CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from m_plum
This is excellent. Really well written with such skillful use of the words, also managing to rhyme. Very impressive how you got your message across in so few words, leaving a very powerful effect on the reader.
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This is excellent. Really well written with such skillful use of the words, also managing to rhyme. Very impressive how you got your message across in so few words, leaving a very powerful effect on the reader.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written poem with a smooth flow of words making for a very easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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This is a very well written poem with a smooth flow of words making for a very easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
Comment from Oatmeal
SIXTEEZKID,
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that you were given. The flow was good. The theme was excellent! Your descriptive words were very good. I wish you the best in the contest!
There were no errors to be found.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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SIXTEEZKID,
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that you were given. The flow was good. The theme was excellent! Your descriptive words were very good. I wish you the best in the contest!
There were no errors to be found.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
Comment from findingmyroom
Sue, I like this one with a small caveat. The last line seems to leave a thought in the middle, though maybe that's the intent. Best phrase: " feelings snap." Good luck in the contest!
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Sue, I like this one with a small caveat. The last line seems to leave a thought in the middle, though maybe that's the intent. Best phrase: " feelings snap." Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a nice little poem, Sue. Yes, true love makes us sing. Were you supposed to use all the given words? I noticed that you omitted "sell."
Sally
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This is a nice little poem, Sue. Yes, true love makes us sing. Were you supposed to use all the given words? I noticed that you omitted "sell."
Sally
Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
Comment from prodigal
I think it is amazing you fit all the words into such a short poem and made it all make sense. Good luck in the contest this is a strong entry.
On a different note, where have you been? Missed your writing. - Sam
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I think it is amazing you fit all the words into such a short poem and made it all make sense. Good luck in the contest this is a strong entry.
On a different note, where have you been? Missed your writing. - Sam
Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
Comment from Hitcher
Hello stranger! Nice to see you back on line, not that I've been on much myself lately, I like your offering Sue, very strong, very powerful and very true, excellent use of the given words, I would of had a stab at those words for sure, you would of kicked my butt of course, good luck with this one.
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Hello stranger! Nice to see you back on line, not that I've been on much myself lately, I like your offering Sue, very strong, very powerful and very true, excellent use of the given words, I would of had a stab at those words for sure, you would of kicked my butt of course, good luck with this one.
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Dear SIXTEEZKID,
You lived up to the challenge so well here, and the words of course are so true.
Kind regards
Steve
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Dear SIXTEEZKID,
You lived up to the challenge so well here, and the words of course are so true.
Kind regards
Steve
Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
Comment from Poetic Friend
Sue,
In its brevity, this poem paints an accurate picture of the emotions one expereiences when he/she falls in love.
You made great usage of the challenge words. Good luck in the contest.
Welcome back, I haven't seen you around for a little while.
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Sue,
In its brevity, this poem paints an accurate picture of the emotions one expereiences when he/she falls in love.
You made great usage of the challenge words. Good luck in the contest.
Welcome back, I haven't seen you around for a little while.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
Comment from AlvinTEthington
You did an excellent job of working all the words except one (I couldn't find "sell") into a such a short poem, which also covers the gamut of emotions. I love the phrase "feelings snap"--I have felt that way so many times and it is so accurate to the human condition. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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You did an excellent job of working all the words except one (I couldn't find "sell") into a such a short poem, which also covers the gamut of emotions. I love the phrase "feelings snap"--I have felt that way so many times and it is so accurate to the human condition. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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Hi Alvin, really glad you liked this little poem. And thank you for pointing out the phrase you liked. The contest calls for only using 7 of the 8 words. I left "sell" out. And thank you for your compliments and very kind review. Sue :-))