A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "~Betrothed Remains~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
85 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
The minister should have read this poem at the wedding, maybe he would have changed his mind. Truly creepy, and every lines expresses the huge difference between life and death. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
The minister should have read this poem at the wedding, maybe he would have changed his mind. Truly creepy, and every lines expresses the huge difference between life and death. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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They say there is a fine line between love and hate, and a fine love between life and death. I happen to believe that both are true. Strange story, it really piqued my curiosity. That is why I wrote a poem about it.
Thanks for the fantastic review, lancellot!
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Truth is definitely stranger than fiction and there's no doubt about that.
What a well written and morbidly morose tale.
You're such a master of this genre and this is just another example of the high standards you set and maintain.
The animated hand reninds me of reaching out for life and having it unceremoniously snatched from you. (Not unalike the example you quote.)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
Truth is definitely stranger than fiction and there's no doubt about that.
What a well written and morbidly morose tale.
You're such a master of this genre and this is just another example of the high standards you set and maintain.
The animated hand reninds me of reaching out for life and having it unceremoniously snatched from you. (Not unalike the example you quote.)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Thanks, seken58. You pretty much nailed this one, my friend!
Comment from Eleanor Buron
I think his was a very fine gesture brought on by true devotion to his beloved. Good inspiration for your cryptic poem. The visual and moving art enhances the poem which delivers one haunting line after the other!
The third stanza stands out but then all of the stanzas are excellent. Wish I had your talent for rhyming.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
I think his was a very fine gesture brought on by true devotion to his beloved. Good inspiration for your cryptic poem. The visual and moving art enhances the poem which delivers one haunting line after the other!
The third stanza stands out but then all of the stanzas are excellent. Wish I had your talent for rhyming.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much, Eleanor, what a nice thing to say! I am very grateful for your outstanding review. I am also certain your rhyming capabilities are just as well versed as mine.
Thanks so much, again!
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Sad to say, I'm not as well versed as a formalist but learn a lot from GOOD poets - like you!
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is so creepy. I had to shut the sound off - I want to run and hide in a corner. Wonderfully written. Thanks for the nightmares I'm sure to have tonight.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
This is so creepy. I had to shut the sound off - I want to run and hide in a corner. Wonderfully written. Thanks for the nightmares I'm sure to have tonight.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Hah, well, you're very welcome Teresa! And allow me to thank you for this hilarious review..."THANK YOU!"
Seriously, I am very grateful.
Oh yeah, and Pleasant Screams!, heh heh...
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch,
The final Halloween horror poem? A chilly rhyme, it suits the age, with the current fascination with the supernatural.
Patrick
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
Hi Dean Kuch,
The final Halloween horror poem? A chilly rhyme, it suits the age, with the current fascination with the supernatural.
Patrick
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Yep, the last Halloween inspired poem of the year, Patrick. Thanksgiving and Christmas being just around the corner, there's still plenty of inspiration to draw from.
Thanks for the review, my friend.
Comment from boxergirl
I like the imagery and flow of your poem. Strong verbs and adjectives. Great alliteration with C's, a's, h's, etc. I like the old language spread throughout. I enjoyed this one, not too bloody. 8-)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
I like the imagery and flow of your poem. Strong verbs and adjectives. Great alliteration with C's, a's, h's, etc. I like the old language spread throughout. I enjoyed this one, not too bloody. 8-)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, boxergirl, I truly appreciate that.
Yeah, I was doing my best to avoid blood and guts on this particular poem. Dust and cobwebs seemed to be a better fit.
Comment from LeMuseNoir
Another fine and atmospheric verse- it may have been inspired by a modern pop legend - but echoes with fine Gothic style such Romantic poets as Keats and Tennyson.
"Oh cobwebbed crypt-o vaulted shame " - just excellent. A work that understands that grief and remorse are sisters to terror - outstanding.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
Another fine and atmospheric verse- it may have been inspired by a modern pop legend - but echoes with fine Gothic style such Romantic poets as Keats and Tennyson.
"Oh cobwebbed crypt-o vaulted shame " - just excellent. A work that understands that grief and remorse are sisters to terror - outstanding.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much for your wonderful support of this format, LeMuseNoir. I have really appreciated all of your outstanding feedback on this series.
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
Count me among the creeped out, (more so by your poem than by what some grieving soul, half a world away. He apparently had the consent of his betrothed's family, the only other folks that really had a vote in the matter.) With this Halloween offering you have struck just the right tone of eerieness and spell1binding.
Do you suppose "fairies" as you use it here, warrants the use of a possessive apostrophe?
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
Count me among the creeped out, (more so by your poem than by what some grieving soul, half a world away. He apparently had the consent of his betrothed's family, the only other folks that really had a vote in the matter.) With this Halloween offering you have struck just the right tone of eerieness and spell1binding.
Do you suppose "fairies" as you use it here, warrants the use of a possessive apostrophe?
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much for your thoughts on this, Cry, as well as that suggestion. I sincerely appreciate it!
Comment from Hitcher
Cool poem Dean:)
Definitely not your normal wedding day bash, I guess one could say it is Romantic in a Creepy kind of way. Till death does up part kinda sticks out in my mind for some reason though :) I always enjoy your notes mate.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
Cool poem Dean:)
Definitely not your normal wedding day bash, I guess one could say it is Romantic in a Creepy kind of way. Till death does up part kinda sticks out in my mind for some reason though :) I always enjoy your notes mate.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Hah, thanks Hitch, I really appreciate that, my friend!
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Dean, well, I certainly agree with you premise about truth and fiction. I choose to think of Deffy's act as romantic, as long as their was no "Wedding Night". (Yuck!) But, I do understand his reaction to his girlfriends sudden demise. Very interesting, my friend, does this mean you can divorce your dead wife? You know, to finally show her who's boss? Probably something you wouldn't bring up to your live one,...might beat her to the grave, heehee. Enough of that! Nice job on the thought and write, Bill
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
Hello Dean, well, I certainly agree with you premise about truth and fiction. I choose to think of Deffy's act as romantic, as long as their was no "Wedding Night". (Yuck!) But, I do understand his reaction to his girlfriends sudden demise. Very interesting, my friend, does this mean you can divorce your dead wife? You know, to finally show her who's boss? Probably something you wouldn't bring up to your live one,...might beat her to the grave, heehee. Enough of that! Nice job on the thought and write, Bill
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Yeah, Bill, I too hope they did not consummate the marriage. That would be sickening to the Nth degree, LOL!
Thanks for the wonderful review!