Comment from Brandenpaul

Excellent

Ypu made it seem so easy to write with rules. I thought it was fun piece that flowed so easily. Of course the pic was a perfect addition.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2009

Comment from DreamChaser

Excellent

You display many emotions well in this poem. The anticipation, the thrill, the longing, and the defeat. Excellent concept of the ups and downs of gambling. Attention holding and well written.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2009

Comment from ulster3

Excellent

Hi sixteez.
You hid those words so very well. This is up to your usual par. Excellent work!!!! Sorry I haven't been on much. Got a touch of flu. People do play for hours once they start. lol. Fondly, rebecca

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009

Hi Ulster, by reading your profile, it sure does look like you were busy! And then the flu? Hope you are feeling much better. Thanks very much for your great comments and review! Always appreciated..Sue

Comment from JoAnna Lee

Excellent

Wonderful job on this!!! Nice rhyme and rhythm, flowing swiftly as the story is told. You managed to use the required words without having any of the appear forced. BRAVO!!! I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

Thanks for sharing,
Donna

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009

Donna, this was the first time I tried this contest. Sure was a trip! I really appreciate your great review and compliments! With regards, Sue

Comment from Mr edd

Excellent

Its so true "Long in the chin" describes That horrible feeling you get when you've been wiped out. And then I realized that this is for a contest and you have to get the chosen words in. That just made it extra special well done.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009

Mr. edd, one time I was playing blackjack and was up $700.00. Got kinda bored after many hours and went with a friend over to the Roulette table. $700.00 GONE!! HA!! Always the "should quit when I was ahead" thing. A lot of fun, though. Thanks very much for this great review and your compliments! Sue

Comment from EdwardVal

Excellent

This was a very creative piece and you seemed to have followed the guidelines well except for the one word. I very enjoyable read. Take Care

E'Val

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

well written piece of writing about the rush of losing one's money and still hanging in for a win. Verses flow smoothly and give a clear picture of life in a casino.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I didn't even notice this was an include the words challenge until I got to the author's notes - you have certainly included the words seamlessly
The speaker seems to have fallen under the spell of gambling - always the chance of the big pay off luring people to play one more hand despite their losses and despite the odds always being in the house's favor - this is conveyed well

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009

Yes, some people sadly gamble just knowing it's "my time". I love to play blackjack. But always with a limit. Great entertainment, yet I take it very serious! HA!! Thank you for your review and for your great compliment! (I'm so back-up on responses, I don't know how it happened!). Yikes....and my inbox is full. Better get crackin'. Sue

Comment from jshep

Excellent

Great job of using the required words, Sue, with a true message. If one gambles, go with the idea you have so much to spend and it is pure entertainment for surely the intelligent know the odds will never be in their favor. Great thought provoking write that had great flow and rhyme. Joyce

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

Comment from Diny

Excellent

WOW thios was really very good with the words you had to choose from!- I see you are making yourself at home here- good! Write on !-Diny

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009