Dancing In The Moonlight
First grandchild poem20 total reviews
Comment from MeganLinton1
Awww! That held so much loving thought and compassion. I don't often read the poems of family because they are too mushy but that was exquisite in its simple elegance. I loved the imagery! Great poem! :)
Best,
Meg
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Awww! That held so much loving thought and compassion. I don't often read the poems of family because they are too mushy but that was exquisite in its simple elegance. I loved the imagery! Great poem! :)
Best,
Meg
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Thank you Meg, I so appreciate your comment. This poem was based on a true story.
Comment from lorijean
Fabulous so full of joy and pride, a lovely way to celebrate the new born, such a lovely poem a pleasure to read, thank you for sharing....
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Fabulous so full of joy and pride, a lovely way to celebrate the new born, such a lovely poem a pleasure to read, thank you for sharing....
Comment Written 10-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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You're most welcome. I'm glad that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debra White
This is really nice Betty. A lovely little snapshot in the life of a proud mother and grandmother. I love how you all danced together - so moving. I feel like I'm there observing as your descriptions and narrative are very effective. The love just oozes through your poem!
Regards, Debra :)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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This is really nice Betty. A lovely little snapshot in the life of a proud mother and grandmother. I love how you all danced together - so moving. I feel like I'm there observing as your descriptions and narrative are very effective. The love just oozes through your poem!
Regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Thank you Debra, it is one of my fondest memories.
Comment from adewpearl
great pairing of photo and poem
This poem really speaks to me - there is no lovelier sight and no more inspiring to me than to see my precious daughter holding her precious son :-) You convey that so well, and your closing moved me to tears :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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great pairing of photo and poem
This poem really speaks to me - there is no lovelier sight and no more inspiring to me than to see my precious daughter holding her precious son :-) You convey that so well, and your closing moved me to tears :-) Brooke
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Aw, thank you so much. It is truly a blessing to have one's poem bring another to tears.
Comment from Gungalo
Fondly I recalled, how once upon a time,
this child's mother was that little girl of mine.
Then wiping the tears from out of my eyes,
bidding the past adieu, inspired by you,
I got up and I danced too.
How wonderful the thoughts that come to us as we dance around in the moonlight, eh? A beautiful write girl that I hope will last forever.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Fondly I recalled, how once upon a time,
this child's mother was that little girl of mine.
Then wiping the tears from out of my eyes,
bidding the past adieu, inspired by you,
I got up and I danced too.
How wonderful the thoughts that come to us as we dance around in the moonlight, eh? A beautiful write girl that I hope will last forever.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much. That little girl is now almost 16. I still see her as that tiny baby being held by her mom.
Comment from expressions9
This is a lovely free verse poem dear writer. You've really captivated the feelings of a grandmother/father for their daughter and newborn grandchild really well. Becoming a grandparent is so wonderful and we do reminisce on when our children were that size :). Your poem is full of imagery with which I certainly can identify!
I liked the closing lines:
"Fondly I recalled, how once upon a time,
this child's mother was that little girl of mine.
Then wiping the tears from out of my eyes,
bidding the past adieu, inspired by you,
I got up and I danced too".
Best wishes ::)
Christine
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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This is a lovely free verse poem dear writer. You've really captivated the feelings of a grandmother/father for their daughter and newborn grandchild really well. Becoming a grandparent is so wonderful and we do reminisce on when our children were that size :). Your poem is full of imagery with which I certainly can identify!
I liked the closing lines:
"Fondly I recalled, how once upon a time,
this child's mother was that little girl of mine.
Then wiping the tears from out of my eyes,
bidding the past adieu, inspired by you,
I got up and I danced too".
Best wishes ::)
Christine
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you Christine for your lovely comments.
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You're welcome Betty :)
Comment from dmt1967
I like the flow of this poem it is not in the least bit jerky the picture is so cute and enhances the poem a lot thank you for sharing well done
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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I like the flow of this poem it is not in the least bit jerky the picture is so cute and enhances the poem a lot thank you for sharing well done
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you for your lovely comments.
Comment from 9999pool
This is such a beautiful tender poem from a mother and granny. The scene of a family where everyone dances with happy tears. Each moment the sight of her dancing brings back memories of how they were small once too.
Excellent write with a tender loving heart of a granny.
Well done. Bravo. out of sixers, so a Virtual ******.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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This is such a beautiful tender poem from a mother and granny. The scene of a family where everyone dances with happy tears. Each moment the sight of her dancing brings back memories of how they were small once too.
Excellent write with a tender loving heart of a granny.
Well done. Bravo. out of sixers, so a Virtual ******.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much! This was my first grandchild, I now have 5.
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Oh my gosh! No wonder you are so elated and happy, smiles.
I have 3 stray beautiful kittens and my hands are tied. But wouldn't mind another one if I have the time!
You must be happily busy babysitting and enjoying time with them too on weekends.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. Congrats too!
Comment from Garry Souders
You brought a tear to my eye as well, I remember so well dancing with my baby and then little girl. She loved me to dance with her, she is now a beautiful twenty one year old woman and still dances with the old man once in a while. How much I love her and your little piece captured it perfectly.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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You brought a tear to my eye as well, I remember so well dancing with my baby and then little girl. She loved me to dance with her, she is now a beautiful twenty one year old woman and still dances with the old man once in a while. How much I love her and your little piece captured it perfectly.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you, I am so glad it brought you happy memories.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
So elegantly simple and powerful. The imagery you captured in each verse was lovely and you drew me into the picture and the message effortlessly. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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So elegantly simple and powerful. The imagery you captured in each verse was lovely and you drew me into the picture and the message effortlessly. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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You are welcome, thank you for your wonderful comments.
