CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Cold Relationship"A collection of poetry
42 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
A mixture of rhyme and free verse. Very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a very easy read. Good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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A mixture of rhyme and free verse. Very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a very easy read. Good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from WRITER1
A very good poem, I don't like winter either, but it's where I live. The poem made a clear statement. I see no need for revision. Good job.
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A very good poem, I don't like winter either, but it's where I live. The poem made a clear statement. I see no need for revision. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
I agree with everything you did to show winter for what it is! Glad I live in Southern California and do not have to be associated with that dreadful _ _ _ _ _ _.
Dave
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I agree with everything you did to show winter for what it is! Glad I live in Southern California and do not have to be associated with that dreadful _ _ _ _ _ _.
Dave
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from bard owl
Your poem at first sounds like a dwindling love affair, and then you disclose that the one you are leaving is winter. If Winter were a guy, he would certainly receive the lion's share of seasonal rejections. I'm not a winter fan and your poem expresses my feeling toward the harshest of seasons. Excellent. Sorry you missed the contest. This is very well done. Blessings to you, Linda
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Your poem at first sounds like a dwindling love affair, and then you disclose that the one you are leaving is winter. If Winter were a guy, he would certainly receive the lion's share of seasonal rejections. I'm not a winter fan and your poem expresses my feeling toward the harshest of seasons. Excellent. Sorry you missed the contest. This is very well done. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a good piece of
verse, Sue - shame you missed
the contest - as it has a
smooth flow to the words and
rhyme.
I think we are all tired of winter this
year - roll on the spring - we've sunshine
here today and daffodils in full bloom -
mind the weather can turn so suddenly.
Margaret.
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This is a good piece of
verse, Sue - shame you missed
the contest - as it has a
smooth flow to the words and
rhyme.
I think we are all tired of winter this
year - roll on the spring - we've sunshine
here today and daffodils in full bloom -
mind the weather can turn so suddenly.
Margaret.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from Brandenpaul
Is this about a season or a relationship. Guess both or either one right? Either way, I thought it was well written and had a good flow to it. You can actually feel the cold bitterness in the words.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Is this about a season or a relationship. Guess both or either one right? Either way, I thought it was well written and had a good flow to it. You can actually feel the cold bitterness in the words.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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As it's about personifying winter, you can read it like a season or a relationship! HA! Thanks for your great review. Sue
Comment from butterfly4265
What a shame you missed the contest as I believe this would have been a very strong contender. It flows very well with good rhyming and descriptions. I also loved your choice of artwork which gave a really good overall presentation. Very much enjoyed!
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What a shame you missed the contest as I believe this would have been a very strong contender. It flows very well with good rhyming and descriptions. I also loved your choice of artwork which gave a really good overall presentation. Very much enjoyed!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from brooklynauthor
I like the way you characterize personality traits as weather events. The line where you say you can't "weather" anymore is priceless. I think it made the poem work.
Some of the rhyming is a bit suspect, but I don't know that it matters. The poem demonstrated desperation as well as resolve... in other words... been there, done that, got the t-shirt, and sold it on Ebay. Nice work.
Jerry
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I like the way you characterize personality traits as weather events. The line where you say you can't "weather" anymore is priceless. I think it made the poem work.
Some of the rhyming is a bit suspect, but I don't know that it matters. The poem demonstrated desperation as well as resolve... in other words... been there, done that, got the t-shirt, and sold it on Ebay. Nice work.
Jerry
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from rmdelta
Sue, I really liked this one, my friend. You make the perfect case for a change of seasons. Strange, isn't it? in the winter, I can't wait for the Spring. In the summer, I'm ready for fall. Great work, Sue
Reggie
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Sue, I really liked this one, my friend. You make the perfect case for a change of seasons. Strange, isn't it? in the winter, I can't wait for the Spring. In the summer, I'm ready for fall. Great work, Sue
Reggie
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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I love the fall, but don't want it to come around cuz I know what's following OH TOO SOON! Ha! Thanks for your great review, Reggie....Sue :-))
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Sorry you missed the deadline. I enjoyed your poem. I was thinking to myself, "yes, that's right" as I read. I found no errors while reading. Good job.
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Sorry you missed the deadline. I enjoyed your poem. I was thinking to myself, "yes, that's right" as I read. I found no errors while reading. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009