CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "Open to Change"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Joan E.
I really liked your fresh use in "freezing the mind" along with your playing with the "ing" sound. I also wrote a parallel poem about resisting change (not posted, still marinating). I need to try the Tetradactys--you made the form seem less daunting in this poem. I wondered if you painted the amazing artwork that adorns it, until I remembered how you sometimes find the art you choose.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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I really liked your fresh use in "freezing the mind" along with your playing with the "ing" sound. I also wrote a parallel poem about resisting change (not posted, still marinating). I need to try the Tetradactys--you made the form seem less daunting in this poem. I wondered if you painted the amazing artwork that adorns it, until I remembered how you sometimes find the art you choose.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Joan, I like this form very much. Definitely give it a try! You know my secret about where I get the artwork :-)) Thank you for your very kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
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Thanks for the encouragement and puzzling out my last incomplete sentence. I re-wrote it so that I won't seem like a complete dunce--I told you before I am typing impaired.
Comment from Arkine
A few years ago I had a choice to stay at a fairly stable job or take a risk. Now, I'd love to say that the risk paid off, but alas I can't. The company is closed, and I'm struggling to make ends meet...however, if I hadn't quite the 10pm-6am job, I may have lost my family, and I certainly would have never gotten my book published. So, was it the right choice, no, it was just a different choice to make, not right, not wrong, just different. Great job on this poem!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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A few years ago I had a choice to stay at a fairly stable job or take a risk. Now, I'd love to say that the risk paid off, but alas I can't. The company is closed, and I'm struggling to make ends meet...however, if I hadn't quite the 10pm-6am job, I may have lost my family, and I certainly would have never gotten my book published. So, was it the right choice, no, it was just a different choice to make, not right, not wrong, just different. Great job on this poem!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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I am a believer that after we weigh up the facts "at the time of decision", we have done our best. And the decision was not wrong. Yes, hindsight can make us ponder the "what ifs", but if we had taken the other route, we'd then ponder the "what ifs" on that scenario. The best gift we can give ourselves is to not live with regret with the decisions we made with all information we had at the time. Through reading your comments, it sounds as if your intuition could have been correct about "losing your family". It must have been a strong intuition to bravely make the change. And a great attitude about the positive outcome (with more that comes about that we are not yet aware of). Thank you so much for your sharing your story and the great review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Brandenpaul
You are so talented. Just keep spitting them out. I love the messages in your work, so positive. Again, always amazes me how one can write with such restrictions and rules and have it come out like there was no effort involved. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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You are so talented. Just keep spitting them out. I love the messages in your work, so positive. Again, always amazes me how one can write with such restrictions and rules and have it come out like there was no effort involved. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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jbourdeau, your compliments mean so much. Since being here on FS, I strive to stretch myself as much as possible. "Open to Change" does work. I never knew I could put two lines together. And still working! Thank you for your great review. Always so appreciated, Sue
Comment from LadyBrendragon
Starting off with the lines "How Boring" catches the attention. Good structure, flow and content. Especially liked the last part describing how we succumb to fear which paralyzes our minds and hold us back from fulfilling our dreams. Nicely done
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Starting off with the lines "How Boring" catches the attention. Good structure, flow and content. Especially liked the last part describing how we succumb to fear which paralyzes our minds and hold us back from fulfilling our dreams. Nicely done
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
Comment from Gypsymooncat
So true indeed are your words Ms Sixteez. I for one relate well to this poem as I've been trying to embrace so many life changes, while resisting other personal ones, I think I'm about to explode! You're so right; resisting change DOES bring fear and anxiety. Going with the flow is the best answer always as I'm finding out. I thought you also did a fine job with this form of poetry also - it flows well and is not contrived. Well said, well done and thanks for sharing this nugget of wisdom. I must take notice!! xoxoxoxxoo
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So true indeed are your words Ms Sixteez. I for one relate well to this poem as I've been trying to embrace so many life changes, while resisting other personal ones, I think I'm about to explode! You're so right; resisting change DOES bring fear and anxiety. Going with the flow is the best answer always as I'm finding out. I thought you also did a fine job with this form of poetry also - it flows well and is not contrived. Well said, well done and thanks for sharing this nugget of wisdom. I must take notice!! xoxoxoxxoo
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
Comment from boberto
Hi. This format, like so many you see here on site is very interesting. I try a few of them. However, I am old fashion. I believe that only the old styles really allow and display the beauty of verse. The forms are more esthetic. Just my opinion.
boberto
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Hi. This format, like so many you see here on site is very interesting. I try a few of them. However, I am old fashion. I believe that only the old styles really allow and display the beauty of verse. The forms are more esthetic. Just my opinion.
boberto
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
Comment from jeslaf
Love the 'freezing'/'seizing' bit of rhyme, as well as the very strong ending two lines; the form suits your words and vice versa, well. Been there, liked the mantra-like tone. Good one! :)
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Love the 'freezing'/'seizing' bit of rhyme, as well as the very strong ending two lines; the form suits your words and vice versa, well. Been there, liked the mantra-like tone. Good one! :)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
Comment from Domino
hi, Sue.
I've posted a couple this week as I'd reserved spots in contests, and as it's the weekend, I'll review the o/s recent PM's. Hope ta take a few days break now. (that bit's 'cut 'n pasted' LOL)
You're right about 'changes' - I always change my clothes every week. LOL. Jokin! ;-). We all suffer from a fear of the un-known; changing our comfort zone, however sad and lonely it may be. At least we know to expect nothing, rather than take a chance on excitement and love. Funny lot, aint we? Very nicely put. Love, Ray xx
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hi, Sue.
I've posted a couple this week as I'd reserved spots in contests, and as it's the weekend, I'll review the o/s recent PM's. Hope ta take a few days break now. (that bit's 'cut 'n pasted' LOL)
You're right about 'changes' - I always change my clothes every week. LOL. Jokin! ;-). We all suffer from a fear of the un-known; changing our comfort zone, however sad and lonely it may be. At least we know to expect nothing, rather than take a chance on excitement and love. Funny lot, aint we? Very nicely put. Love, Ray xx
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
Comment from Minglement
You are soooo creative! And so right. You relate a terrific message here, and do it so well with your mirrored tetractys. Love the illustration. Well done!
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You are soooo creative! And so right. You relate a terrific message here, and do it so well with your mirrored tetractys. Love the illustration. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
Comment from Judian James
This is good Sue. It's an interesting format with a different look because of it. I don't know if I would have ended with "eyes" but I did like it and your choice of artwork was perfect.
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This is good Sue. It's an interesting format with a different look because of it. I don't know if I would have ended with "eyes" but I did like it and your choice of artwork was perfect.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009