Act of Endurance
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Comment from Marcmir
I'm only doing this for the extra points because I really don't know what to say other than I'm jealous of your perspective on silence. I too wrote something on silence, you would think it's interesting. It doesn't compare to yours though. Thank you for sharing. Seriously!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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I'm only doing this for the extra points because I really don't know what to say other than I'm jealous of your perspective on silence. I too wrote something on silence, you would think it's interesting. It doesn't compare to yours though. Thank you for sharing. Seriously!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Seem the topic silence has found many writers. Appreciate the thought, writes has pits but revisions are occurring on them. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging sentiments.
Comment from Leineco
At the heart of it, there are some thought provoking diamonds in the rough:
- Silence's feet leave sunken footprints of remembrance
- break[s] bread with us daily {and] laughs under stairs
- Raw Silence captures the ear of evolution
- thoughts not said: cause suckers to bleed
- I cry to silence, "Awake, [un]lock the fortress of quiet my hopes" - I never
hear a response back, not from silence, I wait and wait on it..."
But it is very difficult to follow as much of the grammar is challenging. I
applaud your efforts to master the presentation of English and encourage
you to continue on this path, as I think you have potential to express
amazing imagery and complicated thoughts.
Excellent effort :-)
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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At the heart of it, there are some thought provoking diamonds in the rough:
- Silence's feet leave sunken footprints of remembrance
- break[s] bread with us daily {and] laughs under stairs
- Raw Silence captures the ear of evolution
- thoughts not said: cause suckers to bleed
- I cry to silence, "Awake, [un]lock the fortress of quiet my hopes" - I never
hear a response back, not from silence, I wait and wait on it..."
But it is very difficult to follow as much of the grammar is challenging. I
applaud your efforts to master the presentation of English and encourage
you to continue on this path, as I think you have potential to express
amazing imagery and complicated thoughts.
Excellent effort :-)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Wow. Speechless. Not really what was said even though well appreciated for its advice: but the feeling felt as I read. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from Slythytove2
I have to say you have a unique style here, a little like one of those tests-"say the first thing that comes to your mind". I have great difficulty following even one line of this. I thought it might have been me, but I just can't. Sorry.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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I have to say you have a unique style here, a little like one of those tests-"say the first thing that comes to your mind". I have great difficulty following even one line of this. I thought it might have been me, but I just can't. Sorry.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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I feel you, don't feel sorry rejoice, things change so will this. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging inspiration.
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I'll be looking for it.
Comment from Zue65
Your poem explored the different definitions of silence and the different situations where silence can be found. I am not really familiar with this poetic type, it sounds like prose when you read it continuously, but it looks like poetry because of the stanza and the poetical lines. Anyway, you did well, although too many ideas are lumped in one stanza which made the message too stretched.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Your poem explored the different definitions of silence and the different situations where silence can be found. I am not really familiar with this poetic type, it sounds like prose when you read it continuously, but it looks like poetry because of the stanza and the poetical lines. Anyway, you did well, although too many ideas are lumped in one stanza which made the message too stretched.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Thanks for the welcomed response will look into thick stanza. Again, thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Silence is golden. It gives a person time to think about their lives and feel the presence of God nearby. When we go silent God hears us loud and clear.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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A very well-written poem. Silence is golden. It gives a person time to think about their lives and feel the presence of God nearby. When we go silent God hears us loud and clear.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Working on pits in all my writes, glad aspects in this one was somewhat smooth in its read. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from robina1978
Nice artwork that symbolizes silence perfectly, and therefore complements your poem perfectly. You described silence in all its forms, till death. Nice rhyme and flow. Original subject.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Nice artwork that symbolizes silence perfectly, and therefore complements your poem perfectly. You described silence in all its forms, till death. Nice rhyme and flow. Original subject.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Head is for moment swelled, no average rate yet found this revision: but know flaws exist. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging inspiration.
Comment from winnona
The words you used conveyed both the power and strength and of desolation, the words flow from one sentence to another. There are a couple of rough spots that I had trouble with but as a whole I found the poem well written, powerful and moving.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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The words you used conveyed both the power and strength and of desolation, the words flow from one sentence to another. There are a couple of rough spots that I had trouble with but as a whole I found the poem well written, powerful and moving.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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My works holds these pits and I do revisions upon them. Thanking you for generous rate despite those flaws, but mostly your inspiring comments.
Comment from thonnigford09
awesome!!!!! I really appreciate this poem. I love to talk, but silence is a rare commodity these days!!! Real true silence!!! Thanks. Flows well and I would recommend it.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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awesome!!!!! I really appreciate this poem. I love to talk, but silence is a rare commodity these days!!! Real true silence!!! Thanks. Flows well and I would recommend it.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Most of my writes are filled with pits, glad this revision brought pleasing results within your view. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
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Surprising that your writing was filled with pits! I really got a great message!! Thanks.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. I believe this is the second poem of yours that I have read. Your poems kind of boggle a person's mind a little. It is not something one can read quickly and hope to grasp the meaning. Poems that make one slow down and think.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Excellent. I believe this is the second poem of yours that I have read. Your poems kind of boggle a person's mind a little. It is not something one can read quickly and hope to grasp the meaning. Poems that make one slow down and think.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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That's a big statement about a brainless writer within his given conveyances, but I am glad some effects about its aim intention has been disclosed to bring considerations of things certainty of mind. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed insights.
Comment from ericawrites
I couldn't understand
this endlessly rambling
poem.
It's totally confusing,
there's no flow to it.
It's difficult to read, impossible to comprehend.
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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I couldn't understand
this endlessly rambling
poem.
It's totally confusing,
there's no flow to it.
It's difficult to read, impossible to comprehend.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Yeah good old pits, my works has these faults but I am improving: thanking you for over generous rate and inspiring thoughts.