Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

You've done very well here. I love this story and you have done an excellent job of using the perfect lines to move through the piece to get the message across. The last two lines sum up beautifully the meaning of the verses. Great job. mikey

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014

Thank you for the wonderful review, Mikey. I am happy you enjoyed it. Thank you for the encouragement. Debi

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi W.J.,

Great story telling in so few words. The artwork helps to compliment or work too. This poem proves that less is more when making the pov.

Well done. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014

Thank you, Jax. I appreciate the generous comments and the well wishes. I didn't realize there was a contest so this is not entered, but I thank you for thinking it was good enough to be. I was writing for the pleasure of writing.
Thank you for the comments about the story telling. You make me feel good about sharing this one.
Debi

Comment from Raphael Montonaro

Excellent

OK the repetition in your lines was wonderful and really made this smaller poem work. Good job in making the spiritual stand out...good job keep writing

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014

Thank you for the encouragement and the kind comments. I appreciate it! Debi

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hi Debi,
I think this was an excellent display of a triolet. Great message, good rhyme scheme and a solid moral that most people will appreciate. The story of the widow and her generosity, is one of my favorite passages of the Bible. Nice work with this piece, best wishes, Bill

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014

Thank you, Bill.
I appreciate the analysis of the poem. I am happy you enjoyed it, especially since it is one of your favorite passages. Mine too. Thank you for the encouragement.
Debi

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Debi,

The very first line grabbed my attention and your notes enhanced the message. Actually, I've known people who feel obligated to give what meager money they have, and I think it's foolish. Of course the principal set out by Jesus is profound and should be followed in moderation. I think giving to charity is important, but taking care of oneself should come first. An analogy would be how on an airplane women are instructed to put on their oxygen mask first and then put it on their children.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014

Hi Lou,

Thank you so much for the excellent review and your insights on the topic. I am happy to hear that first line was an attention getter.

I understand where you are coming from. My dad is an EMT and he has reminded us several times that the rules of rescuing others are in this order:
1. Take care of yourself
2. Take care of your partner
3. Take care of the patient

Otherwise your cannot help anyone.

Wise words you share. Thank you.

Debi

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I love this poem...it is great....I would love to share this...tomorrow for our vacation bible school we are doing the Widows mite..this is so succinct and good and has a lovely flow to it..well done
God bless

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014

Hi Kiwijenny,

I would be honored if you shared my poem. What a wonderful compliment. Thank you for the lovely review and the encouragement. You have me smiling. Debi

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

A nice little write to depict the the non-importance of treasure or possessions in the face of faith and its understanding.

A good depiction and interpretation. Best wishes,
have a great day,
RGstar

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014

Thank you for an encouraging review and your kind comments, RGstar. I appreciate it. Debi

Comment from costellsgirl33

Excellent

"Want was strong, but faith was stronger"

I love the opening of your poem. Such strong and powerful words. The flow was great and your poem is beautifully written and so well put together.

Very nice job

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014

Thank you for the encouraging review, costellsgirl. I appreciate your kind comments and am happy you enjoyed this poem.
Debi

reply by costellsgirl33 on 11-Jun-2014

You are more than welcome my friend.

Arnetta

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

A perfect triolet which tells the bible story of the widow's mite. Want was strong, but faith was stronger. A good line - her needs were not as strong a her faith and she gave what she had. A good triolet, perfect line and rhyme throughout. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014

Hi Dorothy,
Thank you so much for such an encouraging review. I appreciate the kind comments and am so happy to hear you enjoyed the repeating line.
Debi

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

That was a lovely message contained in your poem. To give to charity (as an analogy of the Scripture)which is in excess of one's wealth, is not to forfeit anything. Usually, as in the case of the widow, the poorer sections of the population cannot afford to give money to charity but they do so because of the compassion they feel in their hearts. Your rhymes worked well and it was a smooth flow. Nice illustration. Faye

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014

Thank you for a great review, Faye. I appreciate the comments about the writing and the insights you share about charity. Thank you. Debi