Night play
Nighttime is for peaceful thoughts15 total reviews
Comment from hsnyder0509
Well done! I have a family and can relate to all aspects of this poem. I found myself smiling as I read, remembering different moments with my family. Thank you for that. Back to business. Your piece flows which makes it an easy read but what I really like is how you used 'one by one', putting them on separate lines. It was clever. Thank you for sharing :)
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Well done! I have a family and can relate to all aspects of this poem. I found myself smiling as I read, remembering different moments with my family. Thank you for that. Back to business. Your piece flows which makes it an easy read but what I really like is how you used 'one by one', putting them on separate lines. It was clever. Thank you for sharing :)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Misrael
Your poem gives a sense of peace and contentment and security. I enjoyed the read. Keep up the good work and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Your poem gives a sense of peace and contentment and security. I enjoyed the read. Keep up the good work and keep on writing.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from l.raven
Gretchen, thank you so very much for the wonderful wish....I do find peace in prayer...love your beautiful poem and a stunning picture... so very well written...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so very much for the wonderful wish....I do find peace in prayer...love your beautiful poem and a stunning picture... so very well written...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
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you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from annie-angel
I like this. I like that you carried the theme of "wishing" throughout. The quick pace was effective and fun. I think the forced rhyme hurt it a little bit. Sometimes, even in a rhyming poem, it is okay to have lines that do not rhyme. It sort of breaks things up and makes them more unexpected. Never sacrifice the best word for a word that rhymes. annie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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I like this. I like that you carried the theme of "wishing" throughout. The quick pace was effective and fun. I think the forced rhyme hurt it a little bit. Sometimes, even in a rhyming poem, it is okay to have lines that do not rhyme. It sort of breaks things up and makes them more unexpected. Never sacrifice the best word for a word that rhymes. annie
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Dawn Munro
What serene ambiance and such a lovely cadence to this wonderful poem. (Your author's notes, too, are deeply appreciated.) Very lovely, Gretchen. Thank you for this!
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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What serene ambiance and such a lovely cadence to this wonderful poem. (Your author's notes, too, are deeply appreciated.) Very lovely, Gretchen. Thank you for this!
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Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review. Gretchen
