Sunday Love
Contest Prompt -- use these words free verse37 total reviews
Comment from boberto
You were in bed with the one that takes your breath away,
and you sang, "Roll, roll your boat"? I guess if you are out of breath, you can't do much. Surprised you could
sing. good luck in the contest.
boberto
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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You were in bed with the one that takes your breath away,
and you sang, "Roll, roll your boat"? I guess if you are out of breath, you can't do much. Surprised you could
sing. good luck in the contest.
boberto
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from WRITER1
An excellent job on this piece, you managed to use all the words and they came out beautifully. This is a strong contender for the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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An excellent job on this piece, you managed to use all the words and they came out beautifully. This is a strong contender for the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from EllenV
Kathy, this is a great poem with a wonderfully true message expressed in these beautifully written lines:
the golden-voices trying
to sell the wrong style
of life to the unwary.
Setting a trap, saying
having more things is
better than this...
better than a heart full
of family.
When this life is over, none of our "stuff" will go with us. The material things will mean absolutely nothing. Our family, knowledge, wisdom, faith, good works, obedience ... will be everything. This is what your poem meant to me. I really love this.
Hope you have enjoyed a lovely Sabbath. Our daughter and her family just left and it is so quiet. My husband Bob was chasing the screaming grand kids all around the house just before they left. They love it!
Love,
ellen
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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Kathy, this is a great poem with a wonderfully true message expressed in these beautifully written lines:
the golden-voices trying
to sell the wrong style
of life to the unwary.
Setting a trap, saying
having more things is
better than this...
better than a heart full
of family.
When this life is over, none of our "stuff" will go with us. The material things will mean absolutely nothing. Our family, knowledge, wisdom, faith, good works, obedience ... will be everything. This is what your poem meant to me. I really love this.
Hope you have enjoyed a lovely Sabbath. Our daughter and her family just left and it is so quiet. My husband Bob was chasing the screaming grand kids all around the house just before they left. They love it!
Love,
ellen
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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We had our great grandson over last night... and this poem grew from the fun hour we spent this morning.. him, our granddaughter, and us..... what fun memories for all of us.
Yeah... too young for a great... but it does make things so much more fun. Great Sabbath, and you got it just right... we don't take any material things with us, just our experiences.
Thanks so much.
Comment from laurelp
Your piece takes me back many decades when I was a child and couldn't wait until Sunday. I would wait until my parents were both awake and then have them read the Sunday funnies to me. Thank you.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Your piece takes me back many decades when I was a child and couldn't wait until Sunday. I would wait until my parents were both awake and then have them read the Sunday funnies to me. Thank you.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from joan marie
Sunday mornings are wonderful. For me the crossword and some light jazz with my amaretto flavored coffee. Able to be lazy. But the intrusions eventually come. Well written. joan marie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Sunday mornings are wonderful. For me the crossword and some light jazz with my amaretto flavored coffee. Able to be lazy. But the intrusions eventually come. Well written. joan marie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
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Brought back some nice old memories. jm
Comment from pilarblue
There is nothing better than that feeling of love and family, I agree. Outstanding job with the prompt, Skye. I loved it. :)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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There is nothing better than that feeling of love and family, I agree. Outstanding job with the prompt, Skye. I loved it. :)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from fastdigits
Not an easy task to write in this
medium, but you have written an
unusual entry that will bring oohs
and aahs to every mother and grandmother
who has played that game.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Not an easy task to write in this
medium, but you have written an
unusual entry that will bring oohs
and aahs to every mother and grandmother
who has played that game.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from adewpearl
oh, you've made me feel all nostalgic for my babies - my youngest turns 27 in May. You've done a great job of working in the requisite contest challenge words without forcing any of them at all. Your poem oozes with nostalgia and love - and great vivid detail. Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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oh, you've made me feel all nostalgic for my babies - my youngest turns 27 in May. You've done a great job of working in the requisite contest challenge words without forcing any of them at all. Your poem oozes with nostalgia and love - and great vivid detail. Brooke
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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I had my great-grandson overnight.. yeah, I'm WAY too young for one, but he is a treasure. I saw the contest prompt right after we had spent a joyful hour playing on the bed once more.... just like old times. LOL
Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from patwannabe
skye, you couldn't have used these words any better. This is marvelous. I was afraid it was a sexy mess and I almost clicked out of it. Then I read the third, fourth, and fifth lines. Wonderful. (I read all of it, too :-)) That's a precious time iwth our babies. Have the very best day possible, pat
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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skye, you couldn't have used these words any better. This is marvelous. I was afraid it was a sexy mess and I almost clicked out of it. Then I read the third, fourth, and fifth lines. Wonderful. (I read all of it, too :-)) That's a precious time iwth our babies. Have the very best day possible, pat
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review. Time does pass far too quickly... we need to take time to love.
Comment from jshep
This brought back some wonderful memories of when our kids were little and would all come to cuddle in bed on the weekends. Wonderful bonding moments for a family. Your poem expresses that feeling so well as well as the message of a society of putting priorities in the wrong place. WEll done. Joyce
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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This brought back some wonderful memories of when our kids were little and would all come to cuddle in bed on the weekends. Wonderful bonding moments for a family. Your poem expresses that feeling so well as well as the message of a society of putting priorities in the wrong place. WEll done. Joyce
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.