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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Lord Is"poems inspired by Psalm 23
34 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
This is a beautiful Rondeau with a lovely
theme.
We only need to open our hearts to the Lord
for Him to enter in.
Your form is good as your meter and rhyme
are strong. The repeating line works to accentuate
the theme.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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This is a beautiful Rondeau with a lovely
theme.
We only need to open our hearts to the Lord
for Him to enter in.
Your form is good as your meter and rhyme
are strong. The repeating line works to accentuate
the theme.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Hi Nancyjam,
Thank you for kind and specific analysis and the encouraging comments. I appreciate it.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words are creative, clear and descriptive. The reader found this poem hear felt. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words are creative, clear and descriptive. The reader found this poem hear felt. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Hi Harmony,
Thank you for the kind comments. I appreciate the encouraging remarks aobout the writing. Thank you.
Comment from minopavlic
The is message is clear, the Lord will help those who help themselves, which comes through action. Jeremiah 33;3-call unto me and I will show you great and mighty things which thou knowest not.
Pray that God shows us the way, as together in unity we can make a difference. Thanks for this gift of inspiration .
no_obstacle
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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The is message is clear, the Lord will help those who help themselves, which comes through action. Jeremiah 33;3-call unto me and I will show you great and mighty things which thou knowest not.
Pray that God shows us the way, as together in unity we can make a difference. Thanks for this gift of inspiration .
no_obstacle
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind words. I especially enjoy the quote from Jeremiah. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment from adewpearl
I really like your choice of refrain line
excellent rhyming in rondeau format
excellent use of consistent iambic meter
good use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing from line to line
good alliteration in still small
a beautifully thoughtful poem of faith in excellent rondeau form
Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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I really like your choice of refrain line
excellent rhyming in rondeau format
excellent use of consistent iambic meter
good use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing from line to line
good alliteration in still small
a beautifully thoughtful poem of faith in excellent rondeau form
Brooke
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Thank you for all the encouraging comments. I know it takes practice to learn and get better so I have to start somewhere. I am so happy you liked it and that I got the form correct. Must have had a good teacher.
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You're a sweetheart :-)
Comment from Spitfire
Great use of enjambment in each stanza. "The Lord is found"- each time it's repeated, it adds to the meaning.
Well constructed. Stanza two underlines the power of faith.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Great use of enjambment in each stanza. "The Lord is found"- each time it's repeated, it adds to the meaning.
Well constructed. Stanza two underlines the power of faith.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hi Spitfire,
Thank you for the analysis and encouragement. I appreciate it.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Wow, what a great Rondeau! I once sponsored a contest on that form, it is hard to write, and you've done it brilliantly. Wonderful spirituality in those lines:
No earthly power can compare,
Not thunder, quake, or solar flare.
It's not in wind, or storm, or fire
The Lord is found.
A profound write.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Wow, what a great Rondeau! I once sponsored a contest on that form, it is hard to write, and you've done it brilliantly. Wonderful spirituality in those lines:
No earthly power can compare,
Not thunder, quake, or solar flare.
It's not in wind, or storm, or fire
The Lord is found.
A profound write.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hi Yeltel,
You say such nice things. I appreciate the kind comments about the writing and the message. They are very encouraging. Thank you.
I don't think I've run across your name before. Nice to meet you.
Thank you very much for the six star rating! I am so happy you liked it that much.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Very good poem wj. You followed the instructions very well with a spiritual message that flowed easily and adhered to the expected rhyme. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Very good poem wj. You followed the instructions very well with a spiritual message that flowed easily and adhered to the expected rhyme. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hi Nancy,
It means a lot to have someone that does such an excellent job with form poetry to tell me I got the form correct. I appreciate the comments about the theme as well. Thank you. Debi
Comment from Benny Beeharry
A great writing,so full of faith and yearning for the lord.
Simple ,easy language it takes one down to the end leaving a lot calmness and vivifying feeling behind.
I live it very much.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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A great writing,so full of faith and yearning for the lord.
Simple ,easy language it takes one down to the end leaving a lot calmness and vivifying feeling behind.
I live it very much.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hi Benny,
Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate you mentioning your impressions and the feelings it left you with. Such a wonderful compliment.
And thank you for the six stars! I am truly honored you liked it that much.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Debi - I can't help you out on the form itself - but for me this still was a well penned post, nice strong faith with images and emotions that hold that spiritual feeling to oneness. Overall I enjoyed it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Dear Debi - I can't help you out on the form itself - but for me this still was a well penned post, nice strong faith with images and emotions that hold that spiritual feeling to oneness. Overall I enjoyed it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hi Maureen,
Thank you for the gracious review and the encouraging remarks about the images and emotions. I am so happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from mfowler
I like your rondeau format, and as far as I can tell, it's correct. But, I suspect this message would be good in any format. Your first verse emphasises prayer as the place to find God, the second says God can't be found among earthly power, while your final stanza talks of God being found in the small voice we know as the Holy Spirit. Lovely spiritual writing!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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I like your rondeau format, and as far as I can tell, it's correct. But, I suspect this message would be good in any format. Your first verse emphasises prayer as the place to find God, the second says God can't be found among earthly power, while your final stanza talks of God being found in the small voice we know as the Holy Spirit. Lovely spiritual writing!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the analysis and the very kind words about the spiritual writing. I appreciate the encouragement.