CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "Dressed for Love"A collection of poetry
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Comment from NightWriter
"Dressed for Love" is a beautifully written short poem. I liked the words, masquerade party, because that's exactly what they look like with the black color in their face. What beautiful music they make and such bright colors too.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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"Dressed for Love" is a beautifully written short poem. I liked the words, masquerade party, because that's exactly what they look like with the black color in their face. What beautiful music they make and such bright colors too.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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Yes, their song is a delight to hear. Thank you very much for your lovely review. Very much appreciated, Sue
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, I love a Cardinal bird! I see females more than males, but only males have this bright red color! Beautiful tribute to this rare phenomenon, your joyful words paint a picture of their own, but the picture is a treasure! Love a metaphor in the second line. A pleasure to read and review. As a haiku, it had a perfect 5/7/5 structure, with good break between the first 2 lines and a stunning satori (Japanese for "moment of insight") in the last line.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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Oh, I love a Cardinal bird! I see females more than males, but only males have this bright red color! Beautiful tribute to this rare phenomenon, your joyful words paint a picture of their own, but the picture is a treasure! Love a metaphor in the second line. A pleasure to read and review. As a haiku, it had a perfect 5/7/5 structure, with good break between the first 2 lines and a stunning satori (Japanese for "moment of insight") in the last line.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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yeltel, the cardinal is my favorite N. American bird. They are precious and so beautiful. I've been practicing my haiku for about a week (not posting) because I felt a weakness in my previous ones, but must say that I felt this one had the goods that I had been wanting to fulfill. Thank you so much for your lovely review. So glad you liked my satori. With regards, Sue
Comment from G.B. Smith
This Hikau of yours is simply superb.
In Hawaii where I lived for so long, we had cardinals that were brought over from the mainland. I had two pair that lived there with us for the ten years that we lived in that home. They were wonderful.
Nicely done
Bear
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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This Hikau of yours is simply superb.
In Hawaii where I lived for so long, we had cardinals that were brought over from the mainland. I had two pair that lived there with us for the ten years that we lived in that home. They were wonderful.
Nicely done
Bear
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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What a great story!! You had the pair for ten years?? Awesome and lucky you! Thank you so much for your great review and lovely compliment. With regards, Sue
Comment from skye
What a beautiful bird, with his lovely red color.
I especially like the idea of a masquerade party.
You have captured the beauty of this bird in the cold cold winter.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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What a beautiful bird, with his lovely red color.
I especially like the idea of a masquerade party.
You have captured the beauty of this bird in the cold cold winter.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Hello skye...so glad you enjoyed this haiku and my pretty bird - ha! Thank you for your lovely review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from gjensen
This is one of the best haiku's I've read on fanstory. I love everything about it. It manages to say so much in so few words. "Vestment lures a spring lover" : Wonderful! The last line is also great --- funny yet with an element of truth. (Thanks for the interesting author notes.) Bravo!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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This is one of the best haiku's I've read on fanstory. I love everything about it. It manages to say so much in so few words. "Vestment lures a spring lover" : Wonderful! The last line is also great --- funny yet with an element of truth. (Thanks for the interesting author notes.) Bravo!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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I am so humbled with your highest regard for this poem and your compliments! You're words keep me so encouraged to keep writing haiku. And I thank you for that. With warmest regards, Sue :-))
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Sixteezkid,
I enjoyed this beautiful Haiku poem.
Good word choice and syllable count - great
imagery ... masquerade party.
Cardinals are a favorite of mine. I have them
in my yard - now I'll know which ones are male
vs. female.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards, LateBloomer
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Hello Sixteezkid,
I enjoyed this beautiful Haiku poem.
Good word choice and syllable count - great
imagery ... masquerade party.
Cardinals are a favorite of mine. I have them
in my yard - now I'll know which ones are male
vs. female.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
Comment from FredCollingwood
sixties,
This haiku has it all. It's beautiful, it's about nature; it has proper morae and a clear kigo. Few haiku on FS meet the standards of a traditional haiku. Great job. I really liked it.
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sixties,
This haiku has it all. It's beautiful, it's about nature; it has proper morae and a clear kigo. Few haiku on FS meet the standards of a traditional haiku. Great job. I really liked it.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
Comment from darrenchelseafan86
Hi there,
another one!!
Great poem. The picture helps a great deal.
Masquerade sums up this bird beautifully.
Not an easy poem to write, but agian you have achieved it.
regards
Darren
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Hi there,
another one!!
Great poem. The picture helps a great deal.
Masquerade sums up this bird beautifully.
Not an easy poem to write, but agian you have achieved it.
regards
Darren
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
Comment from bard owl
I love cardinals. We have six mated pairs that frequent our bird feeder. The males look so flashy and the females, gentle in their muted hues. I don't think birds get much more magnificent than the cardinals. Super the imagery in this one. Blessings, Linda
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I love cardinals. We have six mated pairs that frequent our bird feeder. The males look so flashy and the females, gentle in their muted hues. I don't think birds get much more magnificent than the cardinals. Super the imagery in this one. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
Comment from Hitcher
Is that how it works, I'll have to get myself a sack of seed and a beautiful red suit, ha ha. This is en excellent haiku friend, well done, you shine!
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Is that how it works, I'll have to get myself a sack of seed and a beautiful red suit, ha ha. This is en excellent haiku friend, well done, you shine!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009