CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Our Cosmic Home"A collection of poetry
28 total reviews
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You have said so much in this strong poem describing the universe well with good descriptions and good presentation well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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You have said so much in this strong poem describing the universe well with good descriptions and good presentation well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Fuller, thank you for your very kind compliments and review. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from MJMuraco
Your poem was excellent. I appreciate that you give us the facts in your author notes. I am still learning about counting rhyme and rhythm and how to write poetry. The photo was perfect.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Your poem was excellent. I appreciate that you give us the facts in your author notes. I am still learning about counting rhyme and rhythm and how to write poetry. The photo was perfect.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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It is a great shot, isn't it? For a good read on iambic meter only (a good start), here is a place to start. Have to read it more than once and just practice a few lines. Forget all the weird words. Just pay attention to the da/DUM's. A da/DUM is "iambic" and a DUM/da is trochee. The da is unstressed syllable and DUM is the STRESSED syllable. Here is the url address you can cut and paste: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Iambic_pentameter (that's where I learned it from). Thanks so much for your great review! Sue
Comment from rhymelord
No problems with this one, Sue, although it is beyond my military march type of metre skills to comment on the format. All I can see is a delightfully readable poem that evokes wide thought and dreaming.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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No problems with this one, Sue, although it is beyond my military march type of metre skills to comment on the format. All I can see is a delightfully readable poem that evokes wide thought and dreaming.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Hut, 2..3..4! LOL!! Nope, you're right....doesn't work! Ha! Thanks so much for your great compliments and review. Very encouraging :-)) Sue
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
Maybe semi-colon after 'white' as dash looks odd and infers it's a hyphonated word. Same after 'turbulense'.
Excellent breath-taking observation and a wonder most of us have experienced. Don't take too much thought as the head would explode ith questions and incredulity (long word fa me ;-)) Ray xx
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Hi, Sue
Maybe semi-colon after 'white' as dash looks odd and infers it's a hyphonated word. Same after 'turbulense'.
Excellent breath-taking observation and a wonder most of us have experienced. Don't take too much thought as the head would explode ith questions and incredulity (long word fa me ;-)) Ray xx
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Aye Aye, Sir. You are right! Will make those changes. Yes, the head WILL explode with those LITERALLY "AWEsome" possibilities out there. Thanks for your help and great review (feel better)....Sue :-))
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Looks so much better now, sue. Then again, I would say that. LOL.
Hey! just got a PM ta tell me ya won the 'vers beaucoup' contest. Congratulations ; thoroughly deserved! Ray xx
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Yeah, I just saw that on my PM! Very cool! I love writing in the vers beaucoup and that car race one was fun to write!
Get your butt back in bed and take care of your 'man-cold'! Pronto!!
Thanks for your help on my poem. It looks 1000 times better!!
Big hugs as I tuck you in and put Vicks on your nose! LOL
Comment from GentleWind
The rhyme scheme I like and the imagery of the universe is perfect. Your artwork enhances your lovely words of rhyme and magic. Good job
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The rhyme scheme I like and the imagery of the universe is perfect. Your artwork enhances your lovely words of rhyme and magic. Good job
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
Comment from pabelk
Great minute poem. The rhythm and rhyming flows so well. I especially like the one word ending "Illuminance" rolls right off the tongue. Which came first the poem or the picture?
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Great minute poem. The rhythm and rhyming flows so well. I especially like the one word ending "Illuminance" rolls right off the tongue. Which came first the poem or the picture?
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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The poem came first, then I selected the photo. Love astronomy! So glad you enjoyed this. And thanks for your very kind compliments and review. Sue
Comment from Hitcher
This is a great example of the minute poem Sue, asking the reader to 'open your mind', I love watching programs on space, the universe, black holes, cosmic lust[sorry dust], sorry I'm in the middle of writing something, catch you later!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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This is a great example of the minute poem Sue, asking the reader to 'open your mind', I love watching programs on space, the universe, black holes, cosmic lust[sorry dust], sorry I'm in the middle of writing something, catch you later!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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SO DO I!! I love all that stuff! worm holes, quarks, the string theory, and everything!! So cool that you do also. I went to see Columbia space shuttle launch. Unbelievable!!! Thanks so much for your great review and sharing your own passion about the universe. Now, get back to work! HA! :-))
Comment from joan marie
Great topic, I am fascintated by our Universe. It will end but we are but a speck of dust and human life will be long gone. Great read. joan marie
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Great topic, I am fascintated by our Universe. It will end but we are but a speck of dust and human life will be long gone. Great read. joan marie
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
Comment from Joan E.
You've captured wonderful images and the flow of strong rhymes in your poem. I liked the use of the fresh, one word at the end, with its four syllables.
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You've captured wonderful images and the flow of strong rhymes in your poem. I liked the use of the fresh, one word at the end, with its four syllables.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
Great poem about our mysterious universe. I wish we had a way to explore further. It has me intrigued! And you've done a marvelous job with this poem - good imagery, style, structure, and flow. Thanks for sharing!
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Great poem about our mysterious universe. I wish we had a way to explore further. It has me intrigued! And you've done a marvelous job with this poem - good imagery, style, structure, and flow. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009