CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "The Beatitudes"A collection of poetry
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Comment from prodigal
This was beautifully written. I have always loved the beattitudes. I love the line 2000 years have come and gone. Very well done, the rhyming beattitudes. - Sam
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This was beautifully written. I have always loved the beattitudes. I love the line 2000 years have come and gone. Very well done, the rhyming beattitudes. - Sam
Comment Written 25-Feb-2009
Comment from RapturedHeart
Exceptional!! Am glad you have some sixes for this, SK, as I have none left. Touched me very deeply and brought such comfort to me this morning, thank you so much! How true it is - just when we think God has just about 'had it' with us, he shows up with a bucket to wash our feet.
Excellent, excellent words of faith shared here. Though, I did find the metre awkward in a couple of places - but not enough to deter me from wanting to give it a six. Wishing you all the best in the contest,
Heather
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Exceptional!! Am glad you have some sixes for this, SK, as I have none left. Touched me very deeply and brought such comfort to me this morning, thank you so much! How true it is - just when we think God has just about 'had it' with us, he shows up with a bucket to wash our feet.
Excellent, excellent words of faith shared here. Though, I did find the metre awkward in a couple of places - but not enough to deter me from wanting to give it a six. Wishing you all the best in the contest,
Heather
Comment Written 25-Feb-2009
Comment from lkatka
Yes, the words Jesus spoke that were beautiful and still just as important today as they were way back then. You have such a wide variety of things you write about and I've enjoyed all of things I've read authored by you.
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Yes, the words Jesus spoke that were beautiful and still just as important today as they were way back then. You have such a wide variety of things you write about and I've enjoyed all of things I've read authored by you.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
Comment from skye
This is a wonderful poem about faith...
your rhymes and lines are strong, bringing the image of our Savior to life, making Him so personal this day.
Very effective and uplifting poem.
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This is a wonderful poem about faith...
your rhymes and lines are strong, bringing the image of our Savior to life, making Him so personal this day.
Very effective and uplifting poem.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
Comment from c_lucas
The Old Testament taught the Love of Law. The New Testament taught the Law of Love. John 3:16 is the epitome of this teahings. The Sermon on the Mount was the foundation. Good luck in your contest.
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The Old Testament taught the Love of Law. The New Testament taught the Law of Love. John 3:16 is the epitome of this teahings. The Sermon on the Mount was the foundation. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Sixteezkid ...
This is a most enjoyable poem and a very good entry for the Faith Contest.
From a writing point of view, you have not maintained a regular metre, changing at times from 4-4-4-4 to 4-3-4-3.
I certainly wish you well with the Contest.
With love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Hullo Sixteezkid ...
This is a most enjoyable poem and a very good entry for the Faith Contest.
From a writing point of view, you have not maintained a regular metre, changing at times from 4-4-4-4 to 4-3-4-3.
I certainly wish you well with the Contest.
With love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Nanette Mary, I wrestled with that stanza like you wouldn't believe (for SO long). And here you bring it up and I fixed it in 2 minutes. GO FIGURE! Ha! Thank you SO much for highlighting that. And for your very generous review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from gbyrne
Juust by chance read this poem and thought it was wonderfully done and the rhyming beautifuland the meaning very impacting.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2009
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Juust by chance read this poem and thought it was wonderfully done and the rhyming beautifuland the meaning very impacting.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2009
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gbyrne, your exceptional rating is so much appreciated. It means so much to hear you say that it was very impacting (a poet's highest honor). With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from wierdgrace
what a great and wonderful way to write a emotional and faith poetry. it is excellent and perfect for this contest. no errors, the art great and the words read out. thank you for sharing.
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what a great and wonderful way to write a emotional and faith poetry. it is excellent and perfect for this contest. no errors, the art great and the words read out. thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
Comment from glacierbabe
This is absolutely wonderful. I love the subject you chose and you illustrated it so well. The rythm was great and the rhyme perfect. Good luck in the contest. Very well done! :0)
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This is absolutely wonderful. I love the subject you chose and you illustrated it so well. The rythm was great and the rhyme perfect. Good luck in the contest. Very well done! :0)
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
Wow, I'm no Mr religious, but this packs a punch. Seems so realistic. Slight syllable switches here and there which don't hinder the flow, which is brilliant, at all. I found;
'With kings; these things He would bestow' a tongue-twister, even though the meter's perfect.
Effortless unforced rhyme make this a pleasure to read.
Love, Ray xx
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Hi, Sue
Wow, I'm no Mr religious, but this packs a punch. Seems so realistic. Slight syllable switches here and there which don't hinder the flow, which is brilliant, at all. I found;
'With kings; these things He would bestow' a tongue-twister, even though the meter's perfect.
Effortless unforced rhyme make this a pleasure to read.
Love, Ray xx
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Ray, I'm not very religious either, but I've always loved the Sermon on the Mount. A part of the Bible I have read so many times. Yeah, the enjambs may seem a bit stiff, but I had to incorporate those very essentials as they were the cornerstone of the sermon. Ah, what the heck....poetic license! Ha! Thanks so much for your awesome review! Big hugs, Sue
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By the way, I caved and fixed that stanza. Ha!!! It's so much better. Again, thanks for ALL your honest reviews and help. Sue :-))
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That little tweek makes it so much easier on my tongue, Sue. xx
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You're the "magic man"! Ha!