CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 129 "Is it Possible"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Diny
To share an embrace
in another language..
You dear poet are indeed a writing in the language of poetry- feeling emotion and seeing feelings in your surroundings- Enoightening others to the cause of art- in evryday life- Well done again- you are quite the welcomed addition to the site- Write on-Diny
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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To share an embrace
in another language..
You dear poet are indeed a writing in the language of poetry- feeling emotion and seeing feelings in your surroundings- Enoightening others to the cause of art- in evryday life- Well done again- you are quite the welcomed addition to the site- Write on-Diny
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Diny, you've got me blushing again!! Ha! I can tell you that since I came to fanstory...what an incredible journey. It's meant so much. I have learned more than I ever thought. I am feeling freer to write and just let it rip! HA!
Thanks SO much for your awesome review. You write such encouraging words.
Hand on heart,
Sue
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I recognize a fellow spirit in wordery... I prefer free verse to ryhme most of the time- Am currently struggling with a Christmas poem and got a 3!- Whew- we all are still learning- Di
Comment from cmay44
Hi dear one
I usually don't care for most free verse poems but this one is superb and it's hard to imagine what you'll do in this genre in the future. Congratulations! The six stars speak for my opinion.
God bless you and MERRY CHRISTMAS TO YOUR AND YOURS,
love from
Carolyn
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Hi dear one
I usually don't care for most free verse poems but this one is superb and it's hard to imagine what you'll do in this genre in the future. Congratulations! The six stars speak for my opinion.
God bless you and MERRY CHRISTMAS TO YOUR AND YOURS,
love from
Carolyn
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Carolyn, I am overjoyed that you liked this work! And for it to receive your highest esteem is such an honor! Thank you for your wonderful review and most kind words. And Merry Christmas to you and yours, also. With my warmest regards, Sue
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Good questions. I liked the paradoxical nature of this fine free-form poem. I think I'd answer "yes" to most of these questions... don't you?
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
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Good questions. I liked the paradoxical nature of this fine free-form poem. I think I'd answer "yes" to most of these questions... don't you?
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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JoAnna, I sure would love to tag a "yes" on these! I'm so happy you enjoyed this work. And thank you for your very kind review. With warm regards, Sue
Comment from Scarlettdreams
I think so . . . I think all things are possible when we put our minds to it. smiles. You capture the possibilities well here. Bravo Bravo
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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I think so . . . I think all things are possible when we put our minds to it. smiles. You capture the possibilities well here. Bravo Bravo
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Ahhh..."capturing the possibilities"...that sounds wonderful! Thank you for such a lovely, kind review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from jamar2
Well my dear I am no expert on free verse, but you have done well with this first attempt I must say, this has encouraged me to have a go, this piece reads well, love the last line though,TO DIE AND STILL LIVE as its so true, well as I believe. well done.
jamar.
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Well my dear I am no expert on free verse, but you have done well with this first attempt I must say, this has encouraged me to have a go, this piece reads well, love the last line though,TO DIE AND STILL LIVE as its so true, well as I believe. well done.
jamar.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Jamar, I really would love for you to have a go. I just sat down, closed my eyes and felt it. Almost didn't post it and I thought, why not, this is where we grow. Had so many have such good input that it is much more streamlined now. I am SO glad you enjoyed it. Can't wait to see your first. It is SO liberating!! And no matter if you're unsure about it, put it up here. Great experience. With warmest regards, Sue
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Thanks my dear, well dont know yet if you have seen my effort but its up there, it was fun doing it , but I didnt know what the heck I was doing? lol. thanks for the reply.
Comment from Nicnac
Wow, Sue!
This is lovely!
Your free verse is multi-layered and speaks volumes!
I personally like the minimal punctuation approach you have taken here. I think the more simplistic a piece like this is - the more profound the feelings come across. (jmho) The layout, artwork and font are nice.
I love this. You have done a fabulous job on your first free verse. You have styled it so poetically, with softly flowing words.
To hear only
those words
which alight
the soul
yet do not sear -- WOW!
To die and still live -- Brilliant closing line! We all wish to have our memories live on after we are gone.
Very memorable poem. Lovely piece.
Blessings,
~Nic
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Wow, Sue!
This is lovely!
Your free verse is multi-layered and speaks volumes!
I personally like the minimal punctuation approach you have taken here. I think the more simplistic a piece like this is - the more profound the feelings come across. (jmho) The layout, artwork and font are nice.
I love this. You have done a fabulous job on your first free verse. You have styled it so poetically, with softly flowing words.
To hear only
those words
which alight
the soul
yet do not sear -- WOW!
To die and still live -- Brilliant closing line! We all wish to have our memories live on after we are gone.
Very memorable poem. Lovely piece.
Blessings,
~Nic
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Nicnac, so glad you enjoyed this work! Was a very unique experience while writing it. I think I may get hooked on free verse (even though I still love confined formats). Valerie Julia Ann helped me with tweaking the stanza breaks. And I did take out the punctuation marks. Much cleaner and easier on the eye of the reader. Thank you so much for your great review and highlighting the phrases you liked! With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Mike K2
To question mark or not. Personally I feel that it is a matter of choice. I do like how you broke the verses up and that should be enough. I did enjoy the imagery as it still has flow and seems quite natural.
It is possible to go from the mundane to the extrodinary, but someone where along the line expect the mundane to come back. You can yell over the canyons edge but most likelikey it will yell back exactly the same. I enjoyed thinking about your questions.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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To question mark or not. Personally I feel that it is a matter of choice. I do like how you broke the verses up and that should be enough. I did enjoy the imagery as it still has flow and seems quite natural.
It is possible to go from the mundane to the extrodinary, but someone where along the line expect the mundane to come back. You can yell over the canyons edge but most likelikey it will yell back exactly the same. I enjoyed thinking about your questions.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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K2, Had a lot of help here with advice. Valerie Julia Ann helped with the way the verses got broke up. A HUGE difference is made. Glad you liked the imagery there. Yes, I'm going to go empty the anger out when I scream!! HA!!! Thanks for your great review. :-) Sue
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I think this is a good work that beckons on the reader to think. It sets out to ask questions and not give answers. The writer's thoughts are beautifully expressed through this plethora of questions which do not have single answers. Good work. Kudos
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I think this is a good work that beckons on the reader to think. It sets out to ask questions and not give answers. The writer's thoughts are beautifully expressed through this plethora of questions which do not have single answers. Good work. Kudos
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Perp, Thank you for your very kind review and comments. So glad you said it "beckons the reader to think". That is THE best! With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from jmyron
As this is not Haiku or Senryu, I see no reason that you can't add punctuation. The beauty of free verse is that you are not limited, or perhaps confined, is a better word to a physical/rhyme format.In a sonnet, for example, you must rhyme, and it must be in a given # of lines and stanza's. In free verse, you place your line breaks where you wish, and structure the layout as you wish. as a freeverse, you have done well. The story line is great. My only comment on content is in this stanza.
To brush off guilt
as specks
on a jacket's lapel
I think I see where you are comming from, but in my case I don't think that I would like myself for doing so.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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As this is not Haiku or Senryu, I see no reason that you can't add punctuation. The beauty of free verse is that you are not limited, or perhaps confined, is a better word to a physical/rhyme format.In a sonnet, for example, you must rhyme, and it must be in a given # of lines and stanza's. In free verse, you place your line breaks where you wish, and structure the layout as you wish. as a freeverse, you have done well. The story line is great. My only comment on content is in this stanza.
To brush off guilt
as specks
on a jacket's lapel
I think I see where you are comming from, but in my case I don't think that I would like myself for doing so.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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jmyron, thank you for your very kind review and all of your great comments. Yes, that is what I'm finding with free verse....the liberty of confined formats (which I also love). Just another world of words opening up!! I think I get where you may be coming from on the "guilt" stanza, but in my context, it is "inappropriate" guilt we should not bear, but do. Thanks again, much appreciated. With regards, Sue
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Hi Sixteezkid,
I like how you have laid out this poem, as entirely your own creation.
The imagery is wonderful and again most original.
I like the juxtaposition of possibilities, which you present in each aborted stanza (sentence).
You seem to think in a very original way. I love it.
Kindest regards,
Juliette Chamberlain
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Hi Sixteezkid,
I like how you have laid out this poem, as entirely your own creation.
The imagery is wonderful and again most original.
I like the juxtaposition of possibilities, which you present in each aborted stanza (sentence).
You seem to think in a very original way. I love it.
Kindest regards,
Juliette Chamberlain
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Juliette, Thank you so much for your very kind review and lovely and specific comments. As these words just flowed, I discovered something that I really love. And I certainly appreciate your most encouraging words!
With warmest regards,
Sue