Aluminum Splinters
Six sentence story44 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Sometimes it is the small victories that keep us going and inspired. I love the title. The smiles of the proud parents watching and of the players as they extend those innings comes though. It is a fun and worthwhile game.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Sometimes it is the small victories that keep us going and inspired. I love the title. The smiles of the proud parents watching and of the players as they extend those innings comes though. It is a fun and worthwhile game.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Debi,
Thank you for sharing you experiences and thoughts. I appreciate it.
John
Comment from Ric Myworld
I coached baseball for 42 years and loved every day of it, not the parents, just the players and the sport. You seem to be person who knows and loves the game and the children too. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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I coached baseball for 42 years and loved every day of it, not the parents, just the players and the sport. You seem to be person who knows and loves the game and the children too. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Wow, 42 years. What levels? I also coached my daughter in girls softball. That was a lot of fun. The girls bring a different feel to the competition.
Thanks for reading. I appreciate the sharing. John
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I coached from recreational, through Junior high, and high school. However, my heart was always with the younger children in Parks and Rec. The basics and fundamentals learned during those years often carry through the future. It is always a struggle to find parents to step up and make a difference. It's people like you who devote their time, that few of us really have, to make a difference. For those children, John, I'd just like to say THANKS. :-)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You told an amazing story in the few sentences. This reminded me of actually sitting in the stands and hearing the announcer's play by play. Good job and thanks for sharing. Your short piece has a good message.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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You told an amazing story in the few sentences. This reminded me of actually sitting in the stands and hearing the announcer's play by play. Good job and thanks for sharing. Your short piece has a good message.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you jannypan for reading Aluminum Splinter. I appreciate your time and talent. John
Comment from Nosha17
That is what Sport really should be about, teaching kids to have enthusiasm and being inspired, not always winning. Good message and well written. Fitting image. Faye
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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That is what Sport really should be about, teaching kids to have enthusiasm and being inspired, not always winning. Good message and well written. Fitting image. Faye
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you Nosha. I do appreciate you and your time. John
Comment from thee-name
Excellent 6 line writing. Writing was exiting.
( Go Blue Jays go! )
A tremendous effort from the bench warmers thwarted the opponents' momentum as the self- proclaimed Aluminum Splinters rose to the occasion by the banging out hit after hit.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Excellent 6 line writing. Writing was exiting.
( Go Blue Jays go! )
A tremendous effort from the bench warmers thwarted the opponents' momentum as the self- proclaimed Aluminum Splinters rose to the occasion by the banging out hit after hit.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Hmmm, this could be interesting as I'm a die hard Yankee fan!
Thank you for reading and sharing your comments. I appreciate your stopping by. John
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That's my second favorite team.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a solid poem my friend and a very uplifting one. We don't have that sport here, but a game called rounders which children used to play in the playground in their lunch breaks. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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This is a solid poem my friend and a very uplifting one. We don't have that sport here, but a game called rounders which children used to play in the playground in their lunch breaks. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you dmt. Where is "here" that you mention?
John
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I am in England
Comment from Ulla
You write it very well and it has a good flow. You get a lot in, in such a short story.
I will admit I don't have much of a clue about the game, but that doesn't mean it's not worth reading. Well done Ulla
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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You write it very well and it has a good flow. You get a lot in, in such a short story.
I will admit I don't have much of a clue about the game, but that doesn't mean it's not worth reading. Well done Ulla
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you Ulla. That is a great compliment. John
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day John. I take it you are a baseball fan mate. It is great when the lessor name players turn out to be game changers, I just love it when that happens. Great stuff Sir. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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G'day John. I take it you are a baseball fan mate. It is great when the lessor name players turn out to be game changers, I just love it when that happens. Great stuff Sir. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Fez... As always, mate, it's good to hear from you. Thank you for reading. Always appreciated....
John
Comment from Carole Rosa
John, It amazes me how you could compose a six sentence complete story in a paragraph. The sentences are complete with real compassion and meaning for the game of baseball and the more importantly, the game of life. Excellent! Carole
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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John, It amazes me how you could compose a six sentence complete story in a paragraph. The sentences are complete with real compassion and meaning for the game of baseball and the more importantly, the game of life. Excellent! Carole
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you Carole for the fantastic compliments. You're very encouraging.
John
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a nice, six sentence story that gets me excited about the upcoming baseball season. Your story is to the point and action-filled. It is also filled with joy and expectation. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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This is a nice, six sentence story that gets me excited about the upcoming baseball season. Your story is to the point and action-filled. It is also filled with joy and expectation. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Sis Cat, much appreciated. Thank you.
John
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I was shocked to learn online today that baseball had started. I must prepare to post my own baseball story in a week. Thanks for reminding me and thank you for your story. I hope it is a great season.