Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Endless Night."memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from AnnaLinda
keimosobie,
I think you did a very great job of capturing the
event and the feelings one might have in that situation.
Your rhymes are good and so is your presentation.
I like how you personalized it and wrote it in the
first person.
Linda
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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keimosobie,
I think you did a very great job of capturing the
event and the feelings one might have in that situation.
Your rhymes are good and so is your presentation.
I like how you personalized it and wrote it in the
first person.
Linda
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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thank you for that nice review
Comment from Fireshadow
Billy, this is an excellent tribute to the miners trapped in Chile, as well as a great entry for the Quatrain Poetry contest. Without a doubt, it should be a strong contender in the contest. Strong rhyme scheme allow it to flow and read smoothly. Great title and artwork to match this piece. Good work - and best wishes in the contest, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Billy, this is an excellent tribute to the miners trapped in Chile, as well as a great entry for the Quatrain Poetry contest. Without a doubt, it should be a strong contender in the contest. Strong rhyme scheme allow it to flow and read smoothly. Great title and artwork to match this piece. Good work - and best wishes in the contest, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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thank you for you considerate review.
Comment from LadyCosgrove
This is a really great poem that is filled with vivacity and texture.
The imagery is clear to the reader and delivers an excellent piece.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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This is a really great poem that is filled with vivacity and texture.
The imagery is clear to the reader and delivers an excellent piece.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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thank you for the review
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a beautifully expressed picture of the plight of the trapped miners, and I am so thankful that the story has come to have a happy ending. Thanks for personally projecting yourself into their situation. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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This is a beautifully expressed picture of the plight of the trapped miners, and I am so thankful that the story has come to have a happy ending. Thanks for personally projecting yourself into their situation. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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thank you for the kind review
Comment from fluffnstuff
nice poem...i was so glad that it had a happy ending as i thought of the hell those poor guys were to go through if it wasn't until december that they first forcasted the recue to be. i can't imagine.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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nice poem...i was so glad that it had a happy ending as i thought of the hell those poor guys were to go through if it wasn't until december that they first forcasted the recue to be. i can't imagine.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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thankyou for the kiund review
Comment from fairydancer
I like the way you have told this story from the point of view of one of the miners, it helps the readers to connect.
Good form, aabb rhyming and flow throughout.
My fave lines are:
"they work frantically up above
way down here we feel the love" and
"in this hole where I am resident
I got to speak to the president"
Your last two lines are very poignant i feel.
Great write, good luck - Cally :)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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I like the way you have told this story from the point of view of one of the miners, it helps the readers to connect.
Good form, aabb rhyming and flow throughout.
My fave lines are:
"they work frantically up above
way down here we feel the love" and
"in this hole where I am resident
I got to speak to the president"
Your last two lines are very poignant i feel.
Great write, good luck - Cally :)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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thank you cally
Comment from percival86jack
Hats off to all the rescuers and there determination to insist on a happy ending! A story for the ages that will be told for many years to come... kudos! Hugs and a heart filled with happiness for those 33 brave men... Jack
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hats off to all the rescuers and there determination to insist on a happy ending! A story for the ages that will be told for many years to come... kudos! Hugs and a heart filled with happiness for those 33 brave men... Jack
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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THANK YOU
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi keimosobie,
As you know the miners are out of the ground and with their families. I can't imagine how they managed to do so well underground. The human spirit and the human mind can do most anything even the impossible. You wrote this poem very well. It contains the emotion of those miners. Your line "pleased don't tell them that I cried" is heart breaking. Well done....chey
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi keimosobie,
As you know the miners are out of the ground and with their families. I can't imagine how they managed to do so well underground. The human spirit and the human mind can do most anything even the impossible. You wrote this poem very well. It contains the emotion of those miners. Your line "pleased don't tell them that I cried" is heart breaking. Well done....chey
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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thank you
Comment from Matoshka
This was so well written about the miners in Chile. I could feel one of the miner's thinking about his family and being worried. The frustration and fear. I liked how this flowed and you showed how they felt with your words. I am glad they were finally rescued, safe and reunited with their families. Your picture really was right on. Great writing and fitting tribute to the miners.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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This was so well written about the miners in Chile. I could feel one of the miner's thinking about his family and being worried. The frustration and fear. I liked how this flowed and you showed how they felt with your words. I am glad they were finally rescued, safe and reunited with their families. Your picture really was right on. Great writing and fitting tribute to the miners.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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thank you
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Your very welcome.
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello keimosobie,
I would imagine most, if not all, of the trapped miners came to some reconciliation with their God. I'm amazed it all worked out as well as it did. I cannot imagine being trapped underground for such a long time. Praise God, and his agents who freed the men. Nice job on this poem. Ray
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hello keimosobie,
I would imagine most, if not all, of the trapped miners came to some reconciliation with their God. I'm amazed it all worked out as well as it did. I cannot imagine being trapped underground for such a long time. Praise God, and his agents who freed the men. Nice job on this poem. Ray
Comment Written 14-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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thanks