All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "No Sound"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Deborah Marie
Lovely poem and photo. Clever set-up, wording, rhythm, progression and flow for an excellent read. Maybe I'll write on someday. How's a Katie-21 written? Thanks for sharing, Deb
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Lovely poem and photo. Clever set-up, wording, rhythm, progression and flow for an excellent read. Maybe I'll write on someday. How's a Katie-21 written? Thanks for sharing, Deb
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thx Deb - exactly 21 words - that's the only requirement! easy! :)S
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Thanks for the clarification, Deb
Comment from Indie Skreet
stunning setting to enhance the words in this Sharyn. Lovely thought to think as all is peaceful a higher being is looking down on us. best Indie xx
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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stunning setting to enhance the words in this Sharyn. Lovely thought to think as all is peaceful a higher being is looking down on us. best Indie xx
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx Indie! :))
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yeah, I'm sorta gettin' in the habit of being nice ;) lol
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another string to your bow - you can still pull out the nasties when needed, I'm sure! :)))
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well it takes a little effort, but never fear, I won't stop trying :D
Comment from ravenblack
Well, you've definitely done the most with the form. Love " star shards spiral round" and the playful layout of the poem. Is that a painting of the moon ( hard to tell as I'm on a tiny mobile device) and if so, do you paint?
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Well, you've definitely done the most with the form. Love " star shards spiral round" and the playful layout of the poem. Is that a painting of the moon ( hard to tell as I'm on a tiny mobile device) and if so, do you paint?
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx so much rb! no - I don't paint (wish I did!) - just found it on google images :)S
Comment from nancyjam
You paint a beautiful scene of
a quiet, still night with a giant
moon in a black sky.
I like "star shards" and the
thought that
"God's looking down"
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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You paint a beautiful scene of
a quiet, still night with a giant
moon in a black sky.
I like "star shards" and the
thought that
"God's looking down"
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx so much nancy! :)S
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Sharyn, and a beauty it was for the contest. Next time. Loved the creativeness and the expression within this one - always a treat to read your work.
Loved this one too, great artwork as well.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Hi Sharyn, and a beauty it was for the contest. Next time. Loved the creativeness and the expression within this one - always a treat to read your work.
Loved this one too, great artwork as well.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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who can resist doing something in 21 words Maureen? :)))
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
What an fascinating concept of a golden hole in the sky in which God peers down at the earth. Gorgeous artwork. I like the way you placed the word why in a segmented fashion. Enjoyed.
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What an fascinating concept of a golden hole in the sky in which God peers down at the earth. Gorgeous artwork. I like the way you placed the word why in a segmented fashion. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx so much my dear! :)S
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You are welcome, my friend. MN :)
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
There is something so magical about this piece, Sharyn, and for me it is clearly me at home. I love a dark sky, a full moon and the no sound quiet that enhances all else. While the earth sleeps, those of us who don't have free reign to be who we are meant to be... and God does look down but he's more tolerant to those who live under a black curtain sky...
You, as always, rock!
greg
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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There is something so magical about this piece, Sharyn, and for me it is clearly me at home. I love a dark sky, a full moon and the no sound quiet that enhances all else. While the earth sleeps, those of us who don't have free reign to be who we are meant to be... and God does look down but he's more tolerant to those who live under a black curtain sky...
You, as always, rock!
greg
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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aah - you know the deep silence - yes, even as a child ... :)s
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If ever they start cloning, I want tissue sample from you...
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and vice versa - see who gets there first! :))
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or, as some would say, perfection is if you can get there together... I'll say no more
Comment from angelmagnet
it's a good thing that this short didn't get in the way of writing this great verse. There will be lots of contests, missing one to a senior moment is a shame, but thanks for letting us all see the poem anyway.
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it's a good thing that this short didn't get in the way of writing this great verse. There will be lots of contests, missing one to a senior moment is a shame, but thanks for letting us all see the poem anyway.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thx Cindy! I'd just underestimated how popular this contest is I think - saw it late at night and thought "hmm, might be interesting, no rush." And by morning it was full! Oh well ... :)Sharyn
Comment from donaldww
God is peering through a hole in the sky. His eyeball is gold, and shines on the earth that is asleep. A katie-21 poem. Ever wonder why Katie chose 21, rather than any other number of syllables? Do you think it has to do with Blackjack--21 or bust?
Excellent job, enlightening, but only after dark.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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God is peering through a hole in the sky. His eyeball is gold, and shines on the earth that is asleep. A katie-21 poem. Ever wonder why Katie chose 21, rather than any other number of syllables? Do you think it has to do with Blackjack--21 or bust?
Excellent job, enlightening, but only after dark.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx DW - 21 does rather have that magic ring to it, doesn't it? :)S
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Well Done ~ Sharyn
This poetry transports the reader to a silent and
tranquil place. The attached photo is a befitting
accent that enhances the message. Thank You for
your creation.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Well Done ~ Sharyn
This poetry transports the reader to a silent and
tranquil place. The attached photo is a befitting
accent that enhances the message. Thank You for
your creation.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx Ron! :)S