked like you and Jeff were hitting it off, with the comics and skulls and noir DVDs, he had to go and insult you. I gather you followed the insult with some action, because you said Nichole yelled at you. Time will tell if he rescores points with you. A good chapter with most of the dialogue being by your daughter with your narrative reaction to it. It gives a touch of distance between her thoughts and your reactions.
I must say, Nichole bears a resemblance to you, especially in the mouth.
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I rewrote the ending after your review. The insult and yelling is in the next chapter. Yes, people can still see the resemblance between us. Thank goodness, she inherited her father's nose!
Comment from Selina Stambi
The if-onlys are a huge hook. Dying to know what comes next!
Love,
Sonali
p.s. I'm going to be on and off FS for the next couple of weeks. Will do my best to keep up with the reviewing.
(")Jeff's sister, Ashley, will do my hair in an upsweep(.")
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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The if-onlys are a huge hook. Dying to know what comes next!
Love,
Sonali
p.s. I'm going to be on and off FS for the next couple of weeks. Will do my best to keep up with the reviewing.
(")Jeff's sister, Ashley, will do my hair in an upsweep(.")
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thanks for catching the spag, Sonali, and for updating me on your status. Hope you are well, but just taking a break to work on your book about Harold, maybe?
Shari xox
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Just trying to get caught up on the home, garden, and visitors (family, neighbours, friends, etc) who've been dropping in with food and condolences. A wonderful gesture of love and community - so appreciated - but takes time away from the routine! I've been away a lot since Christmas and the feel like I'll never get caught up. I will, I know ... at some point. FS is the first thing to go when I get backed up - alas!
Comment from Donya Quijote
OMG, what on earth transpired at the rehearsal? Guess families sometimes hang out the dirty laundry. Good job showing your changing opinion regarding Jeff. You from complete dislike but acceptance of your daughter's choice to near friendliness and acceptance as a bonafide son-in-law that you could actually like. He sounds like he has some real talent just not the wherewithal to do something with it.
The apartment sounded nice considering it was rent controlled in California. An intimate little abode.
Growing up with you and desiring to be a star herself, I find it hard to imagine your daughter being as shy as she is often portrayed. Who is your daughter? She seems a little chameleon like. What gives? Feels like there is a conflict between you and her as to how you see her. I guess mothers do that.
Now back the upcoming, shocking event. Staying tuned. Insulted? Yelled at you? Sounds horribly awful. How is your relationship now? Is it still distant?
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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OMG, what on earth transpired at the rehearsal? Guess families sometimes hang out the dirty laundry. Good job showing your changing opinion regarding Jeff. You from complete dislike but acceptance of your daughter's choice to near friendliness and acceptance as a bonafide son-in-law that you could actually like. He sounds like he has some real talent just not the wherewithal to do something with it.
The apartment sounded nice considering it was rent controlled in California. An intimate little abode.
Growing up with you and desiring to be a star herself, I find it hard to imagine your daughter being as shy as she is often portrayed. Who is your daughter? She seems a little chameleon like. What gives? Feels like there is a conflict between you and her as to how you see her. I guess mothers do that.
Now back the upcoming, shocking event. Staying tuned. Insulted? Yelled at you? Sounds horribly awful. How is your relationship now? Is it still distant?
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I don't understand Nichole myself. California changed her or maybe just life's experiences. We are close again now. I know she went through therapy that convinced her the family was dysfunctional. That was several years ago. The past is the past and old wounds are let go. At least, Jeff makes her happy, I hope.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Jeff sounds okay in this chapter, but the last few sentences show trouble ahead. Hurry and write the next installment, since I want to know what the insult was. :)
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Jeff sounds okay in this chapter, but the last few sentences show trouble ahead. Hurry and write the next installment, since I want to know what the insult was. :)
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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To be fair, when I aired it out later with Nichole, she said that was his idea of being funny. You be the judge. Hard to find time to write these days.
