CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Clever Cleavage"A collection of poetry
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Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Your writing is so very vivid! Typical of clothing designers...leave the wearer of the 'beautiful' garment to find ways to fix up/lash down any its that don't fit! What a wonderful idea you had! I bet it was uncomfortable though, and the very devil to remove. As always, you writing has entertained brilliantly. No criticisms.
All the best.
Kat
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Your writing is so very vivid! Typical of clothing designers...leave the wearer of the 'beautiful' garment to find ways to fix up/lash down any its that don't fit! What a wonderful idea you had! I bet it was uncomfortable though, and the very devil to remove. As always, you writing has entertained brilliantly. No criticisms.
All the best.
Kat
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Kat, this was my first attempt at crossing over from poems to a 'short' and I must say that your review really is SO encouraging! I've always wanted to write shorts and have just dipped my toe in. SO insecure about it, though! But, not going to let that get in my way! Thanks again for your encouragement and your great review. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from Susan E. Pennycuff
This was good, but I think it could have reached a much higher level had you ended it with the humor of the horror of removing that duct tape afterwards. I was actually expecting to find that last paragraph... but it wasn't there!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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This was good, but I think it could have reached a much higher level had you ended it with the humor of the horror of removing that duct tape afterwards. I was actually expecting to find that last paragraph... but it wasn't there!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Well, I see what you mean, but my thought was to just end it with the humor of my wearing "hardware" underneath the lovely gown. A contrast, for sure. And it really was no big deal about taking if off. Would have fallen flat.
But, don't get me wrong. I really appreciate your comments. I just felt this one was strictly about the "use" of the duct tape per the contest entry. Now, if there was, indeed, a drama about pulling it off, I most certainly would have written it! HA!
Thanks so much for your very kind review!
Sue
Comment from Nanny 6
Cute, lighthearted and funny! lol I can imagine the whole scene as it unfolded before my eyes. You really put the tape to good use. Good job. Judy
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Cute, lighthearted and funny! lol I can imagine the whole scene as it unfolded before my eyes. You really put the tape to good use. Good job. Judy
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Judy, thanks so much for your very encouraging reivew. Glad you could "see" it. My first try at writing (outside of poetry). Trying to get the nerve up so, dipped my toe in. Scary stuff! ha! Much appreciated, Sue
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keep writing, you've got talent! : )
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Even your encouragement scares me! LOL!!!! That means I'm going to double dare myself. OMG!
Thanks so much,
Sue
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LOL!!!
Comment from mslyla216
Duct tape it is -- for every mending emergency! This is clever, but also, it describes a most logical use for duct tape. It has been well known since duct tape was invented that it was used for far more things than for taping ducts together so no air would escape. Your story was funny and informative. Good job. mslyla
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Duct tape it is -- for every mending emergency! This is clever, but also, it describes a most logical use for duct tape. It has been well known since duct tape was invented that it was used for far more things than for taping ducts together so no air would escape. Your story was funny and informative. Good job. mslyla
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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mslyla, like WD-40, it has SO many uses! LOL!! Thanks so much for your great review. So glad you enjoyed it. Very much appreciated...Sue
Comment from miskko
I've often wondered whether this would work...I've heard it suggested that common duct tape has been used on many a Hollywood star.
It's a fun story and an enjoyable read.
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I've often wondered whether this would work...I've heard it suggested that common duct tape has been used on many a Hollywood star.
It's a fun story and an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
Comment from WRITER1
Good job on the bosom, I have tried that with other things and duct tape never occurred to me. You did a good job on this piece.
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Good job on the bosom, I have tried that with other things and duct tape never occurred to me. You did a good job on this piece.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
Comment from SherryHo
My daughter says that every woman should have a complete tool box which consists of screw driver, pliers, hammer, WD-40, and duct tape. Maybe the complete sewing kit should include duct tape.
Very ingenious, imaginative, and humorous. Good job and good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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My daughter says that every woman should have a complete tool box which consists of screw driver, pliers, hammer, WD-40, and duct tape. Maybe the complete sewing kit should include duct tape.
Very ingenious, imaginative, and humorous. Good job and good luck.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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I do have my own tool box, also! HA! How could I live without my WD-40!!! Yes, now you can suggest she add the duct tape to her kit! HA! Thank you for your very kind review and compliment. So encouraging. With regards, Sue
Comment from Judian James
Oh, how clever you were. I'm not quite sure how comfortable you might have been but you took care of business very nicely. I think I'd drop the "penguin suit" sentence. It's not necessary and it's so cliched. otherwise, a fun piece to read.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Oh, how clever you were. I'm not quite sure how comfortable you might have been but you took care of business very nicely. I think I'd drop the "penguin suit" sentence. It's not necessary and it's so cliched. otherwise, a fun piece to read.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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I felt the "penguin suit" wording added to the story, as every man does relate to being in that tux and for a slight moment, a slight segue. Anyway, surprisingly, it was not uncomfortable and I could breathe. HA! Thanks for your review, Jude. Sue
Comment from Soulester
This story is a very enjoyable read, sixteezkid! I think it needs a epilogue or sequel on the removal of the duct tape! Clever Cleavage is a cute title and story builds in tension. There are several interesting descriptions, but I especially like the part about "working on yourself like a construction site... to heave up those breasts like the French women of yore." Good writing!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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This story is a very enjoyable read, sixteezkid! I think it needs a epilogue or sequel on the removal of the duct tape! Clever Cleavage is a cute title and story builds in tension. There are several interesting descriptions, but I especially like the part about "working on yourself like a construction site... to heave up those breasts like the French women of yore." Good writing!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Souester, I am SO happy you enjoyed this! It's my first "story" I have written, as I'd like to dip my toe in and see how it goes. And your review is SO encouraging. Thanks for highlighting the parts you liked. Really helps out!! Thanks for your very generous review. Much appreciated, Sue :-))
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I just joined in January and put my first stories out this week. I broke the ice with poems. The more I think about your story, the more it makes me chuckle.
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Very cool for you to comment. And thanks for sharing how you started out with the poetry. I never wrote poems until November. Now, I sure would like to do some fiction shorts. OMG! Too scary!
Comment from Firefly54
Well Sixtieskid, I think we have just proved that men don't use this stuff for any truly useful purpose, or this contest would have been full... Are we the only two here able to improvise? Yours was a wise idea... I could have used it and thereby not needed to try and impliment mine at all!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Well Sixtieskid, I think we have just proved that men don't use this stuff for any truly useful purpose, or this contest would have been full... Are we the only two here able to improvise? Yours was a wise idea... I could have used it and thereby not needed to try and impliment mine at all!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Firefly, I only JUST noticed we were the only two in there! My plan was to go through and start reading "them all" and there they were...all alone! HA! Hmmmm....wonder who I will vote for. LOL!! I really thought that since duct tape is a man's thing the would have been here. Anyway, thanks much for your review. This should be interesting! Ha! Sue
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Yeah.... I had a problem knowing who to vote for too... I think the guys proved my point that they only use it to bodge up jobs that their women are giving them stick about, lol. I shouldn't have done it really. Couldn't resist when I saw it, but really didn't have time to do it properly. ELaine
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I like the way you gave all the "instructions". HA! Too bad we don't have any competition! Bummer!
Anyway, we joined and it was fun!
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It was a pleasant break from my novel in 30 days, which is driving me to panic attacks at the moment, lol
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Sheee-it! I do NOT have the the patience, nor will I ever. I couldn't even imagine!
To each his own, though. Ha!