Shepherd
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Not"poems inspired by Psalm 23
51 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You presented your poem perfectly, Debi.
I enjoyed reading it. Great job on the choice
of meaningful words. The finished poem looked
awesome. The cross shape was special as was the
subject of your poem. Awesome work for the Easter season.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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You presented your poem perfectly, Debi.
I enjoyed reading it. Great job on the choice
of meaningful words. The finished poem looked
awesome. The cross shape was special as was the
subject of your poem. Awesome work for the Easter season.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Hi Jan,
thank you the analysis and encouraging comments on this verse and its form. I am happy you enjoyed reading it.
Debi
Comment from Scott Dylan Thomas
Nice job on this new form! I've never heard of it either, but am always amazed at what we create when we place these interesting resrictions on our poetry. The two-word lines really give movement to the poem. The subject matter of your poem also stayed with me. Great imagery!
Take care,
Scott
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Nice job on this new form! I've never heard of it either, but am always amazed at what we create when we place these interesting resrictions on our poetry. The two-word lines really give movement to the poem. The subject matter of your poem also stayed with me. Great imagery!
Take care,
Scott
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Hi Scott,
Thank you for the kind and encouraging comments. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Debi
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An unusual form and I enjoyed your faithful sentiments but this form does not flow so well for me, it seems disjointed, but I expect it was fun to try Debi, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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An unusual form and I enjoyed your faithful sentiments but this form does not flow so well for me, it seems disjointed, but I expect it was fun to try Debi, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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It is different. It is the first form I've seen that is word count instead of syllable.
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Thank you so much for the review and your insights.
Comment from Spitfire
The format fits the subject matter, w.j. . The poem tells us that Jesus was willing to undergo his torture and death because it was his Father's will. Sorry you missed the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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The format fits the subject matter, w.j. . The poem tells us that Jesus was willing to undergo his torture and death because it was his Father's will. Sorry you missed the contest.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Hi Shari,
Thank ou for the excellent analysis of the format and the subject matter. I appreciate your encouragement.
Debi
Comment from lyenochka
What a beautiful trinet poem!! And each stanza forms a cross like the three crosses on Calvary. I love how you covered the contrasts of "not mine but thine" and the middle stanza shows the suffering that began even before Good Friday in the Garden. What Jesus did in complete submission to the Father is a model for us. Loved this Holy Week meditation, Debi!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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What a beautiful trinet poem!! And each stanza forms a cross like the three crosses on Calvary. I love how you covered the contrasts of "not mine but thine" and the middle stanza shows the suffering that began even before Good Friday in the Garden. What Jesus did in complete submission to the Father is a model for us. Loved this Holy Week meditation, Debi!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Hi Helen,
Thank you for the enthusiastic review. I appreciate the comments about the three crosses in the poem and your insights on Holy Week.
Debi
Comment from Bill Schott
This trinet, Not, has the proper formatting and makes a commitment to God to do what He would have for our lives rather than what the flesh would choose.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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This trinet, Not, has the proper formatting and makes a commitment to God to do what He would have for our lives rather than what the flesh would choose.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Hi Bill Schott,
Thank you for the analysis of the verse. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Deib
Comment from pome lover
well, if this form is new to you, you certainly mastered it quickly.
Yout trinet is beautiful as agreed by those who awarded you All Time Best!
Congratulations!
It's a shame you missed the contest. This looks like a winner to me.
Katharine
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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well, if this form is new to you, you certainly mastered it quickly.
Yout trinet is beautiful as agreed by those who awarded you All Time Best!
Congratulations!
It's a shame you missed the contest. This looks like a winner to me.
Katharine
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Hi Katharine,
Thank you for the kind comments about the form and the writing. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi
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you're most welcome.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Thank you for introducing the trinet style of poetry with such a fine example. And its Lenten timing could not be more appropriate. Thanks for sharing this with us. Happy Easter.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you for introducing the trinet style of poetry with such a fine example. And its Lenten timing could not be more appropriate. Thanks for sharing this with us. Happy Easter.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Hi Ginda Simpson,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the timing and the form. Happy Easter to you as well
Comment from Colette
This is an excellent poem and true to form. I too would like to try this type of
poem, maybe sometime in the future. You however have achieved 100% my congratulations.
Colette
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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This is an excellent poem and true to form. I too would like to try this type of
poem, maybe sometime in the future. You however have achieved 100% my congratulations.
Colette
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for the very generous six stars, Colette. I am flattered and very grateful that you enjoyed it. So sorry for the delayed response. Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate you taking the time to read and the kind review. Thank you again for the gold star! Debi
Comment from GracieAnn
Debbie, I do like the form and the way you added your special touch to it. Sometimes contests are not the ultimate goal. You have honored God with your words and that is worth more that a virtual ribbon. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Debbie, I do like the form and the way you added your special touch to it. Sometimes contests are not the ultimate goal. You have honored God with your words and that is worth more that a virtual ribbon. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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I love your review. I agree about the contests. I write because it just seems I can't stop, but I did enjoy learning this new form. It just seemed so suited to something spiritual. Debi