All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "When Will I Learn?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Opal H.
Trust. Goes hand in hand with hope. Funny that your last piece must also mention Hope. Nice poem, with its touch of wry humor.
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Trust. Goes hand in hand with hope. Funny that your last piece must also mention Hope. Nice poem, with its touch of wry humor.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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must be 'hope' week, hmm?
Comment from vkmack
I fell for it, too. I thought this was going to be a tale of desperate drought days! I love the determined doubt here and the self-effacement at the end. There are so many wonderful lines here: your descriptions of the clouds, the "folded valleys" (brilliant), "the silky feel of rain," and on and on. Luscious language. The lack of punctuation adds to the immediacy and the humor. Wonderful. Wish I had six stars to give you!
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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I fell for it, too. I thought this was going to be a tale of desperate drought days! I love the determined doubt here and the self-effacement at the end. There are so many wonderful lines here: your descriptions of the clouds, the "folded valleys" (brilliant), "the silky feel of rain," and on and on. Luscious language. The lack of punctuation adds to the immediacy and the humor. Wonderful. Wish I had six stars to give you!
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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hey vk - glad you liked this one too!! :)Sharyn
Comment from Spitfire
Wonderful alliteration and assonance in this. Great story line and theme too. Every day, the weather man predicts 60% chance of rain. Never happens. Sigh. I get out the hose and water.
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Wonderful alliteration and assonance in this. Great story line and theme too. Every day, the weather man predicts 60% chance of rain. Never happens. Sigh. I get out the hose and water.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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It makes me laugh - the games we play in our heads! thx spits! :)))
Comment from Sasha
I really enjoyed this one. Excellent work and oh, so true. When will we learn? Seems we forget all to quickly, don't we?
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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I really enjoyed this one. Excellent work and oh, so true. When will we learn? Seems we forget all to quickly, don't we?
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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We do indeed - gets worse as you get older, instead of better! :))
Comment from JM daSilva
The images that came to my mind. Sometimes sexy, sometimes faith, sometimes trusting that things will change. Wow, you got a lot of me from one poem. Thanks.
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The images that came to my mind. Sometimes sexy, sometimes faith, sometimes trusting that things will change. Wow, you got a lot of me from one poem. Thanks.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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and glad I did, too, Joe! :))S
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Great.
Comment from angelmagnet
This strikes a familiar note in my life. No matter how often I am reassured that all will be fine and everything comes in its own time, I still find myself doing something that I know I shouldn't be doing. Usually, it ends up looking like crying over spilled milk. When will we learn? Smiles, Cindy
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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This strikes a familiar note in my life. No matter how often I am reassured that all will be fine and everything comes in its own time, I still find myself doing something that I know I shouldn't be doing. Usually, it ends up looking like crying over spilled milk. When will we learn? Smiles, Cindy
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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probably never, Cindy - I guess that's what makes life interesting, hmm? :)))S
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you may be right :-)
Comment from Gungalo
I laugh
and lick the rain
from willing lips
when will I learn
to
trust?
Oh don't feel so bad girl it could be worse. If it happens every year, then you gotta trust that it will again. Heheh.
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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I laugh
and lick the rain
from willing lips
when will I learn
to
trust?
Oh don't feel so bad girl it could be worse. If it happens every year, then you gotta trust that it will again. Heheh.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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yep - I keep thinking that gungalo - one of these days I'll believe it. :)S
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LOL smile girlie.
Comment from Dustybones
Funny thing how people do think if they try to take advantage of some natural phenomenon that they have caused the event. I hear that often, glad you wrote about this thought pattern.
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Funny thing how people do think if they try to take advantage of some natural phenomenon that they have caused the event. I hear that often, glad you wrote about this thought pattern.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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we are funny, aren't we Db? :))
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People think their sports teams have lost because they took a pee instead of watching the game on TV. I seldom watch sports as I know the score will be the same the next day in the paper, and I save myself lots of time to do real stuff.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Sharyn -
I truly loved reading this one - I would of sixed it but it seems you are on rations. I loved the deeper message in this post. But also you have this ability to pull me into your work.
So I feel the weight of the bucket of water, feel the ache of what dies in the garden, and then we gasp for the deeper wisdom - we must trust in what is to be. I loved the ending - sort of looping back around the circle and cycle of life.
Fabulous work my friend. Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Hi Sharyn -
I truly loved reading this one - I would of sixed it but it seems you are on rations. I loved the deeper message in this post. But also you have this ability to pull me into your work.
So I feel the weight of the bucket of water, feel the ache of what dies in the garden, and then we gasp for the deeper wisdom - we must trust in what is to be. I loved the ending - sort of looping back around the circle and cycle of life.
Fabulous work my friend. Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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bless you Maureen! :)S
Comment from MizKat
Sharyn - This is a unique poem and a very interesting read. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. I like your last line. Kat
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Sharyn - This is a unique poem and a very interesting read. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. I like your last line. Kat
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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thx so much Kat! :)S