Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A heartfelt write about this religious celebration and we celebrate together in forgiveness and thankfulness, I enjoyed your deeply moving words here Debi, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023

Hi Dolly,
Thank you for your encouraging comments about the writing and your thoughts on the topic. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Debi

Comment from Wendy G

Exceptional

These thoughts were uppermost in my mind this Easter as I reflected on the crucifixion. Both Father and Son suffered beyond what we humans can imagine - but your moving and well-crafted poem gives spiritual insight. It is beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
Wendy

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023

Hi Wendy,
Thank you for the six shiny stars. I appreciate the insight comments about the topic.
Have a great day--if you can. I just read how your week is going. I hope it gets better!
Debi

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Thank you for this beautiful meditation in your swap quatrain, Debi! I agree - God the Father suffered. I have thought how much suffering the Father and the Spirit went through when Jesus came to Earth as a human because that pulled Him away from the perfect harmony of the Trinity. But even more heart-wrenching to see His Son suffer to take on the sins of mankind. Well done!

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023

Hi Helen,
Thank you for your insightful comments. I can't even imagine the suffering they went through.
I hope you had a wonderful Easter.
Debi

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Thanks for sharing the notes, Debi.
-You wrote a very good poem with
effective imagery, rhyme, and swapped lines.
-I like how you personalize this experience
like a father to a son, and how they felt.
-You capture the thoughts of the father ink
verse one, follow with the son, each one
probably feeling similar things but for
different reasons.
-A very good concluding verse.
-Well done; I'm glad you shared it.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023

Hi Pam,
Thank you for the detailed review. Thank you for mentioning the imagery, rhyme and swapped lines, as well as the viewpoint of the poem. I am happy you enjoyed it.
Debi

reply by Pam (respa) on 08-Apr-2023

You are very welcome, Debi, and I appreciate your reply.

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023

Have a wonderful Easter.

reply by Pam (respa) on 09-Apr-2023

Thank you and you do the same.

Comment from jmdg1954

Exceptional

None of us have made the sacrifice the Father made with his son at the crucifixion. We as parents like you wrote made other sacrifices to a much lesser degree which hurt.

Thank you for reposting your poem at Easter.
You and your family, enjoy Easter Sunday tomorrow.

John

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023

Hi John,
Thank you for the amazing six stars. I apapreciate the insightful comments about the Father and Son, and the Easter wishes.
I hope you had a wonderful Easter.
Debi

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

This is one of the very best of these I have read. You get a whole new meaning out of the line each time. Just beautifully done. Wasn't there a contest or something for these. There should have been. Just wonderful and a treat to read. So very well done. mikey

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014

What a nice compliment, Mikey. I am happy you liked it. If there was a contest, I didn't see it. I chose to write in this form because it looked interesting. I hadn't seen it until I read a few that adewpearl wrote in this form. I appreciate encouragement. Thank you. Debi

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with His/heart...dark/dreadful...watched/with/wept. Good eye catching photo followed by a heart touching message.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thank you, Righteous Riter. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a wonderful spiritual poem written in great aabb rhyme. What a wonderful message to share with all the readers.
teresa

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thank you for the kind comments, Teresa. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

w.j., this one is well rhymed in the a-a-b-b and so forth scheme with interesting meter. The approach is creative and not clichéd in the over 2,000 year old story. Well done. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014

Thank you for the gracious review, GracieAnn. I appreciate your continued support and encouragement. I am so pleased you found the approached creative. It is a very old topic. Debi :)

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Exceptional

This is a very beautiful swap quatrain - the words are very well versed. It blends together beautifully - not at all forced or contrived. Lovely picture. Good luck in the contest. Kind Regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014

Thank you so much for the wonderful review, Dorothy. I appreciate the well wishes too.
Thank you so much for the fabulous six stars. They really brighten my day!