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Comment from patwannabe
OMG, Carol, how horrible this has been for you. I hope your family is recovering from all the various strokes, illnesses and disasters. That's the most important thing right now. Incredible! Like you said, if you have made it this far, you can go the rest of the way. Please keep us informed about your family and don't worry about trying to reply to my review. pat
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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OMG, Carol, how horrible this has been for you. I hope your family is recovering from all the various strokes, illnesses and disasters. That's the most important thing right now. Incredible! Like you said, if you have made it this far, you can go the rest of the way. Please keep us informed about your family and don't worry about trying to reply to my review. pat
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Pat,
Thank you so much for the encouragement..It's friends like you that have helped me weather the storm. My family is out of the hospital..though Dad is back today for a cat scan and my honey...well, let's just say God and I have been talking a lot lately. Take care...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ....
Why stop at part 2? I am sure that all your readers are wanting this story to continue, right up until you and your family are safely installed in your newly-renovated large house.
I have given you 5 stars, knowing that you will consider the few changes recommended ...
* You have - My dad called my niece's boyfriend ... I suggest - My Dad called my niece's boy-friend ....
* You have - My son and I trudged on. John with a little less eagerness ... I suggest - trudged on - John with a little less ....
* You have - Now who am I to fault someone (singular) for helping their (plural) mom ... I suggest - to fault someone for helping his Mom ... (as this applied to a man)
* You have - I picked up John early Monday ... I suggest -
Early on Monday, I picked John up ....
* You have - Words that were music to my ears. I suggest - These were words that were ....
* You have - turned out to be 5 miles out a country road.
I suggest - to be 5 miles out on a country road.
* You have - I soon leanred the "young lady" wasn't a day in anyone's terms. I think you mean - the "young lady" wasn't a day under 40 (or 50 perhaps) in anyone's terms.
* You have - The plumbing was completed, electrical was started ... I suggest - The plumbing was completed and the electrical work was started ...
* You have - to take time to look for carpet since it wouldn't be too long ... I suggest - to look for carpets ... OR ... carpeting ....
* You have - You know where we spent out Saturday night ... which should be - our Saturday night ...
* You have - At 6:30 A.M. It is usual to write this as -
At 6.30 a.m.
Thank you for sharing all this with us. It makes for wonderful reading although my heart goes out to you and I greatly admire what you and your son have achieved in spite of all the obstacles.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Hullo Carol ....
Why stop at part 2? I am sure that all your readers are wanting this story to continue, right up until you and your family are safely installed in your newly-renovated large house.
I have given you 5 stars, knowing that you will consider the few changes recommended ...
* You have - My dad called my niece's boyfriend ... I suggest - My Dad called my niece's boy-friend ....
* You have - My son and I trudged on. John with a little less eagerness ... I suggest - trudged on - John with a little less ....
* You have - Now who am I to fault someone (singular) for helping their (plural) mom ... I suggest - to fault someone for helping his Mom ... (as this applied to a man)
* You have - I picked up John early Monday ... I suggest -
Early on Monday, I picked John up ....
* You have - Words that were music to my ears. I suggest - These were words that were ....
* You have - turned out to be 5 miles out a country road.
I suggest - to be 5 miles out on a country road.
* You have - I soon leanred the "young lady" wasn't a day in anyone's terms. I think you mean - the "young lady" wasn't a day under 40 (or 50 perhaps) in anyone's terms.
* You have - The plumbing was completed, electrical was started ... I suggest - The plumbing was completed and the electrical work was started ...
* You have - to take time to look for carpet since it wouldn't be too long ... I suggest - to look for carpets ... OR ... carpeting ....
* You have - You know where we spent out Saturday night ... which should be - our Saturday night ...
* You have - At 6:30 A.M. It is usual to write this as -
At 6.30 a.m.
Thank you for sharing all this with us. It makes for wonderful reading although my heart goes out to you and I greatly admire what you and your son have achieved in spite of all the obstacles.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Nanette
Hope you are doing well. As you can see, I am tired to the bone and appreciate you searching out my story and helping me....Haven't had much time to call my own and I really miss writing. Thank you...Smiles, CArol
Comment from jadapenn
Dear Smiles, you were so quiet and all the time this action was going on. I am indeed proud of you that you are still 1) sane and 2)alive. To stretch one's nerves to such an extent is very bad. Hopefully all will go well or easier from now on.
Luv jada
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Dear Smiles, you were so quiet and all the time this action was going on. I am indeed proud of you that you are still 1) sane and 2)alive. To stretch one's nerves to such an extent is very bad. Hopefully all will go well or easier from now on.
Luv jada
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Jada,
Thank you so much for the kind and loving thoughts...I need as much as I can get of late. I only skimmed the surface because I knew even this would leave people wondering about its truth...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Helen Tan
I hope that Mike and your dad have recovered well. I think if I had to go through half of what you've been through, I'll probably be flat out on the ground. you're a true survivor. Thanks for sharing your story.
His aging mind told him what needed to be done, but it also forgot it as quickly as he started.
I have to admire his energy at this age.
Tomorrow starts another week as we move closer to finishing the restoration. At times, I have wondered if I will ever reach the end, but at this very moment, after typing this story, I believe if I have survived all this, I can endure anything else. I hope!
I'm keeping my fingers crossed and that next week goes smoothly.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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I hope that Mike and your dad have recovered well. I think if I had to go through half of what you've been through, I'll probably be flat out on the ground. you're a true survivor. Thanks for sharing your story.
His aging mind told him what needed to be done, but it also forgot it as quickly as he started.
I have to admire his energy at this age.
Tomorrow starts another week as we move closer to finishing the restoration. At times, I have wondered if I will ever reach the end, but at this very moment, after typing this story, I believe if I have survived all this, I can endure anything else. I hope!
I'm keeping my fingers crossed and that next week goes smoothly.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Helen,
I actually can see a light at the end of the tunnel. IF AND THAT'S A BIG IF..THINGS CONTINUE on this path, we might actually find our home again. Thanks...Smiles, CArol
Comment from dmjones
Wow I can see why life can get you down. Everything did happen at once. You showed a lot of patience with that girlfriend of Dan's. She deserved to be thrown out on her butt. It never ceases to amaze me some people are ignorant of basic common sense and rude to those trying to help.
I hope your parents and brother will do okay.
totally (totaling)slightly more
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Wow I can see why life can get you down. Everything did happen at once. You showed a lot of patience with that girlfriend of Dan's. She deserved to be thrown out on her butt. It never ceases to amaze me some people are ignorant of basic common sense and rude to those trying to help.
I hope your parents and brother will do okay.
totally (totaling)slightly more
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Donna,
Forgot to mention that both cars broke down in one day and now I'm driving my dad's...all the money is in the house. As for the girl..I should have told everyone that she was missing her front teeth..that would have painted a wild image too! More than most could believe...Smiles, Carol
Comment from tati
You're truly a courageous lady, Carol. Thank you for writing marvelously detailed descriptions of your thoughts; your well crafted words painted vivid pictures in my mind. Again, superb imagery. My favorite:
- The next thing I knew she was hanging between the front bucket seats, arms flaying and mouth sputtering swear words that would put any raunchy pirate to shame.
One minor typo (the title): /Yo're - You're/ Kidding - Right? Part Two.
My best to you, Carol dear.
tati, August 16, 2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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You're truly a courageous lady, Carol. Thank you for writing marvelously detailed descriptions of your thoughts; your well crafted words painted vivid pictures in my mind. Again, superb imagery. My favorite:
- The next thing I knew she was hanging between the front bucket seats, arms flaying and mouth sputtering swear words that would put any raunchy pirate to shame.
One minor typo (the title): /Yo're - You're/ Kidding - Right? Part Two.
My best to you, Carol dear.
tati, August 16, 2010
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Tati,
Life is sometimes stranger than my stories...Thanks for reading and for the kind comments. Smiles, Carol
Comment from c_lucas
It sounds like you had more than your share of misfortunes. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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It sounds like you had more than your share of misfortunes. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Charlie,
I've been wondering what I did wrong in life, but what the heck...maybe I saved someone else a bit of misfortune..I am surviving so it's okay. Thanks...Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome Carol. Charlie
Comment from Writeaway...
Excellent job once again Begin Again, another deeply moving and warm hearted tale of your personal life. You have added a detailed description of your thoughts at the time which made your tale come alive before my eyes, excellent job, keep writing!!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Excellent job once again Begin Again, another deeply moving and warm hearted tale of your personal life. You have added a detailed description of your thoughts at the time which made your tale come alive before my eyes, excellent job, keep writing!!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Jakey,
You are awesome and have put sunshine into this troubling time. Thank you...Carol
Comment from sweetwoodjax
i am so sorry for what you are going through. i hope your honey gets well, your brother and father recover from their stroke and you can renovate the house with more ease. God bless you and I pray things go smoother
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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i am so sorry for what you are going through. i hope your honey gets well, your brother and father recover from their stroke and you can renovate the house with more ease. God bless you and I pray things go smoother
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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sweetwoodjax,
Thanks for the wishes and kind comments...I need every ounce of encouragement I can get...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a great chapter which keeps the reader moving along with it . Even though I hadn't read chapter 1, I couldn't stop reading this one once I got started. It's tight and well constructed. You are an entertaining writer and thanks for a great read.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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This is a great chapter which keeps the reader moving along with it . Even though I hadn't read chapter 1, I couldn't stop reading this one once I got started. It's tight and well constructed. You are an entertaining writer and thanks for a great read.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Giddy,
Thanks for the encouragement and for all your kindness. Finding warmth and friendship from all the readers gives me strength to continue. Smiles, CArol