CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 124 "A Promise"A collection of poetry
40 total reviews
Comment from Nanny 6
Beautifully written triolet about hopes and dreams, burdens lifted and a brand new start. When a poem speaks of so much in so few words, I consider it a very well written piece of art. Judy
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Beautifully written triolet about hopes and dreams, burdens lifted and a brand new start. When a poem speaks of so much in so few words, I consider it a very well written piece of art. Judy
Comment Written 17-Dec-2008
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Good job on this poem. It gives hope. I enjoyed reading this. It was smooth flowing and your word choice made it a effortless read. I found no errors.
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Good job on this poem. It gives hope. I enjoyed reading this. It was smooth flowing and your word choice made it a effortless read. I found no errors.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2008
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
Excellent use of the rhyme scheme and the choral tonal quality gives it a forceful yet gentle and powerful quality. There are no errors that i could find, either in structure or in grammar, and it was a pleasure to review this work.
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Excellent use of the rhyme scheme and the choral tonal quality gives it a forceful yet gentle and powerful quality. There are no errors that i could find, either in structure or in grammar, and it was a pleasure to review this work.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2008
Comment from dportwood
Sixteezkid,
Excellent triolet with an uplifting message of hope. Rhyming perfectly done and repetition right on. Good job.
Duane
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Sixteezkid,
Excellent triolet with an uplifting message of hope. Rhyming perfectly done and repetition right on. Good job.
Duane
Comment Written 17-Dec-2008
Comment from TheDon
Hooray! A poem to contrast the usual angst! Thanks for introducing this scheme to me.
I hope this helps and good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2008
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Hooray! A poem to contrast the usual angst! Thanks for introducing this scheme to me.
I hope this helps and good luck.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2008
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TheDon, so glad you liked this work! (and with an explanation mark, to boot - ha!)....Thank you for your most generous review and lovely words! :-)) Sue
Comment from elainec4
sixteezkid,
Really works!! It's inspiring and uplifting--and the format underscores your message. Great job. Thanks for sharing with us. elaine
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sixteezkid,
Really works!! It's inspiring and uplifting--and the format underscores your message. Great job. Thanks for sharing with us. elaine
Comment Written 17-Dec-2008
Comment from Caitlin
An excellent triolet that carries a positive uplifting message behind it! The rhyme and rhythm were spot on, and I liked your personification of time as a friend (which makes a big difference to its usual personification as a thief or death-like deity).
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An excellent triolet that carries a positive uplifting message behind it! The rhyme and rhythm were spot on, and I liked your personification of time as a friend (which makes a big difference to its usual personification as a thief or death-like deity).
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
Comment from RSayre45
What a wonderful poem! There is so much power in knowledge of hope. I think you did a great job conveying this in your poem.
Hard times are that but then hope steps in and there is an end in sight, the knowledge that hard times will not last forever. This is the interpretation I take from your wonderful writing. Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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What a wonderful poem! There is so much power in knowledge of hope. I think you did a great job conveying this in your poem.
Hard times are that but then hope steps in and there is an end in sight, the knowledge that hard times will not last forever. This is the interpretation I take from your wonderful writing. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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RSayre, you interpreted it exactly as intended. To be honest, yesterday was not good, but I always know that in time, all will be ok. And, Voila! Today I'm great. Ha!! So glad you really enjoyed this poem. And thank you for your very kind review and words! With warm regards, Sue
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It is so exciting when my interpretation matches the interpretation that the author intended! Thanks so much for sharing this with me.
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
Your wording was well chosen and the presentation excellent. No spag noted nor improvements to suggest. Very well done. Enjoyed your poem
Brian S. Pratt
fantasy author
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Your wording was well chosen and the presentation excellent. No spag noted nor improvements to suggest. Very well done. Enjoyed your poem
Brian S. Pratt
fantasy author
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Simply wonderful. I liked the pic, too... and that you did not name the poem hope. The repeat lines flow nicely, not glaring refrain. Good strong message. BRAVO!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Simply wonderful. I liked the pic, too... and that you did not name the poem hope. The repeat lines flow nicely, not glaring refrain. Good strong message. BRAVO!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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JoAnna Lee, so glad you enjoyed this! (ha! - glad I didn't name it hope - no way). Glad you liked the punctuation changes in the repeated lines. I really appreciate your review and your very specific comments. With warmest regards, Sue