All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Dancing With Your Shadow"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from snemes
Congratulations on your win! This poem really does describe a perfect happy memory. I have no six to give you, alas. I enjoyed all of the lovely images and the descriptions of childhood joy.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Congratulations on your win! This poem really does describe a perfect happy memory. I have no six to give you, alas. I enjoyed all of the lovely images and the descriptions of childhood joy.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Well thank you so much for dancing on the beach with us, my dear - and for you wish for a '6'! (I've run out, too - oh bother!)
Blessings
Sharyn
Comment from Jessabella1111
Lovely. I certainly felt a happy experience in reading this poem. Your lines flow well and you use rhyme in a flow unique to this flow. Really nice word choices and its full of imagery that is light and uplifting. Congrats on your recognization for this poem.
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Lovely. I certainly felt a happy experience in reading this poem. Your lines flow well and you use rhyme in a flow unique to this flow. Really nice word choices and its full of imagery that is light and uplifting. Congrats on your recognization for this poem.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thx so very much for coming to the beach with us, Jess! And bless you for your lovely six!
Best wishes - so much appreciated!
Sharyn
Comment from azwildrosa
What a great picture you've created with this lovely poem of yours. The title is catchy taking me back to a child seeing his shadow or the first time. Thank you for sharing such a happy poem full of fun images.
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What a great picture you've created with this lovely poem of yours. The title is catchy taking me back to a child seeing his shadow or the first time. Thank you for sharing such a happy poem full of fun images.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thx so much az! Bless you for coming to the beach with us, and ALSO for your wonderful six!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from 9999pool
Beautiful poem of fun and sun. The sand and the tide. Even a bluish background to bring in the sea water and the blue skies. What more does a child want. Why so many of them like the beach - now everyone knows. They don't mind the dangers and the sunburns. All they want is FUN! Good write. Nicely arranged to bring out the emphasis and flow of words. Good work. Cheers. Ritchie.
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Beautiful poem of fun and sun. The sand and the tide. Even a bluish background to bring in the sea water and the blue skies. What more does a child want. Why so many of them like the beach - now everyone knows. They don't mind the dangers and the sunburns. All they want is FUN! Good write. Nicely arranged to bring out the emphasis and flow of words. Good work. Cheers. Ritchie.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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thx so much for coming to the beach with us Ritchie! :) Sharyn
Comment from Janet Foor
Congratulations! I can see why this lovely happy poem won the contest. I love sand dollars. I used to hang them on my Christmas tree many years ago when the children were small. You are right, it should be read aloud. Very nicely done.
Janet
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Congratulations! I can see why this lovely happy poem won the contest. I love sand dollars. I used to hang them on my Christmas tree many years ago when the children were small. You are right, it should be read aloud. Very nicely done.
Janet
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Janet - so glad you enjoyed, and that you are a fellow sand dollar lover! :) Sharyn
Comment from HittorX
It took me back to a childhood where my family would all go to the beach in California. A time of laughter and fun before life took its toll. Very well written and flow. "flat sand dollars disguised as coined flowers" this I love. Yes childhood remembered. Good Job and Thank You for sharing!
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It took me back to a childhood where my family would all go to the beach in California. A time of laughter and fun before life took its toll. Very well written and flow. "flat sand dollars disguised as coined flowers" this I love. Yes childhood remembered. Good Job and Thank You for sharing!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thx so much Thomas! :) Sharyn
Comment from October21
I love the layout of the poem, especially towards the end, and I think it speaks with great imagination as well as truth. Young ones don't have a care in the world... and it's good to hold onto that through your youth.:)
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I love the layout of the poem, especially towards the end, and I think it speaks with great imagination as well as truth. Young ones don't have a care in the world... and it's good to hold onto that through your youth.:)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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it is indeed, october! would that we could remember to do just that, yes??? :) Sharyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a really lovely poem, Sharyn, such a lovely memory to have and bring back to life. I can quite understand how this won the contest. It must have been a blind contest or I would have had it in my messages. Congratulations for this very fine poem.xsx Sandra
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What a really lovely poem, Sharyn, such a lovely memory to have and bring back to life. I can quite understand how this won the contest. It must have been a blind contest or I would have had it in my messages. Congratulations for this very fine poem.xsx Sandra
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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yes, it was blind, Sandra - thx! so glad you enjoyed! :) S
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn, what a beautifully written verse and the cutest little tike. You had me down on the beach watching your poem, and it felt good. A well deserved winner of this contest, congratulations!. Kindest thought James xx
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Hi Sharyn, what a beautifully written verse and the cutest little tike. You had me down on the beach watching your poem, and it felt good. A well deserved winner of this contest, congratulations!. Kindest thought James xx
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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thx so much, James!
Comment from donaldww
This is a cute poem for a cute young fellow, having a perfect day on a sunny beach. I love all of your lyrically romantic personification and double duty adjectives, with swig after glorious swig of alliteration and garlicky assonance.
Tanka for not
tankin' the photographer:
humble hand clapping
humming and dancing . . .
swept away by singing wind
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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This is a cute poem for a cute young fellow, having a perfect day on a sunny beach. I love all of your lyrically romantic personification and double duty adjectives, with swig after glorious swig of alliteration and garlicky assonance.
Tanka for not
tankin' the photographer:
humble hand clapping
humming and dancing . . .
swept away by singing wind
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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thx so much DW - we do like to get our money's worth out of those adjectives et al, don't we??? 'GARLICKY ASSONANCE!???" OMG - I'll never feel the same way about "haaaaaaaaa" again! A very special thank you, too, for your lovely six, my dear! :) S