CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from DecrepitOldBag
I do not know the poem by Dylan thomas of which you speak in your author notes, and confess to being unfamiliar with the villanelle form. However, the poem you have written is most beautifully crafted, and whilst it has no set meter, it does have a wonderful flow - and wisdom of words.
Great writing.
Warm wishes
Kat
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I do not know the poem by Dylan thomas of which you speak in your author notes, and confess to being unfamiliar with the villanelle form. However, the poem you have written is most beautifully crafted, and whilst it has no set meter, it does have a wonderful flow - and wisdom of words.
Great writing.
Warm wishes
Kat
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Your poem is wonderful. It is written well and the message is presented clearly. I found no erros to note in format or spags. Good job.
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Your poem is wonderful. It is written well and the message is presented clearly. I found no erros to note in format or spags. Good job.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from Marathonwriter
Hi Sixteezkid,
Wow, this is quite the poem. It's a refreshing idea to look at regret as a lie. It is a lie that has held me back far too many times.
Deny that liar the air of its threat
Thanks for sharing!
Chris
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Hi Sixteezkid,
Wow, this is quite the poem. It's a refreshing idea to look at regret as a lie. It is a lie that has held me back far too many times.
Deny that liar the air of its threat
Thanks for sharing!
Chris
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
Comment from MaureenC
I enjoyed reading this insightful poem. Regrets are like worry, neither has any benefit at all. This is an excellent piece.
Well done
Mauseyc
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I enjoyed reading this insightful poem. Regrets are like worry, neither has any benefit at all. This is an excellent piece.
Well done
Mauseyc
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Kingsland
that's a very good poem to want to project forward in your own poetic thoughts. Do not go gentle into that goodnight is about Dylan Thomas father on his death bed. When you read it again after knowing the reason it was written it gives it even more depth of emotions. Your poem has a very similar cadence as Dylan Thomas poem has. This was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
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that's a very good poem to want to project forward in your own poetic thoughts. Do not go gentle into that goodnight is about Dylan Thomas father on his death bed. When you read it again after knowing the reason it was written it gives it even more depth of emotions. Your poem has a very similar cadence as Dylan Thomas poem has. This was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from dportwood
Well done villanelle. I know they are not easy to write with the rhyme and refrain restrictions. You've done a nice job on this one.
Duane
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Well done villanelle. I know they are not easy to write with the rhyme and refrain restrictions. You've done a nice job on this one.
Duane
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from DrCarter2001
A nice use of the vilanelle form; I really like the refrain lines and the meaning behind them, and the imagery throughout is well crafted. Nicely done.
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A nice use of the vilanelle form; I really like the refrain lines and the meaning behind them, and the imagery throughout is well crafted. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue...I have always liked the villanelle but don't think I have ever written one. Guess I should try to engage my brain and write one. This one is very good. It has a musical rhyme and the theme is first rate. Very well done....blessings....chey
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Hi Sue...I have always liked the villanelle but don't think I have ever written one. Guess I should try to engage my brain and write one. This one is very good. It has a musical rhyme and the theme is first rate. Very well done....blessings....chey
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Winslow
Dear Sixteen,
Good advice spelled out in mixed poetic and prose form. I think this good advice but the flow is not the best.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Sixteen,
Good advice spelled out in mixed poetic and prose form. I think this good advice but the flow is not the best.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue. I just got a migraine trying to understand the rules, here. Makes a sonnet seem easy! ;-)
I guess this is a political statement? Very powerfully and cynically put. Sure made me think. Seems you've become an all-round poetry expert. Excellent. Love, Ray xx
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Hi, Sue. I just got a migraine trying to understand the rules, here. Makes a sonnet seem easy! ;-)
I guess this is a political statement? Very powerfully and cynically put. Sure made me think. Seems you've become an all-round poetry expert. Excellent. Love, Ray xx
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009