CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 139 "Revisited"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Francis99
The senryu form is new to me. Thanks for intoducng it to me with such a remarkable poem. I have had the experience you describe so succinctly and beautifully. Isn't it great?!
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The senryu form is new to me. Thanks for intoducng it to me with such a remarkable poem. I have had the experience you describe so succinctly and beautifully. Isn't it great?!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Nightwind1
This is quiet and yet lovely. Memories do get lost in time through the years. Then after years someone jumps out of the woodwork and brings it all flowing back.
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This is quiet and yet lovely. Memories do get lost in time through the years. Then after years someone jumps out of the woodwork and brings it all flowing back.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
once again you have produced another excellent little piece. it is well presented i like your choice of artwork it compliments the poem well
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once again you have produced another excellent little piece. it is well presented i like your choice of artwork it compliments the poem well
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Nanny 6
Your poem speaks of the silence two people may experience when they haven't seen each other for a very long time. To get reaquainted, may seem awkward at first, then becomes as if you were never apart. I enjoyed pondering on this Senryu. Judy
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Your poem speaks of the silence two people may experience when they haven't seen each other for a very long time. To get reaquainted, may seem awkward at first, then becomes as if you were never apart. I enjoyed pondering on this Senryu. Judy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from grassroots08
Somehow there is a great deal of thought resident here. I loved this short piece. It more than accomplished what it set out to do. I do not care what others see here, I have two eyes of my own and must honestly say, that for me, this rocked!!! GREAT JOB!. grassroots08
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Somehow there is a great deal of thought resident here. I loved this short piece. It more than accomplished what it set out to do. I do not care what others see here, I have two eyes of my own and must honestly say, that for me, this rocked!!! GREAT JOB!. grassroots08
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from jamar2
Again not enough creativity, its so easy to follow up on comps, doing this does not reflect true talent in someones writng, again you followed the rules of the comp, nothing more.
jamar.
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Again not enough creativity, its so easy to follow up on comps, doing this does not reflect true talent in someones writng, again you followed the rules of the comp, nothing more.
jamar.
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Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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And for me, AGAIN, I do not even come close to understanding the body of your critique.
Jamar, I guess I'm trying to help you to critique! If you give 5 or 6 stars, be SPECIFIC as to why. If you give 3 stars, be SPECIFIC. Give it hell...but give some suggestions as to where you think the work has fallen through.
This is the second time you've said that I followed the rules of format, yet negatively bash without following through on any SUGGESTIONS as to how I could improve on a piece. Again, I have received 3 stars on many of my works, but the reviewer has always backed it up with constructive criticism and suggestions.
You do need to learn to do that. Because that is what this site is all about. Vagueness and a bit of sarcasm is far, far from being a review.
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WHY! dont you understand the body of my critque? it was plain enough what was said in the piece SURF'S UP. it was just put plain and simple, Vaguness, Sarcasm? right lets put it this way, when reading a lot of the religious poems in reviews it gets boring, same old stuff just getting repeated over and over, your poems are mainly on the family,ok they are important and there is no harm in telling people about them, but there comes a time when reviewing the same old stuff gets just plain boring. we all start somewhere yes thats fine, but move on, if you cannot be creative enough to cover any subject and stand out from the crowd then why do it? I would not mind betting that you havent even reviewed one of my pieces? well I can tell you I have seen roughly 12 of your pieces and reviewed around 9 of them, you bang on about doing this that and the other as a reviewer, how many do you review? just a select few i would guess, so dont ever tell me how to review, i was in my way trying to be kind, and will my limited concentration span as such as it is, I do remarably well, ok, you do a comp anyone can follow the rules, try something more challenging and NOT free verse because that is just a cop out for bad writing and no creativity, so weather you have ever bothered to look past your nose, and delved into other peoples work without copying them, you will see there is more to writing on this site, and a darn site better writers than most so called top writers, live and learn, having a select number for a fan base who looks at your work does NOT constitute a good writer, now does that a good enough critque or do you want me to say more? and do me a favour dont review my work, after the insult you just paid me, I dont think I would care to read it.
jamar.
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I rest my case. Your commentary is full of sarcasm, personal presumption and a lot of bitterness.
This is a rant that I could not possibly respond to.
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Now if you would care to LEARN something, take a look at a few other peoples work, people like, NIGHTWIND, LYLE, and especially CURT MONGOLD, these are to name but a few, I will watch with interest your future works to see if you DO learn, and if you learn correctly then you will know by the lesser reviews you get, the average being 9 and your view figures should be around 25/30 then you will know when you have hit the write note in writing, as before and as you have said, this site is for learning, thats what I have done and my poor education has NOW improved because of it, thanks to me listening to others and taking note of critque, and for the kindness of others. now do you think I have been sarcastic......
jamar.
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No you cannot respond to it my dear, because the truth hurts does'nt it.
its people like you that give the site a bad name, taking credit where it aint due is one thing but being so ruddy smug is another.
jamar.
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Just look at my response to Curt and Rami when they gave me critical reviews. Then you can see how they review in such an awesome manner and how I LEARNED from them.
No one can learn from your critiques. 'NUF said. Get over it.
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Your harsh bitterness is very difficult to witness. I do not care to hear from you again. And I do mean that.
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Bye bye, God you are so dam stuck up..... amazing?
jamar
Comment from cmay44
hi Sixteezkid
A lovely senryu
And so short but so full of truth and wisdom. Great job on this. Nothing to change and nice artwork to compliment it.
God bless you
love from
Carolyn
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hi Sixteezkid
A lovely senryu
And so short but so full of truth and wisdom. Great job on this. Nothing to change and nice artwork to compliment it.
God bless you
love from
Carolyn
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Aussie
Nice photograph; simple words that say so much. Just when you thought it was a closed chapter memories came knocking and opened the heart again. I liked your poem very much.
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Nice photograph; simple words that say so much. Just when you thought it was a closed chapter memories came knocking and opened the heart again. I liked your poem very much.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from flea0420
Great haiku! Loved the image of "dusty time". The picture is perfect for setting the tone of this poem. Very well done!
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Great haiku! Loved the image of "dusty time". The picture is perfect for setting the tone of this poem. Very well done!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from raimie
Well written and presented. You managed to convey the surprise of old memories , when they come back to us. Often when we least expect it. Very well done, no spag.
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Well written and presented. You managed to convey the surprise of old memories , when they come back to us. Often when we least expect it. Very well done, no spag.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008