CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from mushroom
well if nothing else i can certainly feel pain in this poem, such cutting and yes sharpe words, a very vivid poem, good for the contest though
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well if nothing else i can certainly feel pain in this poem, such cutting and yes sharpe words, a very vivid poem, good for the contest though
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from Ms. Gray
A very effective and intense poem. I liked the alliteration at the beginning and the wounded and left whithering. A strong image of something or someone dying a slow death. Good luck in the contest
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A very effective and intense poem. I liked the alliteration at the beginning and the wounded and left whithering. A strong image of something or someone dying a slow death. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
When I saw the picture -
I thought I'd already reviewed
this - but I see it must be
the artwork accompanying the contest
This is cleverly thoughtout, with
the correct number of sylables, an
ideal entry - good luck,
Margaret.
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When I saw the picture -
I thought I'd already reviewed
this - but I see it must be
the artwork accompanying the contest
This is cleverly thoughtout, with
the correct number of sylables, an
ideal entry - good luck,
Margaret.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from earthlybeing
Well written clarity poem that was easy to understand and follow. The colors you used enhanced it and made it even more vivid. Thanks, Jeanette
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Well written clarity poem that was easy to understand and follow. The colors you used enhanced it and made it even more vivid. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from prodigal
I am still impressed at how you can write such nice poetry through such a restrictive format. This was very good. I only know of one other who does allot of this type of work on fanstory. Needless to say it puts you in very good company. Your work reminds me allot of hers. Well done- Sam
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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I am still impressed at how you can write such nice poetry through such a restrictive format. This was very good. I only know of one other who does allot of this type of work on fanstory. Needless to say it puts you in very good company. Your work reminds me allot of hers. Well done- Sam
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Hi Sam, Now you've left me with a riddle! Ha! Thank you so much for your wonderful compliments and great review. With warm regards, Sue
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I am sure you know Brooke. Very similar in style to yours.
Comment from fictionwriter
I love the theme of this poem the wounded person. The picture is really great also. I have felt that pain as have many. Great job.
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I love the theme of this poem the wounded person. The picture is really great also. I have felt that pain as have many. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from NadineM
Your clarity poem is well-written and presented. The pain is felt through your words. Descriptive words offer the reader impressive imagery.
Best wishes in this contest.
Thanks for sharing this with me.
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Your clarity poem is well-written and presented. The pain is felt through your words. Descriptive words offer the reader impressive imagery.
Best wishes in this contest.
Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Short But,A very thought provoking piece,with such beautiful use of language . I thought it was very insightful and telling. well done. Excellent there were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
Another bully for you.
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Short But,A very thought provoking piece,with such beautiful use of language . I thought it was very insightful and telling. well done. Excellent there were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
Another bully for you.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a vivid painting of the subject of pain and misery. The choice of words is superb, accounting for the clarity in meaning, even with so few words. kudos
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This is a vivid painting of the subject of pain and misery. The choice of words is superb, accounting for the clarity in meaning, even with so few words. kudos
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi there, this is a great composition. Relates well to the artwork, which is a tough image to write. Well, for me at least. My slightest grouse is the length of lines 6 and 7. Wish it were the other way round. Good luck!
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Hi there, this is a great composition. Relates well to the artwork, which is a tough image to write. Well, for me at least. My slightest grouse is the length of lines 6 and 7. Wish it were the other way round. Good luck!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009