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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Still Waters"poems inspired by Psalm 23
40 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
A perfect form for this spiritual message. Good use of enjambment in the last five lines. I especially liked the references to a whispered wisdom,timeless truth, and sacred vibrations.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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A perfect form for this spiritual message. Good use of enjambment in the last five lines. I especially liked the references to a whispered wisdom,timeless truth, and sacred vibrations.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review, Shari. I appreciate the analysis and your insights. Thank you for pointing out what you liked. Debi
Comment from Terror2s
I love this one, and the picture really complements it well. The format really adds to the imagery of your words. Good alliteration too. "Whispered wisdom" and "shimmering surface", and "timeless truth trickles". T2
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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I love this one, and the picture really complements it well. The format really adds to the imagery of your words. Good alliteration too. "Whispered wisdom" and "shimmering surface", and "timeless truth trickles". T2
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Wow. Thank you for such a terrific review, T2. You touch on several things that I struggled with so it is good to hear what worked. I am pleased you liked it. Thank you. Debi
Comment from Mastery
Hi, debi. What a wonderful poem. The picture you used is striking also. I like the inspiring words you've penned here, my friend:
"a whispered wisdom ripples
timeless truth trickles as
sacred vibrations"
God bless you. Good job all the way through. Bob
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Hi, debi. What a wonderful poem. The picture you used is striking also. I like the inspiring words you've penned here, my friend:
"a whispered wisdom ripples
timeless truth trickles as
sacred vibrations"
God bless you. Good job all the way through. Bob
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Bob. I appreciate the kind words and encouragement. Thank you for pointing out your favorite lines. Debi
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a beautiful presentation in words and artwork. Your syllable count is correct. Your message is great. The flow is really good. No changes needed. I like how the format of this poem allows for the words to slowly diminish as a trickle of water might. Good job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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This is a beautiful presentation in words and artwork. Your syllable count is correct. Your message is great. The flow is really good. No changes needed. I like how the format of this poem allows for the words to slowly diminish as a trickle of water might. Good job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the excellent analysis and your insights about the verse diminishing as a trickle of water might. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from shanat
Superb Nonet! Seems to have that ripple effect that echoes in our ears over and over again, and we never get sick of it! The picture and colour scheme works well, easy on the eyes. Great write thanks for sharing.
Shanat.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Superb Nonet! Seems to have that ripple effect that echoes in our ears over and over again, and we never get sick of it! The picture and colour scheme works well, easy on the eyes. Great write thanks for sharing.
Shanat.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I love the analysis and your insights. Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from Pantygynt
There is an element of the concrete in this piece. The tapering lines reinforce the theme of the drops entering the thirsty soul and the tapered pattern is shattered appropriately by the shorter line "sacred vibrations" giving the effect of a vibration through the water. Masterful. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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There is an element of the concrete in this piece. The tapering lines reinforce the theme of the drops entering the thirsty soul and the tapered pattern is shattered appropriately by the shorter line "sacred vibrations" giving the effect of a vibration through the water. Masterful. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the excellent analysis and encouraging review. Thank you for mentioning the shorter line and the vibration in the water. I wondered if anyone would catch that.
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You're welcome.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Great nonet form but mostly I really like what the poem says - the meaning of it. Great alliteration too. Well done.
~~~Teresa~~~
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Great nonet form but mostly I really like what the poem says - the meaning of it. Great alliteration too. Well done.
~~~Teresa~~~
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Teresa. I am so pleased that the meaning is what you like. The verse is just a package for delivery so I am thrilled the message spoke to you. Debi
Comment from Travis64
Beautiful! Loved the artwork that really ties into this as it really conveys the message in what you have written! A great image emerges in this and the alliteration was an excellent addition to this! Well done!
~Travis64
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Beautiful! Loved the artwork that really ties into this as it really conveys the message in what you have written! A great image emerges in this and the alliteration was an excellent addition to this! Well done!
~Travis64
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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I am honored by your generous six star rating and even more by your generous comments. I am pleased that you enjoyed reading this verse. Thank you for the encouragement. Debi
Comment from artemis53
Such lovely words within a fantastic presentation. We all must drink our fill from the well for the sacred promise of life everlasting.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Such lovely words within a fantastic presentation. We all must drink our fill from the well for the sacred promise of life everlasting.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the insightful review. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts on the theme.
Comment from patcelaw
This is beautifully written and a pleasure to read. It flows well from line to line. May your week be blessed and keep writing.
Patricia
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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This is beautifully written and a pleasure to read. It flows well from line to line. May your week be blessed and keep writing.
Patricia
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Patricia. I am pleased that you enjoyed reading this verse. I appreciate the encouragement to keep writing, too. Debi