CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from MJMuraco
Your poem was full of images of a person who can't sleep and you did a great job with following the pattern of acrostic poetry. Very nice flow. Good luck with the contest.
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Your poem was full of images of a person who can't sleep and you did a great job with following the pattern of acrostic poetry. Very nice flow. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from sara-beth
This is a good one sixteez kid! I like your topic, it's something that happens to me....and what a great piece of artwork you chose, that is really something! Good luck to you!
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This is a good one sixteez kid! I like your topic, it's something that happens to me....and what a great piece of artwork you chose, that is really something! Good luck to you!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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Hi sara-beth! I really appreciate your review and glad you enjoyed this poem. Best to you, Sue
Comment from Jazh
This is a great poem - very enjoyable. I always know when an acrostic is good when I forget that it's an acrostic while I'm reading. You describe the very familiar state of insomnia well - you obviously know what you're talking about. Good luck with the contest. :)
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This is a great poem - very enjoyable. I always know when an acrostic is good when I forget that it's an acrostic while I'm reading. You describe the very familiar state of insomnia well - you obviously know what you're talking about. Good luck with the contest. :)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from bard owl
Insomnia is SO frustrating. I just lay awake some nights, usually obsessing about something trivial until I finally get up and do something besides trying to fall asleep. And you are so right! Yawns lie! Best of luck in the contest with this clever entry. Blessings to you, Linda
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Insomnia is SO frustrating. I just lay awake some nights, usually obsessing about something trivial until I finally get up and do something besides trying to fall asleep. And you are so right! Yawns lie! Best of luck in the contest with this clever entry. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from Hitcher
I'm not surprised he cannot sleep with all the visitors he's getting, love the artwork Sue. A rhyming Acrostic always goes down well with me, a great little read, cleverly thought out, I like Insomnia, it a very cool poem!
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I'm not surprised he cannot sleep with all the visitors he's getting, love the artwork Sue. A rhyming Acrostic always goes down well with me, a great little read, cleverly thought out, I like Insomnia, it a very cool poem!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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Great pic, huh? Ha! Yes, your comfort zone.....the rhyme! Thanks much for your review, Hitch. :-) Sue
Comment from jeslaf
This is one of the forms that challenges me the most; it's hard to make the lines blend, not seem forced/halted, but you did a fine job here, smooth flow, and I like your sprinkle of rhyme. :)
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This is one of the forms that challenges me the most; it's hard to make the lines blend, not seem forced/halted, but you did a fine job here, smooth flow, and I like your sprinkle of rhyme. :)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from joan marie
A word I am eradicating from my vocabulary a little at a time. Good acrostic with nice rhymes. Lots of folks will relate to this. Good luck, joan marie
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A word I am eradicating from my vocabulary a little at a time. Good acrostic with nice rhymes. Lots of folks will relate to this. Good luck, joan marie
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from grassroots08
I feel your pain and torture here. What a great picture. I have been told that some of my writing tells a good enough story and the picture isn't needed. Yours is great either way. The picture tells it all, and your writing backs it up. Cheers, Don
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I feel your pain and torture here. What a great picture. I have been told that some of my writing tells a good enough story and the picture isn't needed. Yours is great either way. The picture tells it all, and your writing backs it up. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from Roisin
Well this one is calling to me this morning after a night of not being able to sleep! I tossed and turned and was exhausted but sleep just wouldn't come. Your poem captures this perfectly with great rhymes and rhythm. A great acrostic. Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards.
Roisin
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Well this one is calling to me this morning after a night of not being able to sleep! I tossed and turned and was exhausted but sleep just wouldn't come. Your poem captures this perfectly with great rhymes and rhythm. A great acrostic. Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good morning Sue. Hey friend I enjoyed this acrostic and was able to read it since I wasn't able to sleep. hahah Good luck in the contest, Loyd :)
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Good morning Sue. Hey friend I enjoyed this acrostic and was able to read it since I wasn't able to sleep. hahah Good luck in the contest, Loyd :)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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Hi Loyd, I wrote it at 2:00 a.m.! HA! Of course, I do stay up late, but sometimes I do have insomnia. Thanks much for your review. Best to you, Sue