CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Just2Write
I thought this senryu was very clever. The graphics helped too, but were not necessary to envision what would happen if you stick a fork into the toaster. Consider changing the word knife to fork to match the graphic.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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I thought this senryu was very clever. The graphics helped too, but were not necessary to envision what would happen if you stick a fork into the toaster. Consider changing the word knife to fork to match the graphic.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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Just2Write, I just changed it to fork! And thanks for that. When writing it, I kept going back and forth between using knife or fork. I liked knife because of the two "K's" (kitchen - knife next to each other) and didn't even pay attention to the "K" at the end of fork! Ha! So thanks for that. I like it much better. :-)) Sue
Comment from sara-beth
That is funny, and you know what......I might be one of those people that would do such a thing! Once, I got paint on my husband's cordless phone, and I was so worried that he would be mad that I ran it under the kitchen tap while scrubbing off the paint......you can imagine what happened! Duh! That was a long time ago, though, hmmm I also reached in front of the steaming tea kettle and burned the skin off my finger, so I guess I'll never learn to be careful......good luck to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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That is funny, and you know what......I might be one of those people that would do such a thing! Once, I got paint on my husband's cordless phone, and I was so worried that he would be mad that I ran it under the kitchen tap while scrubbing off the paint......you can imagine what happened! Duh! That was a long time ago, though, hmmm I also reached in front of the steaming tea kettle and burned the skin off my finger, so I guess I'll never learn to be careful......good luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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sara-beth, you are a very dangerous person! LOL!! Thanks for sharing those anecdotes of pain! And thank you for your very generous review. :-)) Sue
Comment from Susan E. Pennycuff
I don't know hun, but at my house ... we call them thar thingamajiggys... forks lol
I can't tell you how many times I have done this and i know it is dangerous... I guess one day I will learn the hard way.
good luck in the contest dear.
Suzi
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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I don't know hun, but at my house ... we call them thar thingamajiggys... forks lol
I can't tell you how many times I have done this and i know it is dangerous... I guess one day I will learn the hard way.
good luck in the contest dear.
Suzi
Comment Written 06-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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Finally!! Someone admits it! But, now in you're in for a lecture - Ha! Do yourself a favor and keep a wooden spoon handy- LOL!! Thanks for your very kind review and. ...ahem...fun story. :-)) Sue.
Comment from babylonia
LOL yeah, but it is so tempting. maybe if you use a fork instead .... nah! same result. made me smile. made me laugh. keep up the good work~
good luck~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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LOL yeah, but it is so tempting. maybe if you use a fork instead .... nah! same result. made me smile. made me laugh. keep up the good work~
good luck~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 06-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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Barbara, yeah a fork would work just great! As long as you want a 110 volt high! HA!! I swear I still see people do this occasionally and it makes me insane! What are they thinking?? Gotta laugh at some of the crazy things we do, though - ha! Cheers, Sue
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sue,
yeah, they still do it. it is crazy. the problem is they aren't thinking OR they think it could never happen to me. when i was young i used to read stories all the time in the paper about someon doing something like that or doing the dishes during a lightening storm. touching too much metal at once and acting as an electric conductor. poof ... no brains.
i think houses are better insulated now but back then ... oh well. some just never learn.
love,
barbara
Comment from NadineM
Oops! Not a good idea! Dangerously funny is this write and contest entry. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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Oops! Not a good idea! Dangerously funny is this write and contest entry. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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Nadine, SHOCKING story, huh? Ha! Thanks for your very kind review and fun comments. :-)) Sue
Comment from Hitcher
I bet it's happened to you! Come on Sue, come clean friend, this little piece of humor is a lost memory that just resurfaced? Ha ha. I think it is a great bit of humor for the contest, NO! It has never happened to me, Never! Ha ha.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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I bet it's happened to you! Come on Sue, come clean friend, this little piece of humor is a lost memory that just resurfaced? Ha ha. I think it is a great bit of humor for the contest, NO! It has never happened to me, Never! Ha ha.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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When I was a child, I DID do it and my mother freaked! But, still cannot believe that people still do it till this day. I've seen it!! And, yes, I yell at them! HA! Thanks for your vote of confidence that it's a "contender" .....Suc
Comment from AlvinTEthington
I must be really dense. I don't get the humor in this. Why would an ambulance arrive for using a kitchen knife to get bread out of the toaster? If the person hurt himself or herself, that needs to be made clear. I also don't get the connection between the title and the poem. If you can explain the humor in this to me, or who your intended reader or target audience is, I would be happy to take another look. But, right now, I, at least, just don't "get it."
SECOND REVIEW:
The author explained to me this was about electrocution. Although I do not find that amusing, the first rating was unfair, and I have raised it accordingly.
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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I must be really dense. I don't get the humor in this. Why would an ambulance arrive for using a kitchen knife to get bread out of the toaster? If the person hurt himself or herself, that needs to be made clear. I also don't get the connection between the title and the poem. If you can explain the humor in this to me, or who your intended reader or target audience is, I would be happy to take another look. But, right now, I, at least, just don't "get it."
SECOND REVIEW:
The author explained to me this was about electrocution. Although I do not find that amusing, the first rating was unfair, and I have raised it accordingly.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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Okay, I have to be honest here and say, "You are joking, right????" It is quite known that many, many people have been seriously injured or even killed by using a metal object (usually a knife or fork) to dig out a stuck piece of bread in a toaster. "ELECTROCUTED". The connection between the title and the poem is when you get injured, people call 911 for an ambulance. I cannot even believe I'm spelling this out for you. Sorry you didn't get it. Sue
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I have never had that experience, nor have I know anyone who has. I will raise the rating now that you have explained it, but please review the rules for responding to reviews; this was inappropriate.
Comment from aviddbrut
shocking little haiku here, sixteezkid! electrifying reading experience. quite arresting actually. good contest entry...good luck in the contest.
david
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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shocking little haiku here, sixteezkid! electrifying reading experience. quite arresting actually. good contest entry...good luck in the contest.
david
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2009
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Love this "hair-raising" review! HA! Thank you very much :-)) Sue
Comment from adewpearl
I laughed out loud at that one - I wondered what the final line would be after I read the concrete image and thought uh oh. LOL Ambulance comes - of course!!! this is in good form and utterly hilarious in a gallows humor kinda way.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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I laughed out loud at that one - I wondered what the final line would be after I read the concrete image and thought uh oh. LOL Ambulance comes - of course!!! this is in good form and utterly hilarious in a gallows humor kinda way.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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So glad you laughed out loud!! Ha! That makes it all worth while. I was eating toast and wondering what to write about in the contest. And voila! Thanks for your great review, Brooke. :-)) Sue
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What would make writing and life worthwhile today? I know, making Brooke laugh out loud. :-D
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Ha! Yes, yes..I admit, it was all for you, Brooke LOL!!
Comment from venusanblue
Haha, I really enjoyed this poem. It told a whole story with a whole lot of funny visuals. So you were toast too,haha. Nice, V,xxx
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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Haha, I really enjoyed this poem. It told a whole story with a whole lot of funny visuals. So you were toast too,haha. Nice, V,xxx
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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That's a good one...."you were toast"!! HA! Thanks very much for your most kind review. Regards, Sue