CSP: A Collection of Poems
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29 total reviews
Comment from Charles Keith
Hi Sue,
I am not over familiar with this form of poetry. I guess it is a formalised structure, which seems to be very popular among the current population of 'poets' on this site.
I wouls be interested to know whether this is considered free verse.
Nice style , excellent woding.
Keith
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Hi Sue,
I am not over familiar with this form of poetry. I guess it is a formalised structure, which seems to be very popular among the current population of 'poets' on this site.
I wouls be interested to know whether this is considered free verse.
Nice style , excellent woding.
Keith
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
Comment from honeytree
"Doubt
Disruptive, Invasive
Lingering, Deceiving, Negating
Thievery of clear thought
Indecision"
When we have doubt we certainly
are not thinking in a clear headed way.
To make decisions we must be clear headed
in every way.
Honeytree
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"Doubt
Disruptive, Invasive
Lingering, Deceiving, Negating
Thievery of clear thought
Indecision"
When we have doubt we certainly
are not thinking in a clear headed way.
To make decisions we must be clear headed
in every way.
Honeytree
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
Comment from bluefly
Hi Six,
This is a very interesting and multifaceted look at the condition of doubt. Very well presented in this modified Cinquain. Good job. Scott
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Hi Six,
This is a very interesting and multifaceted look at the condition of doubt. Very well presented in this modified Cinquain. Good job. Scott
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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bluefly, so glad that you enjoyed this work. And I thank you for your very kind review and comments! With regards, Sue
Comment from amada
This is a very clever and truthful round up of words in this heavy subject of doubt. "A thievery of clear thought" is my favorite phrase.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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This is a very clever and truthful round up of words in this heavy subject of doubt. "A thievery of clear thought" is my favorite phrase.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Yes, that dirty doubt! Like a thief, it is. Very glad you enjoyed this piece and thank you for your very kind review and comments! With regards, Sue
Comment from rama devi
Second review:
AH, yes, thank you for clarifying that. I am still getting aquainted with this form. Rating amended accordingly!
Original review (Four stars)
Thanks for posting the detailed explanation of his form in your comments.
I think this is a finely composed and well presented work.
However, I also think it could be improved if you alter line three and use a sentence describing the action of doubting rather than listing three synonyms with "ing" taking up three syllables in that line.
It is very good, but has the potential to be excellent. Thus the honest four stars.
Artwork choice is apt.
No other nits.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Second review:
AH, yes, thank you for clarifying that. I am still getting aquainted with this form. Rating amended accordingly!
Original review (Four stars)
Thanks for posting the detailed explanation of his form in your comments.
I think this is a finely composed and well presented work.
However, I also think it could be improved if you alter line three and use a sentence describing the action of doubting rather than listing three synonyms with "ing" taking up three syllables in that line.
It is very good, but has the potential to be excellent. Thus the honest four stars.
Artwork choice is apt.
No other nits.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Rama devi, thank you very much for your input.
I have read a few descriptions of the modified cinquain, as, I strive to not waiver from format. Here is what I basically found: "line 3 - three words (verbs) describing an action related to the subject.
From what I understand, the suggestion you offer is for the "true quatrain". Did I miss something? Always appreciate and respect your reviews and comments!
With regards,
Sue
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rama devi, thank you so much for your change of review. I am presuming you agree with the modified cinquain descriptions I gave you. But, I thank you for your wanting my work to be improved! With utmost respect, Sue
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Welcome!
Hope you do not mind my asking, but can you review my most recent post if you have time? It is one of my first attempts at fictioN!
Thanks.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
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Have you been told lately that , "you're so cool"??? Ha! You are! First rate.
Sue
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Thanks sweetie, so are you!~
:)
Comment from rmdelta
sue,
I swear, sue. You can write about almost anything, and in almost any way. Wow, what a great talent you are. It is always a pleasure to see the "1 New Message," display and find it is one of your writings. Thanks for writing, and thanks for letting me be one of your fans.
Reggie
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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sue,
I swear, sue. You can write about almost anything, and in almost any way. Wow, what a great talent you are. It is always a pleasure to see the "1 New Message," display and find it is one of your writings. Thanks for writing, and thanks for letting me be one of your fans.
Reggie
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Reggie, knock me over with a feather! This is the best compliment I've ever heard!! And now more encouraged than ever. So glad you enjoyed this and I thank you for the greatest review ever. :-)) Sue
Comment from lovemyta
Very good. Each word is exactly what you said it would do. The poem indicates how you feel and the adjectives describe it. The verbs express it. Very good job.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Very good. Each word is exactly what you said it would do. The poem indicates how you feel and the adjectives describe it. The verbs express it. Very good job.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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lovemyta, thank you for your very kind review and specific comments. Most appreciated, Sue
Comment from Gramma Kathy
I know this subject all too well, and you have described it perfectly.
I especially like this phrase: "Thievery of clear thought." When I doubt, I cannot think clearly; the doubts supersede all sense.
Thank you for this great lesson in Cinquain poetry.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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I know this subject all too well, and you have described it perfectly.
I especially like this phrase: "Thievery of clear thought." When I doubt, I cannot think clearly; the doubts supersede all sense.
Thank you for this great lesson in Cinquain poetry.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Yes, it is a thief of clear thinking. Had a dose of that yesterday and this morning. So, had to expose it for what it is!! HA! So glad you enjoyed this piece. And thank you for your most kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Hitcher
Something on you mind friend? You know what I say, When in doubt get the flock out. HA
You did a great job here Sue, I like it a lot, well thought out and cleverly pieced together, you are a machine, pumping out all these different styles of writing. Keep them coming, VERY COOL!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Something on you mind friend? You know what I say, When in doubt get the flock out. HA
You did a great job here Sue, I like it a lot, well thought out and cleverly pieced together, you are a machine, pumping out all these different styles of writing. Keep them coming, VERY COOL!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Nothin' that a bit of poetry won't cure!! HA! Yeah, and this poem told the doubt to get the flock out, too! I'm going to try every style I can. Hitch, did you ever notice this writing thing can be a bit addictive? LOL!!! Thanks so much for your great review and comments. Your friend, Sue
Comment from jeslaf
This is perfect! I thank you for the introduction of the modified cinquain, I will try one myself. Your descriptive words eloquently capture this foul emotion. Bravo!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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This is perfect! I thank you for the introduction of the modified cinquain, I will try one myself. Your descriptive words eloquently capture this foul emotion. Bravo!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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jeslaf, so happy you liked this format. I find it extremely helpful to use this "seemingly simple" format to help me with honing and with word choice for my work, as well as being a nice piece of poetry. I would encourage you to give it a go!! Thank you for your very kind review and lovely comments! :-)) Sue