The Pride of My Mantle
Free Verse-Contest Entry-21 total reviews
Comment from Donna McNaughton
Yikes! I do hope this is a fictional account! You do a fabulous job of presenting a creepy, yet, cheeky piece of horror and thriller poetry. I love "the sunset's array of bloody color" Keep up the gruesome work!
Yikes! I do hope this is a fictional account! You do a fabulous job of presenting a creepy, yet, cheeky piece of horror and thriller poetry. I love "the sunset's array of bloody color" Keep up the gruesome work!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from victor 66
The presentation of your piece is masterfully done. I love the obvious hints of Halloween. Your poem though bone chilling has a certain sentimental charm towards a cherished loved one. Even a psychopath can love his mother. Very well done. Oh yes, because I fear you, I will vote for you.
The presentation of your piece is masterfully done. I love the obvious hints of Halloween. Your poem though bone chilling has a certain sentimental charm towards a cherished loved one. Even a psychopath can love his mother. Very well done. Oh yes, because I fear you, I will vote for you.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from AAud
Eerie and cool!
If Norman Bates were a poet, he might have written something like this. LOL
This is the type of poem to recite around a campfire. Great job telling a story "between the lines."
Good, creepy fun!
Eerie and cool!
If Norman Bates were a poet, he might have written something like this. LOL
This is the type of poem to recite around a campfire. Great job telling a story "between the lines."
Good, creepy fun!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from RYME4U
This is well written and macabre as well. The descriptions are eerie and clearly expressed. I like this because it can be interpreted in so many ways. Good job!
This is well written and macabre as well. The descriptions are eerie and clearly expressed. I like this because it can be interpreted in so many ways. Good job!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from Sueswrite
Wow. This is awesome! Your wording fit the photo so well. What I want to know is, where do people find such descriptive words? Lol Truthfully, I don't remember learning words like this in school! perfect! Best of Luck to you!
Wow. This is awesome! Your wording fit the photo so well. What I want to know is, where do people find such descriptive words? Lol Truthfully, I don't remember learning words like this in school! perfect! Best of Luck to you!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from adewpearl
Now there is one unusual prized possession LOL
love the play on words with skulduggery LOL
good internal rhyme in lies/no eyes
and nag/hag
good alliteration in mother is missing
what a tale this possession tells :-) Brooke
Now there is one unusual prized possession LOL
love the play on words with skulduggery LOL
good internal rhyme in lies/no eyes
and nag/hag
good alliteration in mother is missing
what a tale this possession tells :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from Eric1
What a deeply haunting and yet motivational free verse entry, the alliteration is excellent,'evidence eliminator, extraordinaire,'and, 'Did I mention that my Mother was missing', truly inspirational. Good luck!
What a deeply haunting and yet motivational free verse entry, the alliteration is excellent,'evidence eliminator, extraordinaire,'and, 'Did I mention that my Mother was missing', truly inspirational. Good luck!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
So very clever and sinister. An unusual entry in a worn out prompt. Way out of the box and refreshing. I doubt there has ever been a horror entry in this prompt. Great fun!!!! NG
So very clever and sinister. An unusual entry in a worn out prompt. Way out of the box and refreshing. I doubt there has ever been a horror entry in this prompt. Great fun!!!! NG
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Is this tales of the Crypt or what!!!!! What a helluva poem you got here. Damn!!! the words are awesome! Lots of words, unusual silver bullet words that kill! I got the creeps and chills as I digested this horror thriller. This is a page from Norman Bates. it's so wickedly good. I'm awestruck. You got some superior words in here. I will bookcase this unit for study. You could not have chosen any words more describing this ... motherly love infatuation. Make a great Halloween poem. I'm fixed on this unspeakable image. Damn!!!!
Is this tales of the Crypt or what!!!!! What a helluva poem you got here. Damn!!! the words are awesome! Lots of words, unusual silver bullet words that kill! I got the creeps and chills as I digested this horror thriller. This is a page from Norman Bates. it's so wickedly good. I'm awestruck. You got some superior words in here. I will bookcase this unit for study. You could not have chosen any words more describing this ... motherly love infatuation. Make a great Halloween poem. I'm fixed on this unspeakable image. Damn!!!!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from granny goes viral
This sounds like something from BBC, which I personally love.
A British Murder Mystery opening for sure.
Recited by a man sitting in a wing chair, his legs crossed in a darkened background and one lit candle. Sounds of wind in in background.
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This sounds like something from BBC, which I personally love.
A British Murder Mystery opening for sure.
Recited by a man sitting in a wing chair, his legs crossed in a darkened background and one lit candle. Sounds of wind in in background.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014