I Am A Man
what goes around comes around24 total reviews
Comment from JW
This was definitely a scene I've seen played out too often in real life. I can only imagine the challenge you had written it considering your word selection. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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This was definitely a scene I've seen played out too often in real life. I can only imagine the challenge you had written it considering your word selection. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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I lived this scene, so it was difficult not to get my emotions stuck in there. I find flash fiction a terrific challenge and very rewarding when it's done well. Thanks for stopping Jonathon. Always appreciate your unique perspectives on what I'm doing. Warm regards my friend.
Comment from Adri7enne
Yeah. You got a lot of emotions in - provoked a lot of reactions in your reader, too. I was glad to see the a-hole get his come uppance. Good writing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Yeah. You got a lot of emotions in - provoked a lot of reactions in your reader, too. I was glad to see the a-hole get his come uppance. Good writing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks so much Adri7enne. I very appreciate your wonderful and encouraging review. Thanks so much for taking time to read and review.
Comment from Larrypic11
This piece is very well done. You told it with directness and with enough feeling that you were able to know the characters instantly. Good luck in this tough competition, Larry
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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This piece is very well done. You told it with directness and with enough feeling that you were able to know the characters instantly. Good luck in this tough competition, Larry
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks so much Larrypic11. I appreciate very much that you took time to read the piece and send along your encouraging review. Best wishes.
Comment from paperback writer
Very good story. The only thing I think I would change is the mothers last line. I can see why you did that, you must know something about the cycle of violence in a home. Come to think of it, I would just take out "this is no time to be funny, Mikey". To me it just doesn't fit. But it's a good story. I agree with Mikey.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Very good story. The only thing I think I would change is the mothers last line. I can see why you did that, you must know something about the cycle of violence in a home. Come to think of it, I would just take out "this is no time to be funny, Mikey". To me it just doesn't fit. But it's a good story. I agree with Mikey.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. I appreciate you taking time to read the piece and send along your honest assessment. It's always good to get another person's viewpoint. Warm regards.
Comment from RebelRose
This is a good story about someone getting what he deserves. He decided to fight with the wrong one. Very interesting story and a good entry for this contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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This is a good story about someone getting what he deserves. He decided to fight with the wrong one. Very interesting story and a good entry for this contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks RebelRose. I am so pleased that you liked my story. Thank for your taking the time to review and express your support. Warm regards.
Comment from Soledadpaz
This reminds me of Tobias Wolff's "This Boy's Life." It has that starkness of abuse to it. I know this happens a lot in real life; co-dependency is a living breathing thing. I'm glad the protagonist did not cave it to the demand for bail money. Let him rot, I say!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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This reminds me of Tobias Wolff's "This Boy's Life." It has that starkness of abuse to it. I know this happens a lot in real life; co-dependency is a living breathing thing. I'm glad the protagonist did not cave it to the demand for bail money. Let him rot, I say!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks you so much S. I really appreciate that you enjoyed my story enough to send along your great review. Warm regards.
Comment from MizKat
Your story is great. I really enjoyed it. The printing is so tiny though it was kind of hard to read. I'm glad the son wouldn't loan his mother money to bail his dad out of jail. Who wants someone beating them all the time?
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Your story is great. I really enjoyed it. The printing is so tiny though it was kind of hard to read. I'm glad the son wouldn't loan his mother money to bail his dad out of jail. Who wants someone beating them all the time?
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks MizKat. I'm glad you mentioned the print. I sometimes find that the test doesn't come out as well as when I make a selection in Edit. I'll go back and try to change it. You are most kind to send along your excellent review. I very much appreciate it. Warm regards.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this story about an abusive father who picked on one too many people. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this story about an abusive father who picked on one too many people. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks for your great review sweetwoodjax. I really appreciate you taking time to read the story and send along your insights. Warm regards
Comment from Veekz
A scary story of abuse but with an ending that made me smile! Love it that he finally came across a fight he couldn't win at. It did make me sad the mothers reaction of course, unfortunately it's all too common, but was so happy Mikey didn't even consider handing the money over :)
A complete story written extremely good considering the restraints as well - all the best in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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A scary story of abuse but with an ending that made me smile! Love it that he finally came across a fight he couldn't win at. It did make me sad the mothers reaction of course, unfortunately it's all too common, but was so happy Mikey didn't even consider handing the money over :)
A complete story written extremely good considering the restraints as well - all the best in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks Veekz. I am very appreciate of your supportive review and am glad the story appealed to you. Thanks for the good wishes as well. Warm regards.
Comment from marcii
This is a well written Flash story that using all the needed words.
Having been in an abusive marriage I feel the son is so right to let the bastard stay in jail.
Marcii
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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This is a well written Flash story that using all the needed words.
Having been in an abusive marriage I feel the son is so right to let the bastard stay in jail.
Marcii
Comment Written 17-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Hi marcii. You are so kind to review and send along your supportive insights. I am sorry for the pain you must have endured and am glad that you have gone on to better things! Warm regards.