Shepherd
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Makes Me"poems inspired by Psalm 23
37 total reviews
Comment from Glasstruth
What a beautiful way of seeing yourself, as a part of nature. We're all connected. What's the purpose? Good question, but that's for each individual to figure out. Nice rhyming throughout. Great job! Les
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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What a beautiful way of seeing yourself, as a part of nature. We're all connected. What's the purpose? Good question, but that's for each individual to figure out. Nice rhyming throughout. Great job! Les
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Les, for the insightful review and kind comments. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from flamingstar
"...as birds with wild aspirations fly" reminds me again of Jonathan Livingston Seagull - one of my most treasured books. A simple, sweet and reverent poem!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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"...as birds with wild aspirations fly" reminds me again of Jonathan Livingston Seagull - one of my most treasured books. A simple, sweet and reverent poem!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the very kind comments and generous stars.
Jonathan Livingston Seagull is a wonderful book. I haven't read it in years. It might be time for me to dig it out and read it again.
Comment from mikemagine
Enjoyed this very much! Very smooth and it opened my eyes! What do we notice daily as we drive, walk, bike, or whatever? And what are we grateful for? Do we see a Creator in Nature?
GOOD one!!
Mike
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Enjoyed this very much! Very smooth and it opened my eyes! What do we notice daily as we drive, walk, bike, or whatever? And what are we grateful for? Do we see a Creator in Nature?
GOOD one!!
Mike
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Mike. I am happy you enjoyed this poem. I appreciate the encouraging review. Thank you. Debi
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You got it Debi!!
Comment from ArtGal
The wonders of nature are so beautifully described in this poetry form. It's so uplifting, and I can understand the beauty that you see. I live at a dead end and no homes for miles. We have deer, many groundhogs, coyotes, eagles, pheasants, etc. Sorry, having computer problems, but wanted to read again and write more. Anyway, I love this poem. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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The wonders of nature are so beautifully described in this poetry form. It's so uplifting, and I can understand the beauty that you see. I live at a dead end and no homes for miles. We have deer, many groundhogs, coyotes, eagles, pheasants, etc. Sorry, having computer problems, but wanted to read again and write more. Anyway, I love this poem. . .Sharon
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review. How lucky that you live in a place where you get to observe nature on a daily basis. I am pleased to hear you found this poem uplifting. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
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Debi, you're so very welcome!
Comment from kiwijenny
Partly I think your purpose might be to chronicle these wonders of nature...which you do beautifully....
I love this poem.........well done
God bless
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Partly I think your purpose might be to chronicle these wonders of nature...which you do beautifully....
I love this poem.........well done
God bless
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Hi kiwijenny,
I appreciate the kind comments and encouragement. Thank you. Debi
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading your musings in the form of
mono-rhymed Tercets.
Lovely images throughout.
Poem generates a peaceful feeling in the reader. Nancy
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed reading your musings in the form of
mono-rhymed Tercets.
Lovely images throughout.
Poem generates a peaceful feeling in the reader. Nancy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments, Nancy. I am delighted it generated a peaceful feeling for you and that you enjoyed reading it. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Spitfire
Reminiscent of the Romantic poets who celebrated nature. Nice use of parallel structure. I might suggest a change for bright blue sky as it seems clichéd and redundant. Perhaps a particular shade of blue? A thought provoking ending --that's always a good thing.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Reminiscent of the Romantic poets who celebrated nature. Nice use of parallel structure. I might suggest a change for bright blue sky as it seems clichéd and redundant. Perhaps a particular shade of blue? A thought provoking ending --that's always a good thing.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the suggestion. I'll give it a think. I appreciate the kind comments.
Comment from Tatarka2
I thought this was just about perfect. My understanding of this form is sadly limited, but as far as I can tell you have followed it perfectly. I love the lyrical way you have evoked the experience of the forest here. The reader "sees" what you have seen, and is also aware of your humility and gratitude for the beauty of nature. I'd probably give it a 6 except for the fact that I'm not crazy about the colloquial usage of "makes me, especially in such a spiritual poem. But, please understand that this isn't a criticism at all. It's just a matter of personal taste. Overall, a beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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I thought this was just about perfect. My understanding of this form is sadly limited, but as far as I can tell you have followed it perfectly. I love the lyrical way you have evoked the experience of the forest here. The reader "sees" what you have seen, and is also aware of your humility and gratitude for the beauty of nature. I'd probably give it a 6 except for the fact that I'm not crazy about the colloquial usage of "makes me, especially in such a spiritual poem. But, please understand that this isn't a criticism at all. It's just a matter of personal taste. Overall, a beautiful poem.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the review Tatarka2. I agree with you about "makes me", but I was issued a challenge to start a poem with those two words. I so wanted to put something in front of them because it sounds a bit unnatural to me, but...
I appreciate the kind comments about being able to "see" what I saw, and especially the remarks about it evoking the experience of the forest in a lyrical way. Such comments just make my day. Thank you. Debi
Comment from Nosha17
The wonders of Nature do take your breath away in lovely surroundings, sounds like a pretty place you were with the deer. Excellent use of descriptive language and good imagery and rhyming. Lovely picture to compliment your poem. Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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The wonders of Nature do take your breath away in lovely surroundings, sounds like a pretty place you were with the deer. Excellent use of descriptive language and good imagery and rhyming. Lovely picture to compliment your poem. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging review, Faye. I appreciate it.
Comment from amada
Great musings in this special day. Thank you for sharing it with us. The images that you describe are sweet and melodic. They reach the heart in this busy day. Thanks!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Great musings in this special day. Thank you for sharing it with us. The images that you describe are sweet and melodic. They reach the heart in this busy day. Thanks!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments. I am happy you enjoyed reading it.