Jealously
Jealously is becoming a problem in the relationship15 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
A strong feeling of love acceptance and recognition and powerful emotion of love as bondage is well viewed, connected and exposed with a curious question, nice. 04/810
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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A strong feeling of love acceptance and recognition and powerful emotion of love as bondage is well viewed, connected and exposed with a curious question, nice. 04/810
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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thanks you for reading and reviewing my poem, I appreciate it, Mary
Comment from s.m.kirby
this is a poem with deep emotions that comes from the heart when we are searching for the right thing to do.I like the rhyming of it good work.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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this is a poem with deep emotions that comes from the heart when we are searching for the right thing to do.I like the rhyming of it good work.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the glowing stars, and the wonderful comments.
Comment from emjaihammond
Yes, I think you are right. We can't see for the stars in our eyes, even though our minds may be trying to get us to listen to a still small voice that is telling us to beware.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Yes, I think you are right. We can't see for the stars in our eyes, even though our minds may be trying to get us to listen to a still small voice that is telling us to beware.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thanks for your review and your generous rating.
Comment from Lovinia
Jealousy is an angry, cruel, dependant, controlling emotion. You are best out of this one .... as hard as it may seem .... steer clear! Jealousy is not about love and no relationship can be successful without trust.
A couple of typos:
* "He wants to possess me and feel Im just his, - you need an apostrophe here I'm.
* "but I believe that not what a relationship is."- you need an 's' here: that's.
* "Will he return, please can you tell me/ I love him with a passion, don't you see. - you need a question mark at the end of this line.
* "What can I do I miss his tender kisses,
and he also wants me to be his missus. - you need a question mark here.
* Question mark at end of last line.
Your first verse is exceptional. Your meter is good and your rhyme. Better to drown in tears now than be destroyed by such a control freak. Don't lose your friends.
You evoke strong emotions in your set of quatrains. I love the presentation .... your image is great. Good luck in the contest. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Jealousy is an angry, cruel, dependant, controlling emotion. You are best out of this one .... as hard as it may seem .... steer clear! Jealousy is not about love and no relationship can be successful without trust.
A couple of typos:
* "He wants to possess me and feel Im just his, - you need an apostrophe here I'm.
* "but I believe that not what a relationship is."- you need an 's' here: that's.
* "Will he return, please can you tell me/ I love him with a passion, don't you see. - you need a question mark at the end of this line.
* "What can I do I miss his tender kisses,
and he also wants me to be his missus. - you need a question mark here.
* Question mark at end of last line.
Your first verse is exceptional. Your meter is good and your rhyme. Better to drown in tears now than be destroyed by such a control freak. Don't lose your friends.
You evoke strong emotions in your set of quatrains. I love the presentation .... your image is great. Good luck in the contest. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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LOvina, I must thank you sincerely for the time you spent reviewing my work, something I should have done last night, I appreciate you help in pointing out the typos. Thanks again.
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My pleasure. Others have done it for me ... I love to pass it on. :))) Good luck. Hugs - Lovi xoox
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Such a difficult decision you have chosen as your subject.
All decisions can be life changing for better or worse and this one is no different.
You have portrayed this dilema perfectly and left the ending open-ended. Which is good because who can tell you the answer?
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Such a difficult decision you have chosen as your subject.
All decisions can be life changing for better or worse and this one is no different.
You have portrayed this dilema perfectly and left the ending open-ended. Which is good because who can tell you the answer?
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thanks for the positive review of the poem I appreciate it.